VN Ren'Py Abandoned Life on the Lam with MILF [Demo] [MaxX]

anon280

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Nov 11, 2017
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played the demo and eventually had to skip through text because the dialogues and monologues are far too expositional for any sort of immersive reading.
other peeves are: saying "criminal thugs" is redundant and;
the gunshots were too muted for an enclosed space (a house)

the voyeurism felt forced because of the room service; towels are usually left in the room before guests arrive and almost sure laundry is not a service at such a "quick fuck" motel. in addition sleeping in the nude felt force for sexual content given the awkward relationship between the two

i don't think the writing issues are going to be resolved and instead just carry over in future updates because it's more a style of writing that only experience will absolve over practice

but good luck to the dev, i'm sure you will still get an audience if you fulfil their fetishes
 

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JohnJG

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May 17, 2018
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Not a bad start. Not bad at all. Nice renders and the story is showing some potential. Can definitely see some areas where the characters try to settle on the run but can't predict what's going to happen to them next. :coffee:
 
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holaje12

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On the Lam was my first choice for a name, but then I got to thinking, well yeah, sounds ok, but they are experiencing a whole new way of life. So, Life on the Lam became my second choice. And while considering naming it Life on the Lam, I happen to be having a glass of milk, and it hit me like a bolt of lightning. Milk I love MILF milk, It's deliciously tasty, and it happens to rhyme too. So, you know, there you have it Life on the Lam with MILF.

Truthfully I am flexible. I'd change it if enough people want me to.



It is intentional that he is uses her first name so that it changes the dynamic of their relationship.

" KeyError: u'dad' "
Yeah sorry I'll see what I can do to fix that. I don't use the mod while building the game. It will be fixed in the next release.
Whats up with the female protagonist tag?
Will you include sharing/ntr to the game?
 

rudy007

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I just finished your game. What to say. I find the idea is good, characters are pretty good, writing isn't the best. I see, it's labeled as "demo", it's like a preview, but it's feels like a review. It's moving way too fast. We came from dead dad, to idiot stepdad (or whatever he is) to mom and MC wants jump into bed in 20 minutes of gameplay. You have to cool down after they escaped. Yes, money, first atm and withdraw maximum amount of money, get rid of the car ASAP, change appearance. That is the what you got right. But car should disappear. Or it should be left somewhere not in direction of escape, but not to be found too easy (You need time to escape, car is only to for abstraction and buy you some time.
Game is good, but it's rushed too much. You manage to cover 4 episodes of game in a preview;
Episode 1; home, who are characters, haushold story
Episode 2; mafia arrival, shoot out, escape.
Episode 3; on the road
Episode 4; first real stop and first real talk. (not about affection) short and long term plans. Doing some good things, slowly beginning to see her as woman, not to see her like a creep in bathroom.
Episode 5; begin of the story
You can accelerate or try to make cca 25 minutes of gameplay per episode, and of course don't go longer than 2 months of development. If you can manage this, patreons will come.
 

Saint Blackmoor

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Oct 26, 2017
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First impression: Good potential for a top-notch game. good renders, dialogue, and plot.
I see by looking at the script that quite a few characters are planned.

I'd say this is a good start.
Advice to the DEV.
Be open to suggestions from the peanut gallery, but don't get caught up in the NTR/sharing war that's bound to happen.
From the obviously organized look of the game, you have a diffident idea of what direction you want to game to go, so stick to it.

Game title suggestion:
On the Run
Chase
The Chase
 
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Saint Blackmoor

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the voyeurism felt forced because of the room service; towels are usually left in the room before guests arrive, and almost sure laundry is not a service at such a "quick fuck" motel. in addition sleeping in the nude felt forced for sexual content, given the awkward relationship between the two.

I don't think the writing issues are going to be resolved and instead just carry over in future updates because it's more a style of writing that only experience will absolve over practice.

but good luck to the dev, I'm sure you will still get an audience if you fulfill their fetishes.
This a story.
Wouldn't it get boring to have every game use a formula that's so restrictive that a "quick fuck" motel can't bring you towels and do your laundry? IMO there has been more forethought going into this game than many here.

You have to be flexible in this genre, DEV, and player.
This is not a top 10 best-seller list here where every story went through 5 proofreaders and 3 editors.
Yes, the dialogue is a bit long. I think that will improve.
 

MaxXdev

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Apr 9, 2023
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Have finished opening and got a skipable error. Uploaded traceback before I hit another and it gets overwritten.
Thank you, trace backs is candy for a dev. It's almost like Christmas.

I fixed the problem so it wont be an issue in the next release.

Here is the fix for that. That's why it's good to have playtesters. to find this before bringing the game to the public.
Just unzip the file and place it in the game folder and overwrite it when asked.
Thanks for making a fix for people. And I appreciate your patronage.:)