VN Ren'Py King's New Life [v0.6b.1] [KingoftheJungle]

[KingoftheJungle009]

I have to say something about this, I was going to leave a review but I try not to do that until a game is more mature(into its development). This game is almost 100% expository dialog, and none of it is natural. All of the information is thrust upon you a million miles a minute and it is so overwhelming it honestly gave me a headache.

All of the girls fall in love with the MC in three sentences or less, some even before they've met him. And you don't stop meeting new girls up until the very end of the current content. That is ridiculous. I don't even remember half of their names except one is named April but everyone calls her July. Why? I don't know, but it was distracting enough for me to notice. And all of them have the same personality, that being they're obsessed with MC.

I get this is some power fantasy but there is no suspension of disbelief here and it makes my brain hurt. My best suggestion is slow the story all the way down. You have 5967937 plot points going on and you give no time for the reader to absorb any of the information.

Anyway that's my two cents. I'm sure with the way I've been treated on this forum so far this comment will be deleted, but if you do read this dev, give the MC a few seconds to breathe before you have some new conspiracy to throw at him. You know, give him time to actually BE WITH one of the umpteenmillion women that love him so much.

I can promise you, that I won't delete/report your comment. In my opinion, everyone has a right to their opinion on my game. April and July stuff is easily fixable and it'll be fixed before the next update comes. I would like to hear more about your opinion on the speed of the game, and I could tell you my opinion in some more detail. One of the things I have to keep my eye on while developing the game is that game is not dull, and focusing on one thing at a time would make too much time pass before something interesting happens. Like somebody before you commented, about prequal and all that stuff, there is much thinking of what I should leave for the future, what should I remove from the game entirely... I know that problem with speed is completely my fault, and that fault lies in me not having a problem with what speed the game progresses. For now, 90% of (female) characters that MC interacts has some kind of relationship/interaction before the game started.
As you said, and I completely agree, the game is still in its early development, and setting up more than one plot point for future culmination is the price I'm ready to pay in early development. When the time comes and the player gets to the point where they are shocked by what happens and how you could see hints of it in the first few updates. That's the kind of game I'm creating, and the game I'll for sure be proud when it comes to some future updates.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

How many updates will it be before the various parts of John's family start attempting to come after Rex and the Fortress/Harem/Cadre that he's building? Also, how soon will it be before said harem is finalized as to how many women Rex will have under his direct influence? I imagine there will be several dozen more who will be indirectly under his influence and direction. I suspect that it's being set up so that Rex will have the single largest covert operations network the world has ever seen and almost entirely comprised of female operatives/agents/personnel.

In v0.4 we'll meet John's sisters, but in v0.5 they'll go directly after MC. About the harem... When starting the development I thought I would do three releases of introductions to everything that happens and will happen in the game, but it seems taking a few more updates is a good decision. Some people would say I should slow down, and take more time with introductions but then the game would be in v0.10 when something serious starts to happen. I don't want that. We're close to meeting every girl who's a big part of the harem, outer circle will be met throughout the game so I don't worry about that, and neither should you.
And I'll make sure every girl in the harem gets the love she deserves.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

A lot of developers don't show the MC's face in their games. I highly recommend you follow their example and ditch him pronto, because that MC is one ugly SOB. Some people might like it because its amusing how grotesque his face is (I'm assuming this was at least somewhat deliberate), but the joke gets old fast and it's just an obnoxious interference in the story.

What's even worse is that a lot of games use that same model, barely changing anything. So i'll take a POV game rather than another ctrl c ctrl v MC any day.

MC I'm using is unique and the model wasn't used in any of the other AVN I played, and I have quite the number under my belt. When starting the development, I didn't think of using POV for everything. I chose that model because it looked smooth to me, and I liked it. If I used any of the commonly used models for the MC (which is a safe way to go), there would be comments about me using a repeating model for the MC, and somebody would probably list the games that use the same model for their MC. I already wrote down some topics in which as a developer I can't "win", I can only say what I have to say and hope it doesn't go down as disrespectful or attacking.

 

[amBest]

After killing your father, the judge sends you to live in another city with your mother and sister.

Hmmm. Yeah. Think I'll mod the game a bit to make the intro make a little more sense. Like maybe cut out the judge completely and just have him not get caught and run back home. That's something I could live with. But being sent to your family after murdering your family ... my suspension of disbelief can bend only so much.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

I'll write as a public post on a Patreon with past relationships and interactions between MC and characters in the game. Mostly because I'm starting to get annoyed with really common comments about how every girl is in love with MC after he says hi. I will do it as a few days' project so I don't miss anything. I'll put that link where other download links are so there isn't any confusion going on. I know that there is no way I get everyone to like everything about the game, and I made it clear to myself that I won't be able to satisfy everyone so that's okay.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

Hmmm. Yeah. Think I'll mod the game a bit to make the intro make a little more sense. Like maybe cut out the judge completely and just have him not get caught and run back home. That's something I could live with. But being sent to your family after murdering your family ... my suspension of disbelief can bend only so much.

Okay, but please play the game first. I already explained a few times how that decision was made by two people, where one is the person who runs the city MC lives in and is very very powerful, and the other is one of the four people who run the city he'll live in.

 

[Jnx]

I can promise you, that I won't delete/report your comment. In my opinion, everyone has a right to their opinion on my game. April and July stuff is easily fixable and it'll be fixed before the next update comes. I would like to hear more about your opinion on the speed of the game, and I could tell you my opinion in some more detail. One of the things I have to keep my eye on while developing the game is that game is not dull, and focusing on one thing at a time would make too much time pass before something interesting happens. Like somebody before you commented, about prequal and all that stuff, there is much thinking of what I should leave for the future, what should I remove from the game entirely... I know that problem with speed is completely my fault, and that fault lies in me not having a problem with what speed the game progresses. For now, 90% of (female) characters that MC interacts has some kind of relationship/interaction before the game started.
As you said, and I completely agree, the game is still in its early development, and setting up more than one plot point for future culmination is the price I'm ready to pay in early development. When the time comes and the player gets to the point where they are shocked by what happens and how you could see hints of it in the first few updates. That's the kind of game I'm creating, and the game I'll for sure be proud when it comes to some future updates.

My issue is, and I'm assuming you watch a slight amount of anime with the saitama joke, the characters hash out paragraph upon paragraph of expository dialogue like Disastrous life of Saiki K. But it's not the joke in this story's case. They list all of the things he/they have done and then move on to some other issue. I'm not saying drag it out and I know FULL WELL Daz is not good for action sequences so I'm not asking to focus on that. I'm suggesting to flesh out ideas or scenarios to establish time for the reader to develop empathy or at least sympathy for the situations in the game.

You literally have a sex scene then MC gets a call saying his sister was kidnapped practically mid sentence of "Gee I hope nothing bad happens so I can bask in the afterglow." It's just a lot. I'm not asking you to draw things out like a certain terrible game Im looking at you My New Family And I don't expect you to go back and change everything, just a little breathing room is nice we don't all have undiagnosed ADHD and need bright lights and shiny colors all the time.

And the fact you have so many characters is not just me thinking about how I'm going to have to keep track of characters. It's me thinking "Holy shit the dev must have nightmares keeping up with all 100 of these things..."

 

[Simulacrum29]

This will be talked about more later in the game. Rose made a decision for herself. There was a question on our Discord server I will copy it here. The question was what was the better choice.

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yes thats what didn't happen, Rose reacts the same way regardles what you choose. Thats why i said its a bug.
if you tell her to kill him she tells Khan that you wanted him to live and that is not the case.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

yes thats what didn't happen, Rose reacts the same way regardles what you choose. Thats why i said its a bug.
if you tell her to kill him she tells Khan that you wanted him to live and that is not the case.

It shouldn't be like that, mostly because I'm sure that there is branching in the code in that scene. I'll look it up and fix it if it needs fixing.

 

[Deleted member 4722681]

Walkthrough mod is showing as "don't have access" when clicked?

 

[Simulacrum29]

It shouldn't be like that, mostly because I'm sure that there is branching in the code in that scene. I'll look it up and fix it if it needs fixing.

in script.rpy ther needs to be a branching around Line 2559 which reflects your decision, if you gave her the order to kill Khan she is acting like she does something you dont wan't because "He wanted to let you live, but as you know, he is not there. You will be bigger headache than what you are worth." and line 2565 rose "I am sorry %(MC_fn)s, but I am Queen now." are her only lines and they are clearly not reflecting your decision to kill him.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

in script.rpy ther needs to be a branching around Line 2559 which reflects your decision, if you gave her the order to kill Khan she is acting like she does something you dont wan't because "He wanted to let you live, but as you know, he is not there. You will be bigger headache than what you are worth." and line 2565 rose "I am sorry %(MC_fn)s, but I am Queen now." are her only lines and they are clearly not reflecting your decision to kill him.

I see. Something's going on there and I'll have to check what it is. Thanks.

 

[mickster101]

First, let me say how impressed I am with you in making this game. A lot of thought and effort went into it, so good on you, and good luck!

For me, I won't be playing the game because quite frankly, the MC is boring. He is a Mary Sue (or whatever the male equivalent is): the greatest hand to hand fighter, practically a ninja, with women just throwing themselves at him and readily agreeing to be in a harem. I can't imagine where you might go with this character. He is described by people who don't really know him as incredible, a person who deserves happiness, etc. I only got through the opening scenes, but not one vagina made it out not damp after talking with him. There really can't be a character arc if the character starts out super awesome.

Regardless, my well wishes hold true. Good luck!

 

[RR6612]

I agree with the assement of the poster above me. I just tried the game but I had to give up after the judge started complimenting the MC, that he should be proud of himself for killing his father, offcourse not condoning murder because she's a judge. A little bit to much.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

I agree with the assement of the poster above me. I just tried the game but I had to give up after the judge started complimenting the MC, that he should be proud of himself for killing his father, offcourse not condoning murder because she's a judge. A little bit to much.

That's not a judge, it's his attorney. I'm sorry you don't like the game, but it is what it is. In the second line of the dialogue, she says she will act as his attorney.
She says:
I just want you to know that you did something brave and so many people don’t even think about going against their own tormentors. I do not advocate killing people, but in my honest opinion, you should be proud of yourself.
She did say he should be proud, not for killing his father, but for standing up to his years-long tormentor and abuser. And she said it as her own (personal) opinion.

I can't please everyone, and I understand some of your frustration. Wish you all the best.

 

[tanouco]

Game is broken, when opening it closes after 1s (first game that as ever done this).
Already downloaded multiple times from different host and it's all the same.
Hoping that v4 can at least start, from the pics it looks good.

 

[RR6612]

That's not a judge, it's his attorney. I'm sorry you don't like the game, but it is what it is. In the second line of the dialogue, she says she will act as his attorney.
She says:
I just want you to know that you did something brave and so many people don’t even think about going against their own tormentors. I do not advocate killing people, but in my honest opinion, you should be proud of yourself.
She did say he should be proud, not for killing his father, but for standing up to his years-long tormentor and abuser. And she said it as her own (personal) opinion.

I can't please everyone, and I understand some of your frustration. Wish you all the best.

Oops my bad. Well atleast I got the gist of what she was conveying right, and you don't see the problem making such a comment in a legal setting when the outcome of said 'standing up' was a dead father with a slit throat? Futhermore, you can even ask yourself why was that comment even necessary, for the plot?

But no worries dude, i'm not frustated and meant no offence. Keep making the game you want to make and have a good life.

 

[KingoftheJungle009]

Game is broken, when opening it closes after 1s (first game that as ever done this).
Already downloaded multiple times from different host and it's all the same.
Hoping that v4 can at least start, from the pics it looks good.

On which platform do you play? I will download it from the links given on the first page, so it's authentic. I messaged you to check on which platform you play. I will report back with my results.
P. S. Just downloaded the game for Windows + patch. Installed it and started the game. Everything works perfectly. Please message me so I know how I can help you. And please, for anyone reading this, don't jump to a conclusion before checking out everything, because maybe you will influence somebody else to hate the game.

 

[tanouco]

On which platform do you play? I will download it from the links given on the first page, so it's authentic. I messaged you to check on which platform you play. I will report back with my results.
P. S. Just downloaded the game for Windows + patch. Installed it and started the game. Everything works perfectly. Please message me so I know how I can help you. And please, for anyone reading this, don't jump to a conclusion before checking out everything, because maybe you will influence somebody else to hate the game.

Message sent on PM. Didn't try to make anyone hate on the game, just being direct on what is happening, never know if it might happen to someone else. It was the first time this happened to me and I normally play more than 20 games p/month.

 

[altmas66]

Hello I cant download the walkthrough mod. anyone knows why?