I really want to play this game but I can't. I can deal with the occasional spelling mistake but the sheer amount of them, and having to deal with frequent missing words in the middle of sentences. Worst of all though is the grammar , or lack of it.
This game needs a highly proficient English language proof reader that understands grammar!
Also why are there so many blonde women? The game needs more brunettes and redheads. It's your game and its obviously your choice, but it would be nice to see variation.
One final thing. The pacing seems to be all over the place. I am not sure if this is intentional or not. The back story is extremely weak or seriously lacking. I mention this because your quite fond of trying to explain things. The way I would have done this, is to create a prologue, the reason for this, is that your trying to throw too much at us without explaining bugger all in the process.
The guy kills his dad for the abuse he suffers at his hands since he was 12 years old. The next thing your telling us, is some weird stuff about some queen running the city and her minions who supposedly look after the MC. Next thing we are told he is the best mercenary in the world...and something about egypt, non of it makes any sense whatsoever. This is too much information, do we really need to know irrelevant things that don't matter that much in the story? If so you should have created a prologue so we can better understand what your trying to tell us. The pacing in the game is bad.
If I where you, I would attempt to write a prologue and get rid of some of the useless background noise within the game proper. If you don't want to do that, then clean up the main game and get rid of useless background information that makes no sense. Just because it makes sense to you, doesn't mean it makes sense to anyone else. I like the concept of this game I really do, but it needs a major overhaul or remastering with a prologue, or if not , just get rid of irrelevant things that atr
