Unity A Long Journey [v0.8.1] [Marvellous Lunatic]

[Jericho85]

The dev constantly blows his load with the sex scenes, giving them the opposite effect they should be having.

Dev, when making a sex scene in a VN you don't make them long fuckfests with the two parties engaging in every position from start to finish.
You need to spread them out so the readers can build up anticipation for what's to happen next.
There's a reason why in most VN's characters usually only engage in rudimentary acts for the first few scenes then build up to intercourse over the course of the story. This gives us readers breathing room, and allows buildup.

If the characters are getting dirty and going the full course in the first scenes you show us, then where do we go from there?

People would be more amicable to Pia if she was teased, and scenes were spread out. But instead, she jumps your dick and we have to sit through scenes with a character we don't know or care about.

Also, the dirty talk in the scenes is way to mechanical and stiff. It's just not hot. When was the last time the dev actually had sex with a girl?
You can overcome this by putting the describing factors in internal thoughts, whilst having the characters act naturally.
So they don't need to be saying "I love having sex with you my sexy man with a nice big dick. It really increases the enjoyment of sex please have sex with my sexy body"

This might be the first time I've ever seen someone complain about a sex scene being too long in a porn game.

 

[as22]

This might be the first time I've ever seen someone complain about a sex scene being too long in a porn game.

What a stupid comment. There's another poster complaining about the scene literally on the previous page.

 

[Jericho85]

What a stupid comment.

I mean the sex scenes are probably this VN's redeeming factor when it comes down to it. That and Selene's booty.

 

[as22]

I mean the sex scenes are probably this VN's redeeming factor when it comes down to it. That and Selene's booty.

Come on.... I'll admit they're well rendered but the majority is playing this game for the mystery space setting. I think the only other similar game is toro7.
Maybe there would be more tension if the dev gave the MC amnesia. Then the flashbacks would have had other purposes.

 

[Jericho85]

Come on.... I'll admit they're well rendered but the majority is playing this game for the mystery space setting. I think the only other similar game is toro7.
Maybe there would be more tension if the dev gave the MC amnesia. Then the flashbacks would have had other purposes.

The saboteur plot line has droned on too long and at no point did it feel like the MC and Selene made any kind of significant progress against Reddick and Johannes. There's a point when it just gets boring and repetitive. So much so that I've just about lost all interest. Three years of development now and the majority of the cast of characters are still in cryo... in an alleged "harem" game... all because the dev can't figure out how to resolve a couple antagonists that he made too capable and effective. Honestly, they really need to be taken out of the picture entirely... like next episode. Otherwise the story isn't going anywhere. Porn games are supposed to emphasize character relationships and romances so that the MC can get on with fucking his mom and sisters, after all. No one wants thousands of renders of a fucking edgelord in a turtleneck drinking a cup of coffee.

But Selene and Pia do have nice tits and ass and the sex scenes are decently animated and posed (ignoring the derpy facial expressions of course). So the sex scenes really are the least of the problems with this VN.

 

[kingdevil31]

Full save pls.