Also, if this is read by the Developer(s)...
You could do with a proofreader.
Most notably, recuring error: MC cam ... Should be MC came, cam is short for camera, webcamera etc. It has never before correctly (to my knowledge) been used as a word for the verb ejaculate. Several others as well.
Still a very good story, but small errors break the reading rythm, and small errors that are repeated again and again are irritating. The rest are mostly typos, easily understood, such as "go" instead of "of", "pack" instead of "packed".
I really wish I could offer my services.