I understand you put a lot of work into this, and money. But some changes I think should be implemented.
-The lower bar needs to be a lot more transparent, especially with your narrow field camera angles; they often get in the way.
-Grammar! Lots and lots of grammar mistakes need to be corrected; you should stop writing like they... talk in... texts... and write like, its a novel.
-Why did MC want to rape the waitress?
There are a few more, but I don't want to sound too negative, or rip on the story too much.
I love the body of the girl, but the close camera angles don't let me ogle.
Lastly, I know this changes the story a lot, but I think if want to make this a longer game this will help, how about the mom is a step-mother; and after the mothers death MC moved out, lived with his uncle or something. Also, moving out at 9 and apparently being fully independent; totally illogical, I think you need to be 15 to be emancipated.
"The age at which emancipation is possible varies by state. Some states grant emancipation for youth as young as 14. For others, the youth must be at least 16." -
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The more realistic the story, the more I will feel like I am banging my teen sister. As of right now, I feel like I am perving on some stranger and my girlfriend came home 'uninvited' and ready to SMD; all this after I tried to rape a waitress in a dimly lit restaurant that serves hard liquor, with waitresses in roller skates.
