Rambling ahead.
Somehow it's depressing where precisely the story as given ends. You're an utter laughingstock, you're under curfew, you're under heavy watch, any relationship you've built with your parent will naturally be in the toilet because you skipped a day(Triggering that line of events), your father hates you, and basically you're probably wishing you stayed in that other world and got killed. Because you've got nothing and no one, and never WILL given the whole laughingstock thing.
Following the Jane storyline is about as bad. In jail AGAIN.
That dream after the movie event with the mother. Having her push you off the raft and drown you. That is a clear and BAD sign of the main character's mental state.
This-if I'd want anything, it's that somehow you(Both the main character and the player) are given something to keep going. Like, it keeps putting you in the worst possible position at all times.
Everyone who goes to that beach is either an 'escapee' from other-world or influenced by that supposed portal. So the presumption is Mrs.Lansby is probably an escapee. Which is why she's actively so supportive when no one else is, and the lust, and so on.
Supposedly the father's a switch from other-world. How the hell can that have happened when we've only just moved here?
I can't figure out how to advance Hitomi. It says 'go to the beach'. Doesn't say when, doesn't say a day. I've been there at all times. Then again, the Mother story says, wait till weekend, so see her, sleep at night. Sleep at night doesn't seem to work.
Too many dialogue bugs/exceptions. I've been able to keep using the ignore command to push through them, but they shouldn't be there at all.