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Have to disagree only so far as each character would have a back story independent of the events in the game. As such, Sophia's first (if you want to reargue the realism part of the game) could have been after senior Prom in high school.
I absolutely do not want to argue the realism.
However, there are two plot devises I think the writer is going for. First is to make Sophia human and with a past. That past is not so innocent. More to the point, Sophia was already experienced with sex going into her first experience. That alone says volumes about Sophia's character. Second, it hints at what it takes to actually get her into bed--something I think will come up later in the story.
I didn't cut the backstory, the not-so-innocent, the already been kissed, I just don't show it explicitly, I'm trying to keep the action in the present.
I did notice something that maybe really isn't there and I am over thinking it. Again the "condom" talk comes into play and safe sex. It maybe just me, but somewhere that might be important in upcoming story plots; like, when SOMEONE, whoever that might be, is on the crux of going balls deep, a choice of condom or not is a game choice that leads to an ending.
I didn't cut the condom talk either. It actually stays intact in the exact same place in the scene.
Something doesn't strike me right, Sophia's first. Nice set up how Sophia got into a position where it happened per how the story was written, plausible in most cases. However, is there more to the story? Dylan discovers the photographer, was Liam in Sophia's magazine shoot--something Sophia deliberately lied about or omitted. So.... what else is Sophia's omitting about her story about her first time?
With her first time it was with her friend's father. Fair enough. But was it really a onetime fling? Just from the guy's perspective is tapping a young woman enough to just chalk it up to a good time? Or just might Sophia have sought out a relationship as her first Crush and there is more behind the story?
Ommitting? No much left to omit, really. I mean, he ate her pussy, fucked her in several different positions, she came and came. Maybe that's Ellie's biological father and Sophia is playing with the timeline, but that could be true with or without my rewrite.
Turning back to the reason I proposed the rewrite: I don't want AWAM to be told in flashback, especially Sophia's sex scenes. I want them in the present with the present cast.
