VN Ren'Py Completed Avalon [v8.2] [Lockheart]

[SpikeZg]

i didn't read this thread at all so i didn't know that others also felt bad about that scene, i thought i would get like a 1000 facepalms for my comment

it was just my opinion, you keep doing what you are doing
at the end of the day, you are the dev, it's your game and your story, if some of the comments make you a better writer, great, if not, who cares, fuck the haters

 

[KoGa3]

... but the eyes still bug me, like a LOT , i can't get over it fuck
and the jokes are in most cases over the top and not funny (to me ofc) ...

Oh yeah, the big eyes. It was the same for me at the beginning. But now I like them, they are just part of Avalon.

But maybe this little story can help with that:

"But Avalon! What big ears you have," said Byron as he edged closer to the bed.
"The better to hear you with, my dear," she replied.
"But Avalon! What big eyes you have," said Byron.
"The better to see you with, my dear," she replied.
"But Avalon! What big teeth you have," said Byron his voice quivering slightly.
"The better to bite in the big cock while blowing you, my dear!" roared Avalon and she leapt out of the bed and began to chase poor Byron...

(Sorry, I couldn't resist...)

 

[Lockheart]

What Lockheart thinks girls look like:

 

[Mr. Vargas]

I was thinking that the models looks outdated but clearly they are not. Wow... Poppy model looks amazing. No offence Lockheart but I'm seeing massive downgrades on Avalon model. Definitely something wrong with eyes and also eyelashes. You should add some eye make up such as eyeliner and eyeshadow for sure.

Here you go, I quick fixed for you

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[fzaner]

was just passing by givin the game a shot then i enjoyed every minute, i liked the plot so mush and somehow i didn't like avalon's model. to be accurate her face and these big eyes like "smeagol - from lord of the rings" kills the immersiveness of how good this story is.

 

[Lockheart]

I was thinking that the models looks outdated but clearly they are not. Wow... Poppy model looks amazing. No offence Lockheart but I'm seeing massive downgrades on Avalon model. Definitely something wrong with eyes and also eyelashes. You should add some eye make up such as eyeliner and eyeshadow for sure.

Here you go, I quick fixed for you

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So that's actually a portrait. Those are much easier to make look amazing. Crank up the subD level, increase saturation, add a vignette. It looks really good. And it'll render pretty quickly because it's just the model.

Unfortunately, it's not a realistic expectation from a scene. If you have two other models (Gen 8's are heavier, by the way, which is what all my models are), props and a location in the scene, you just can't render everything at maximum levels. Quality has to suffer a bit so you can render it all out. Even if a GPU could hold it all on it's VRAM, it would take an insane amount of time to get it to 98%. And animations would take weeks to get even 15 FPS on a 2 second video.

The closest VN I can think with that kind of quality is Palmer's Double Homework. And as far as I can tell, he renders his Backdrops separately from his models on most of his pictures. And then he takes the model picture and places it on top of the backdrop. You'll get prettier models that way and faster renders but the lighting will be off and won't quite look right.

Also, Avalon is only Poppy's skin. Her shape is different. That's why her eyes look so big. And that's a mistake I'm not going to repeat with future games...

Spoiler: Not Poppy

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[Lockheart]

Ok, we've been getting a lot of complaints about the size of the models eyes. So I'm going to introduce a new model with completely normal sized eyes! That's right. A model with eyes the size they're supposed to be! No more of those giant orange sized eyeballs. Just average, regular, normal sized eyes.

Introducing Lucy!

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[TrulyDemented1]

Ok, we've been getting a lot of complaints about the size of the models eyes. So I'm going to introduce a new model with completely normal sized eyes! That's right. A model with eyes the size they're supposed to be! No more of those giant orange sized eyeballs. Just average, regular, normal sized eyes.

Introducing Lucy!

Spoiler: Lucy!

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.............. "WHY SO SERIOUS?"

Dammit man, that was ANOTHER drink of scotch that found its way out of my friggin nasal cavities!! Ass...

 

[Fenix34]

Ok, we've been getting a lot of complaints about the size of the models eyes. So I'm going to introduce a new model with completely normal sized eyes! That's right. A model with eyes the size they're supposed to be! No more of those giant orange sized eyeballs. Just average, regular, normal sized eyes.

Introducing Lucy!

Spoiler: Lucy!

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lol i can see where byron gets his sense of humor.

I said it before tho and ill say it again, the eyes are great on all your girls. It has this frozen feel to it without it looking anime-ish. All these nay sayers can go hang out with lucy.

 

[Lockheart]

lol i can see where byron gets his sense of humor.

I said it before tho and ill say it again, the eyes are great on all your girls. It has this frozen feel to it without it looking anime-ish. All these nay sayers can go hang out with lucy.

Thank you, Fenix. That really helps a lot. I had a rough few comments in a row there.

But the same thing happened to Alita. People were very divided on her too. You either like big eyes or you hate them. Not a lot of people are in the middle. Unfortunately, we're too far into Avalon to change it now. And I actually really like the way Ava looks. I hope people can either overlook the eyes or they grow on them. But either way, it is what it is.

Thank you again, Fenix.

 

[DerMelz]

"I am planning on adding sexual content but it gets a little tricky with Dallas." I have been wondering about this little "problem". Believe me nobody wants to see Dallas doing the horizontal bop more than yours truly but how? Byron has painted himself into a corner and right now he is the only male in the mix. However we have seen some mischief several times now between Avalon and Dallas so maybe a threesome? BRB .... (fap-fap-fap-fap) .... That would be nice.

Yes yes yes. Please

 

[KoGa3]

Ok, we've been getting a lot of complaints about the size of the models eyes. So I'm going to introduce a new model with completely normal sized eyes! That's right. A model with eyes the size they're supposed to be! No more of those giant orange sized eyeballs. Just average, regular, normal sized eyes.

Introducing Lucy!

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Now that I have made friends with the big eyes, here is my model suggestion (sorry Byron):

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[Watcher X]

Yeah don't change the style of the eyes, I love them. In fact if a developer got the inkling to create a Frozen character art style porn game I wouldn't be able to get my wallet out fast enough.

 

[Lockheart]

Now that I have made friends with the big eyes, here is my model suggestion (sorry Byron):

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Bahaha. He looks like something out of a Japanese TV Commercial. Love it.

 

[Lockheart]

Yeah don't change the style of the eyes, I love them. In fact if a developer got the inkling to create a Frozen character art style porn game I wouldn't be able to get my wallet out fast enough.

Yeah, it's so hard! People are so divided. I'll have to do a Poll for my next game and see how many people are good with big eyes and how many prefer normal eyes. I'll think on it, for sure.

I'm really glad you like them though! It looks like I accidentally combined a Stylized morph with a normal morph and got some hybrid girls that look a touch unrealistic. I dig it, a lot. I love big eyes, they're alluring. But so many people find it creepy. So I'm just on the fence about it. We'll see!

 

[DerMelz]

Yeah, it's so hard! People are so divided. I'll have to do a Poll for my next game and see how many people are good with big eyes and how many prefer normal eyes. I'll think on it, for sure.

I'm really glad you like them though! It looks like I accidentally combined a Stylized morph with a normal morph and got some hybrid girls that look a touch unrealistic. I dig it, a lot. I love big eyes, they're alluring. But so many people find it creepy. So I'm just on the fence about it. We'll see!

Stay true to yourself. The Way they re being so awesome is because you love Thema like they are. What would be good If the Eyes are Not to your liking anymore and you wont feel the same about the Personality of the Characters? Mist likely the Feeling gets of and your addicting Novel loose that Charme and Feeling i love so bad, you cant imagine. I cant wait for Act 4 and so many more. Not a single Das i dont think about.

 

[Lockheart]

Stay true to yourself. The Way they re being so awesome is because you love Thema like they are. What would be good If the Eyes are Not to your liking anymore and you wont feel the same about the Personality of the Characters? Mist likely the Feeling gets of and your addicting Novel loose that Charme and Feeling i love so bad, you cant imagine. I cant wait for Act 4 and so many more. Not a single Das i dont think about.

Thanks DerMelz, I'm happy to hear you're looking forward to Act 4. I ran into a few snags but we're finally back on track and we're making some exceptional progress.

I think even if I had characters that looked more normal, I wouldn't love them any less. But you're not wrong either, having unique characters gives me a certain style that makes me stand out. It's also important for me to take into consideration what my audience wants though. Balance is key.

I appreciate your support, DerMelz! Thank you!

 

[DerMelz]

Thanks DerMelz, I'm happy to hear you're looking forward to Act 4. I ran into a few snags but we're finally back on track and we're making some exceptional progress.

I think even if I had characters that looked more normal, I wouldn't love them any less. But you're not wrong either, having unique characters gives me a certain style that makes me stand out. It's also important for me to take into consideration what my audience wants though. Balance is key.

I appreciate your support, DerMelz! Thank you!

I understand. but please stay to yourself only that way your Storys are like they are and the most People i read so far love your Story and the Chars. I hope i can support you. you dont know how much this Novel hit me in the Heart. If you tell me how you need it i would do a german Translation for you. this Week i had two Friends at Home which i must translate Avalon while reading because they were addicted by the Story i told them but they arent able to read english.

 

[Lockheart]

I understand. but please stay to yourself only that way your Storys are like they are and the most People i read so far love your Story and the Chars. I hope i can support you. you dont know how much this Novel hit me in the Heart. If you tell me how you need it i would do a german Translation for you. this Week i had two Friends at Home which i must translate Avalon while reading because they were addicted by the Story i told them but they arent able to read english.

Thanks, DerMelz! I'm happy to hear you want to support my work. That really means a lot to me.

At this time, I don't have any official plans for a translation. I'm still in the very early stages of beginning my (possible) career as a visual novelist. I know it seems really crummy for me to reject the idea of a translated version, and I hate that I have to, but we're simply not at a point where I can afford the time to concentrate on that sort of project. I know it seems like a simple enough project but things are always more complicated than they seem at first.

But don't lose hope! Just because I can't do it right now doesn't mean it won't ever happen. And I know that there are unofficial ways to work on a game. Heck, I think there's a way to decode a Ren'Py game and take a gander at the code. I wouldn't stop you if you wanted to give that a try. But you'd have to go line by line, edit the dialogue and then recompile the game. It'd be a lot of work. And because I wouldn't be directly involved, it wouldn't be an official version of the game. But I'd still let you link it here.

Thanks again for your support, DerMelz!

 

[DerMelz]

Thanks, DerMelz! I'm happy to hear you want to support my work. That really means a lot to me.

At this time, I don't have any official plans for a translation. I'm still in the very early stages of beginning my (possible) career as a visual novelist. I know it seems really crummy for me to reject the idea of a translated version, and I hate that I have to, but we're simply not at a point where I can afford the time to concentrate on that sort of project. I know it seems like a simple enough project but things are always more complicated than they seem at first.

But don't lose hope! Just because I can't do it right now doesn't mean it won't ever happen. And I know that there are unofficial ways to work on a game. Heck, I think there's a way to decode a Ren'Py game and take a gander at the code. I wouldn't stop you if you wanted to give that a try. But you'd have to go line by line, edit the dialogue and then recompile the game. It'd be a lot of work. And because I wouldn't be directly involved, it wouldn't be an official version of the game. But I'd still let you link it here.

Thanks again for your support, DerMelz!

I try to get into that. but i want it only to work. Its yours and so it should stay. when i know how i can translate it you get it and decide how you will distribute. thanks again for your work much more People should get hold of such good Entertainment