VN Ren'Py Broken Promises [v0.34] [Light Cavalry]

[MuffinSlayer12]

No it just proves my point, yes he thinks it's not 5 stars right now but considering it's 0.1 it may be 5 in the next version you never know.
Why rate it 3 then come back and change it if it did get better later.

In my opinion you should always vote for the potential you see in a first release, not how it is right now, that's just not fair to the Game.

Actual bad take,
who reviews a product the recieve with the mindset it might be good and worth in 6 monts lemme give it 5* now.
You review what is out now, If everyone rated on potential the rating system would be floored.

If the 0.1 sucks it deserves an honest review to let people know the .1 sucks
if it gets reworked or remastered than all of the accurate current reviews that would come would then change and influence the overall rating score. These guys just put out a 0.1 with a ton of issues. So many other devs put out .1 ones which have way less issues than this. It seems your just defending this game as you "Knowing the artist on a personal level " but the art isnt even the one being flamed its the writing the majority has issues with.

 

[Rodrigoofb]

So reviewing a game in its introduction which will stick for new versions sounds fair to you, even if its been revised and revorked ?

I don't write reviews, but the people that do, should update their reviews in every update so people can see if the product is better or worse, if they don't, that's on them. But not criticizing and reviewing it fairy just because it's a 0.1 also doesn't make sense. People should know what they can expect from the game based on its reviews, if this game had a 4 or 5 star rating overall, people would think it is a masterpiece already, which it isn't.

 

[Drafox]

How to fix Grace:

She drank from the water that turns frogs gay but she always was a strong heterosexual woman in her core and didn't want to lose her straightness and love for human mushrooms, so in order to fight these new lesbian urges she went directly to an old colleague of hers and a well known sexual therapist known as Alex Jones; And guess what? The genius bastard told her that if she didn't sleep with her married male coworkers and worship their seahorses she will stop being straight.

Years later, Alex Jones manages to find the cure by pouring Ivermectin in the clean water pipes. Now thanks to that, Grace has finally stopped worrying about becoming bisexual but she has to deal with the issue that she and Santa have some things in common.



Ok fuck it go ahead and facepalm me; I admit that was extra silly...

 

[vogelbeest]

In my opinion you should always vote for the potential you see in a first release, not how it is right now, that's just not fair to the Game.

Each review is a personal opinion, there's guidelines but personally i see every review as a personal note of how the reviewer sees the game, some reviewers use clear formats to give points to rendering, story and whatever, but i've seen too many 5 star reviews for just liking a game and too many 1 stars for just not liking it, neither doing justice to the games in question.

For me the star system has no value, i prefer to read why you think a game is good and what could be better, one-sided opinions "nothing good" or "nothing bad" are just useless...
More often it's about not liking the theme of the game then about the actual quality of the different aspects of the game...

Reviews using ratings for any future potential they (hope or expect to) see is okay, aslong they make note of that, in the end it's just their personal opinion of the game, it's not like it's michelin stars being rewarded here....
Reviews just rating on what is currently in the game are just as fair, effectively you can't judge content that's just not there now.

 

[SirAlexander111]

How to fix Grace:

She drank from the water that turns frogs gay but she always was a strong heterosexual woman in her core and didn't want to lose her straightness and love for human mushrooms, so in order to fight these new lesbian urges she went directly to an old colleague of hers and a well known sexual therapist known as Alex Jones; And guess what? The genius bastard told her that if she didn't sleep with her married male coworkers and worship their seahorses she will stop being straight.

Years later, Alex Jones manages to find the cure by pouring Ivermectin in the clean water pipes. Now thanks to that, Grace has finally stopped worrying about becoming bisexual but she has to deal with the issue that she and Santa have some things in common.

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Ok fuck it go ahead and facepalm me; I admit that was extra silly...

Santa might offer her help in solving that issue together!
She being she might say why not let's go, one more wouldn't hurt

 

[eddie987]

I completely forgot about this game to be honest, but after getting through the "trying too hard to be funny" intro, I remembered that I've actually played a demo version of it a few months ago and since it was still in my hard drive (since June), I apparently liked it, so I kept playing.

Well, it's not bad, I can definitely see potential in this one, but as it is right now it's not good either.
To be fair it started off nicely, it seemed like it would be an interesting game, the plot is somewhat unique, the MC looks his age and not like a 12 year old pretending to be an adult and most of the girls are good looking.
Then the devs started throwing in drama from every direction, just for the sake of drama. I mean, you can't have every single person you meet in this game having some kind of deep emotional trauma. After a while it just felt forced, over the top and the constant inner monologues didn't really help.
I get the devs want us to know what the girls are thinking, but they went overboard, ended up overexplaining everything and after a certain point when you read more thoughts than actual dialogues that move the story forward, it honestly can get really boring. That made the game feel way too slow-paced. Honestly, after seeing that the next update will be out in 4-6 months, the first thing that came to mind was that we'll probably get the MC to talk to Nessa again around 2025 and I wondered how many hours of her depressing thoughts we'll have to go through untill then...

There's no need for me to point out everything I personally didn't like, since most of those things were already mentioned by others, but come on now guys... A lawyer blackmailing another lawyer, who also happens to be a friend of their boss' daughter... Not to mention that Benoit has more to lose than Grace.
Then Alice is apparently Tianna's daughter, but Tianna never mentions to the MC that her daughter goes to the same college he'll be attending and Alice never points out that their "mothers" share the same name, after the dean asked him his mother's name, while she was standing right next to him... I might be wrong but I don't think Tianna is the most common name out there.

Anyway... I guess all we can do right now is wait and see where this story is going...

 

[Call of Booty]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique. The level of ego is insane when majority of people on this thread are saying the writing has issues, hes acting like we're all wrong dispicable. the writer needs dropping is letting the artist down with his writing and bad PR level of ego lashing out in the official discord in private channels. sad to see.

Screenshots of the writer of Broken Promises (Circled) lashing out at people giving critique in the official Discord.

So,devs will destroy their work,just because they can't take honest opinions and not because they can't see it with their own eyes? Well,they said that Grace will be "toned down". What if....
Grace is refreshed and now she is bored housewife lusting for younger men.
MC find the dealers and next undercover job is part-time deepthroat model.
Alice got hots for her mom because she realize that she was harsh on friend.
Chiefs accept her love like only way out of her nightmares.
Afina become vigilante kicking the shit out of agressive bastards and Kylie fucks all her boyfriend's clients,because it's obvious that he is cheating on her.
Dealer and user got together,plus business is blooming.
Just please leave a teacher how she is now,cuz she is just great at her job.

 

[Richard Perkins]

The incest patch needs to be updated!!!

 

[xinkala]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique. The level of ego is insane when majority of people on this thread are saying the writing has issues, hes acting like we're all wrong dispicable. the writer needs dropping is letting the artist down with his writing and bad PR level of ego lashing out in the official discord in private channels. sad to see.

Screenshots of the writer of Broken Promises (Circled) lashing out at people giving critique in the official Discord.

Damn, that does not looking good...Already this kind of rift for 0.1.
I mean his storywriter and people will have their opinions and some of them won't be very pleasant but his reaction was little overboard? I mean mostly, people disliked grace part and was ok with everything else. why so much frustration? How can he improve game without healthy criticism? maybe we criticize it because we see potential in game and want it's best?
Dude... i really like this game and really want to see this game gets completed. It will be shame if this game will lost because of this nonsense reason.
All dev must know what's coming when they are making game and must be prepared for it.
I mean im planning make my own game and even started working on story, i know one this for sure: There will be hell of negative feedback and criticism. Already preparing my mental health for that

Good luck guys! And don't let this nonsense became reason for abandonment.

 

[BeoWoolF]

Damn, that does not looking good...Already this kind of rift for 0.1.

A bit of controversy does help in the advertising efforts

 

[xinkala]

A bit of controversy does help in the advertising efforts

not if game get's abandoned

 

[linkinn]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique. The level of ego is insane when majority of people on this thread are saying the writing has issues, hes acting like we're all wrong dispicable. the writer needs dropping is letting the artist down with his writing and bad PR level of ego lashing out in the official discord in private channels. sad to see.

Screenshots of the writer of Broken Promises (Circled) lashing out at people giving critique in the official Discord.

Jesus the ego on this one. Thanks for posting it, good to know.

 

[v1900]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique. The level of ego is insane when majority of people on this thread are saying the writing has issues, hes acting like we're all wrong dispicable. the writer needs dropping is letting the artist down with his writing and bad PR level of ego lashing out in the official discord in private channels. sad to see.

Screenshots of the writer of Broken Promises (Circled) lashing out at people giving critique in the official Discord.

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He talks like he is some big shit. Oh poor fucker.

This idiot and his stream of consciousness mental diarrhea writing. I mean if he likes to think he shits from the nape and not the anus he should at least have the mastery of the language and technique to back his claims. For fuck sake even James Joyce was derided for writing mental diarrhea like that and he could actually write. Now we have this fucker and a box of crayons pretending to be the second coming.

You can see by the intro that this dude has some mental problems. If the dude is writing porn and not best sellers he should know he sucks at it.

 

[notmegoaway1123]

This game is giving me mad anxiety. Like as a person irl i've only dated virgins, its not like i aimed for it but like now im chasing a girl who went through a hoe phase, and like just like the fact that the childhood friend is dating a scumbag and grace moaning that shit in a hoe phase got me kinda fucking heated, no idea y but yea this game is giving me mad anxiety ik it'll HOPEFULLY end up fine but jesus christ

 

[xXwankerXx]

It's just boring as fuck, and it's not even erotic, just sick, how every character is instantly aroused by MC, how they describe to each other, it's like it was written by a kid with no experience or a very old, bitter incel type guy.

There's no need for insults, but I kinda agree with you. Considering the MC is a poor AF discount Casanova it doesn't make sense to see bitches left and right falling for him so easily. Ok, he's a decent-looking guy, I'm glad that he's not the usual four-eyed creep with a comical dick, but his flirting is so bad that he should make standup jokes based on his pickup lines lol. And a teacher sexually harassing her student the next sec she sees him is really ridiculous, dev could've used hookers or strippers for quick 0 build up, no strings attached sex scenes... those ladies could also help the MC with his investigation and other 'delicate matters'.

she still thinks about it almost longingly, she's aroused thinking of the pounding this guy gave her and it makes her look terrible.

I mean, you don't think it's too much? she's basically melting in front of him... a "LI"...

She didn't have a BF or at least a guy she could hook up with for ~5y and she last dated a dude 7m prior to the events in our story... ofc she gonna get aroused, BUT she makes it clear that she don't wanna fuck that motherfucker again, AND she still hasn't sampled the magical dick yet, so don't worry about that jackass being a threat. He's more of a 1-2-brain-cells- above-Tyballs-from-BaDIK butthurt clown. If he was that good of a pussy pounder, she'd be all over him, but she's not, which means he's just a small dick insecure asshole. I'm more concerned about that past of hers and why the asshole has vids of her getting fucked by other dudes... and we know what that usually means.

Hello everyone!
Since Grace after work scene and her last scene is very criticizedheavily and not liked my writer will look into toning down the detailed nature of the words since its too much for some.

Toning it down won't change the fact that she's being blackmailed in the most ridiculous way possible. Only an idiot or a really dumb bitch would give in to that fool's demands when they have evidence that could easily put him behind bars. It's like holding a gun in your hand and being scared of a motherfucker who insults and taunts you when you could shoot his ass and calm him down.

Also, I guess we can agree that it's not necessary to make her a bigger whore than she already was by saying that she used to sell her pussy for that french faggot or something like that, coz that's what the 'other vids with the other guys' sentence implies, IMO. Let's leave it at "she was young and dumb, fell in love with a married asshole that now blackmails her into having sex with him". The MC can save her sweet ass and romance her or keep it friendly afterwards. My 2 cents on the matter. And tell your writer that whenever he feels creative enough to write how good NPCs fuck MC's LIs or how good said LIs felt in a game that's supposed to be NTR free, he should just put that creativity into MC's character dev and how good HE fucks the LIs... nobody will bitch about that and the money will keep rolling in, I guarantee.

 

[OldMoonSong]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique. The level of ego is insane when majority of people on this thread are saying the writing has issues, hes acting like we're all wrong despicable. the writer needs dropping is letting the artist down with his writing and bad PR level of ego lashing out in the official discord in private channels. sad to see.

Screenshots of the writer of Broken Promises (Circled) lashing out at people giving critique in the official Discord.

Wow. Writer is absolutely unhinged and incapable of separating his work from himself. As such, to critique the art is to critique the artist. It's a strong indication of inexperience--on top of the issues such as inconsistent POV already pointed out.

Hopefully the other members of the team can salvage the 3d assets + renders and can reinvent the project.

I downloaded the game on the 20th as I was interested in checking it out just based on the renders and overview, but haven't gotten the chance to get into it.

Now I'm thinking I should just spare myself.

 

[portgasdluigi]

There's no need for insults, but I kinda agree with you. Considering the MC is a poor AF discount Casanova it doesn't make sense to see bitches left and right falling for him so easily. Ok, he's a decent-looking guy, I'm glad that he's not the usual four-eyed creep with a comical dick, but his flirting is so bad that he should make standup jokes based on his pickup lines lol. And a teacher sexually harassing her student the next sec she sees him is really ridiculous, dev could've used hookers or strippers for quick 0 build up, no strings attached sex scenes... those ladies could also help the MC with his investigation and other 'delicate matters'.




She didn't have a BF or at least a guy she could hook up with for ~5y and she last dated a dude 7m prior to the events in our story... ofc she gonna get aroused, BUT she makes it clear that she don't wanna fuck that motherfucker again, AND she still hasn't sampled the magical dick yet, so don't worry about that jackass being a threat. He's more of a 1-2-brain-cells- above-Tyballs-from-BaDIK butthurt clown. If he was that good of a pussy pounder, she'd be all over him, but she's not, which means he's just a small dick insecure asshole. I'm more concerned about that past of hers and why the asshole has vids of her getting fucked by other dudes... and we know what that usually means.

Imagine if after the first scene with Jill in the library (I think that's like 2nd time MC meets her), there's a scene with Tybalt talking to her about how she used to get passed around the Prep house fucking all the guys and you as a player have to read Jill's thoughts about it, and she's getting aroused thinking about the pounding Tybalt gave her and how loud she would moan for his cock. But she says sorry, I don't do that anymore. There has to be a part of her that still wants him and thinks fondly of her past if those are the thoughts she's having. Now after Jill refuses Tybalt he threatens to release the videos he filmed of her fucking all those guys and you as the player have to read dialogue describing the pounding Jill was getting from Tybalt and you have to read that she loves his cock. That would completely ruin Jill as an LI for probably 90% of players. and we would have seen a similar response to what we're seeing here.

 

[Call of Booty]

Imagine if after the first scene with Jill in the library (I think that's like 2nd time MC meets her), there's a scene with Tybalt talking to her about how she used to get passed around the Prep house fucking all the guys and you as a player have to read Jill's thoughts about it, and she's getting around thinking about the pounding Tybalt gave her and how loud she would moan for his cock. But she says sorry, I don't do that anymore. There has to be a part of her that still wants him and thinks fondly of her past if those are the thoughts she's having. Now after Jill refuses Tybalt he threatens to release the videos he filmed of her fucking all those guys and you as the player have to read dialogue describing the pounding Jill was getting from Tybalt and you have to read that she loves his cock. That would completely ruin Jill as an LI for probably 90% of players. and we would have seen a similar response to what we're seeing here.

After we have seen his cock(unfortunatelly) it is very difficult imagining him pounding her big ass. He would go MIA inside of her, but yes I get the picture of slimy guy having a go on good babe.

 

[xXwankerXx]

Really sad to see that the writer of this game cant take critique and starts lashing out in a horrendous way towards the fans and supporters who are giving honest critique.

Honestly, that's really disappointing and real immature. The 'genius' writer should understand that his story is really ridiculous, no need to sugarcoat it anymore, and feedback only improves it... also, you can't get only positive feedback, criticism will eventually follow, but the good news is that the game is good enough to make ppl talk about it, so that's still a win. I know it's their first project, but reacting like that won't make potential new supporters rush to throw money on their project.

imagine ur in his shoes and the hours you put in writing this and it turns out the way it did, its only natural to be angry after hearing how bad ur writing is all day

Imagine writing some stupid shit and getting angry that ppl don't like it. If the majority of ppl who played your game said you fucked up, you actually fucked up. Don't matter what you think or how 'logical' that shit you call a story seems to you. I know he put a lot of work into writing that script, but he should've put some brain cells into it too so ppl wouldn't have a reason to stone the characters or criticize his storytelling.

If he can't handle critics, he shouldn't be here. Acting out like a prepubescent Kardashian princess and insulting others won't help either. I just hope the dev calms him down or fires him and keeps working on the game, coz personally, I'm really curious to see how the story plays out.

Knowing the artist on a personal level this hurts, I know how much work he put in this and he doesn't deserve the hate.

Hate ?? Who the fuck hates him ?? He acts out and blows shit out of proportion when ppl just share their opinions. Players just pointed out some flaws in the script, isn't that allowed anymore nowadays ?? Or is just kissing ass and throwing money on things without giving a review or inquiring about those things allowed ??

A bit of controversy does help in the advertising efforts

A blonde whore and some NTR yay or nay situations/references always help with the 'popularity'. Can't go wrong with that, especially with NTR/cheating/dumb sluts in non NTR games.

 

[SirAlexander111]

Imagine if after the first scene with Jill in the library (I think that's like 2nd time MC meets her), there's a scene with Tybalt talking to her about how she used to get passed around the Prep house fucking all the guys and you as a player have to read Jill's thoughts about it, and she's getting around thinking about the pounding Tybalt gave her and how loud she would moan for his cock. But she says sorry, I don't do that anymore. There has to be a part of her that still wants him and thinks fondly of her past if those are the thoughts she's having. Now after Jill refuses Tybalt he threatens to release the videos he filmed of her fucking all those guys and you as the player have to read dialogue describing the pounding Jill was getting from Tybalt and you have to read that she loves his cock. That would completely ruin Jill as an LI for probably 90% of players. and we would have seen a similar response to what we're seeing here.

Jeez, buddy that's a low blow, you could have given some another example why it had to be Jill, but that's another way to explain i guess.