VN Ren'Py Broken Promises [v0.34] [Light Cavalry]

[SirAlexander111]

Btw, can you tell us who Grace's baby daddy is,

A proverb i just want to quote here,
"Between the devil and the deep sea".

 

[Havik79]

I'm disappointed in you that you could think of any other girl when queen Bella is there , I mean personal preferences are so overrated nowadays

NO clue what you are on about, once I got to the point where the first girl you meet fucked off back to the blonde girl, and I couldn't fuck her I rage quit and instantly deleted it and never gone back.

 

[Havik79]

I just got to the part with some Shelia sitting topless on the floor, I think instead of being a cop we should have been a porter, to make it easier for all the baggage these chicks are carrying.

 

[Havik79]

Swing and a miss dude, links are dead.

 

[Yuno Gasai]

Swing and a miss dude, links are dead.

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v0.1.2
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Patching instructions: Extract and paste the contents inside "game" folder. Overwrite if needed.
Changelog:
- Added a missing audio file
- Fixed typos


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[Havik79]

Meh, not bad, not great either, the girls are certainly pretty, and the render quality is a good and interesting and unique story.

I don't didn't read much of this thread, I don't know what the butthurt was over Grace she seemed ok, to me, now shit whatever the Asian chicks name is she was horrid.

Alice was nice for sure, hugely disappointed to find out one of the gingers is a bitch, other than I assume the dealer is Vanessa I didn't really care for the rest

I did play on version 0.1, so not sure if it changed, but fuck some of the writing is like a child did it, talking about cushions for ass, I hate to imagine when it comes to sex, "oh Nessy can I put my pee pee in your who ha", or worse "her sex, my sex", and what tween chick still says mummy and daddy, is the dev still waiting to start puberty or kicked/left one of those crazy American religious groups you see on youtube.

Why the fuck every single person had to speak a second language and even in self monologue was retarded and annoying as fuck, and highly distracting, thank god for skip unseen text, that whole scene with the sister Alice and the MC in the cafe was way too fucking much.

Broken Women might have been a better name, I'm not sure how long this game can run with so much drama with every chick, unless we are supposed to be the one to heal them all.

Never had and still don't a thing for older women, but at this point, the old woman with big tits at the corner shop seems the only normal one there is.

 

[Skylaroo]

I did play on version 0.1, so not sure if it changed, but fuck some of the writing is like a child did it

The irony when your whole post read like being written by a child even the signature text is very edgelord too.

On a more serious note, the writing is definitely a known issue and the dev has addressed it. So here's hoping that 0.2 would be better written if you still hang around to play.

Now that I think about it some more though, Knight_BP any chance for the 0.1 writing to be revised for the 0.2 release? The reason is that if new players try out 0.2 but the 0.1 writing is still convoluted and with excessive over-explaining, they might not even get to the (hopefully better and improved) writing in 0.2.

 

[Trasher2018]

Uff ... hard to play. So much pointless text to read thru. Why do we get all the thoughts of every girl?

We play a smart cop ... I guess - just let him comment on them to give a small hint what is going on in their head (if he catches that). I hate games where I know so much more than the character I am playing.

The whole scenario is weird as fuck. We play a virgin (?) white-knight Samaritan that is becoming a pussy magnet because he is undercover?

That is such a turn off that every woman is getting wet buy just seeing him - what is the point of the player here? The way they react, we could just drop our pants every time to just fuck them right away.

At some point I just clicked thru most of the text, just because it is repeating itself so much. Most characters are not that deep - you know what is going on with 20% of the text that is there.

The game tries to make us feel for all the girls, but I am getting just annoyed by them ... as I said, WAY to much thoughts and most of them just repeat the same stuff "oh he make me feel ...." "he is better than expected..." ... you can cut probably 40% of text just when you get rid of the repetition. The rest is mostly exposition - and a small rest is some sort of character building.

I wont rate the game, I wait at least for 3 major updates before I do that, but it is not looking so good. The girls are hot, the renders are competent and there is some story to tell, but currently it is poorly executed with the writing. All that language flexing is just to much. I get it when some of them use their native language, but no one switches between 4 languages casually. But that is minor thing ...

So - tightening the writing, get rid of every thought every character is having, dont show everything everyone is experiencing and then we might get a more enjoyable game out of it.

Currently it feels like it needs a "multiple protagonist" tag, because every character feels like a MC - just without choices. But there are just ... 2? choices in the game so that might happen in the future and to be honest I expected to get some choices, just because we spend so much time with the girls.

 

[Daastaan007]

Any Android version?

 

[AngelsAfterDark]

Honestly don't know how I feel about this game, renders looks great as I mentioned before and I like the idea of the main story but I found myself probably skipping through half of the game because most of the shit going on and or characters have feckall to do with the MC or the main story. most of the women are already in relationships and or inlove with someone else.. Also the man/woman drama these women got is a topic for another discussion. The first release was pretty lengthy for what I'm use to but most of it was just other people's stories. Maybe it's only me but at times the MC felt like a side character in a soap opera with most if not all of the drama/story focusing on other characters. Never was a fan of multiple protagonists and this kinda feels like it because there's way too much focus on what supposed to be supporting characters, but this is the first release so I still have hope.

 

[UncleFredo]

Thanks for the two scents, we'll figure it out and we're gonna work on Grace and we need to change her backstory obviously, but the renders are set. So we're gonna tone it way down and we are actually changing her backstory a bit. Not as my recent patreon post says we're going to release 0.11v it's gonna sort out a few issues with her as the words being toned down and her past being changed a bit, but it won't make everyone happy, but that's to be excpeted

Edit:
What I mean not everyone won't be happy, she will still have a situation, however not as bad as her being passed around to other men and moaning etc. not that shit. Like I said it was a misstep and it's our first AVN. So think about that

I think that toning it down is a good idea. However, there is absolutely NO way to sell any kind of blackmail here. Benoit is looking at criminal charges, disbarment, being released from the firm with prejudice, being sued by the firm for damages, not to mention being divorced by his wife. For Grace to have had the option to take over the firm she is by definition a partner, NOT an employee. Partners don't out each other, mostly because some of them have dirt they don't want public. This simply does not work.

I always support the devs/writers absolute right to take the story where ever they choose, but the whole blackmail narrative is a loser.

 

[BGRW2020]

Seems like it's too complicated, we are delving into all the characters problems - Vanessa is a drug dealer, not sure but the MC's boss may be the mother of his new acquantence Alice, Alfina has major issues and so does her family etc.... hope it gets alittle more straight forward and the MC helps these girls for real - Nice looking women and the MC model is nice too

 

[Skylaroo]

Seems like it's too complicated, we are delving into all the characters problems

Agreed. I think it's a design and presentation mistake to go with version 0.1 that introduced (all) the love interests as well as their problematic background in one go. Add the over-explanation by going too deep with inner monologue that is sometimes redundant, the result is an overwhelming amount of text about characters that we haven't got the chance to really grow into.

It doesn't help either that there are so many scenes where MC wasn't around, so we the players know about it but the MC is clueless despite us the players controlling the MC. For example, we learned how Afina has trauma through the scene at the restaurant during the dinner with her mom. Imagine if that scene happened while Afina had lunch with MC and Alice instead. It would tell the players of Afina's trauma, and we also get to see how MC as a character react to it.

I'm definitely hoping for a better 0.2, but also a revision of 0.1 to make the storytelling more consistent with more seamless transition from 0.1 to 0.2.

 

[Professor Black]

so for anyone who finished the latest update, I just wanted a clarity, does every LI have some kind of dark/ backstpry based on that early warning from the dev? Im starting to think this is gonna be drama/rape/ type of vn, still in the early part of the game

 

[eddie987]

so for anyone who finished the latest update, I just wanted a clarity, does every LI have some kind of dark/ backstpry based on that early warning from the dev? Im starting to think this is gonna be drama/rape/ type of vn, still in the early part of the game

Doesn't look like there's gonna be someone with a rape backstory, but yeah, every single one of them has some drama attached to her. I'll put a short explanation under spoilers, for each one of them in the order they are in the banner if you want to check it out.

Kylie: Has an indifferent boyfriend, who's most likely cheating on her, while she's spend a lot of time to make this relationship work.
Tianna: Not sure how to explain it, but apparantly she has no feelings for her daughter no matter how hard she tries.
Alice: Doesn't have a good relationship with her mother (most likely Tianna) and has her best friend hitting on her in a not so subtle way with a lot of yelling and arguing.
Brie: Dug addict, most likely Alice's best friend I mentioned before.
Vanessa: MC's childhood friend, they got separated after they promised to always be together and both still have feeling for each other, to a point where they here each other's voice in their head and have actual converations... Also has a cheating boyfriend and is a drug dealer.
Grace: Originally was the town bike who used to bang everything with a pulse in her younger years and ended up blackmailed for sex by one married coworker she used to have an affair with, but it was toned down to just getting blackmailed by that coworker. She still had an affair with him, but now it's because she was naive and not a hoe... Most likely has a child with an uknown person. Maybe the blackmailer, maybe an ex she talked about at some point.
Afina: Was in an abusive relationship with a dude who almost killed her, and now has some sort of ptsd that gets triggered every time she sees a couple fighting.

They are all connected to the MC one way or another, but I just wrote down what their "drama" seems to be, at least at that point.

 

[Swordsman83]

my only gripes is their eyebrows

 

[Professor Black]

Doesn't look like there's gonna be someone with a rape backstory, but yeah, every single one of them has some drama attached to her. I'll put a short explanation under spoilers, for each one of them in the order they are in the banner if you want to check it out.

Kylie: Has an indifferent boyfriend, who's most likely cheating on her, while she's spend a lot of time to make this relationship work.
Tianna: Not sure how to explain it, but apparantly she has no feelings for her daughter no matter how hard she tries.
Alice: Doesn't have a good relationship with her mother (most likely Tianna) and has her best friend hitting on her in a not so subtle way with a lot of yelling and arguing.
Brie: Dug addict, most likely Alice's best friend I mentioned before.
Vanessa: MC's childhood friend, they got separated after they promised to always be together and both still have feeling for each other, to a point where they here each other's voice in their head and have actual converations... Also has a cheating boyfriend and is a drug dealer.
Grace: Originally was the town bike who used to bang everything with a pulse in her younger years and ended up blackmailed for sex by one married coworker she used to have an affair with, but it was toned down to just getting blackmailed by that coworker. She still had an affair with him, but now it's because she was naive and not a hoe... Most likely has a child with an uknown person. Maybe the blackmailer, maybe an ex she talked about at some point.
Afina: Was in an abusive relationship with a dude who almost killed her, and now has some sort of ptsd that gets triggered every time she sees a couple fighting.

They are all connected to the MC one way or another, but I just wrote down what their "drama" seems to be, at least at that point.

I just wanna say thank you for taking your time to be descriptive in their backstory! shame, Im looking for a feel good story and not get depressed playing a porn game. reminded me of that game way back where mc got kicked out of the house and found out all his relative/LI got raped by the dad while he was gone. not the same genre, but same vibe

 

[Alex Lem]

I just wanna say thank you for taking your time to be descriptive in their backstory! shame, Im looking for a feel good story and not get depressed playing a porn game. reminded me of that game way back where mc got kicked out of the house and found out all his relative/LI got raped by the dad while he was gone. not the same genre, but same vibe

I do not know what game you are talking about, and thank God I don't know, but what you wrote is radically different, it's absolute madness. In this game, dev fucked up with Grace in the beginning, but now he's fixed it, and there's nothing close to what you wrote about, I can't imagine how it can give the same vibe

 

[Cameo]

Tianna: Not sure how to explain it, but apparantly she has no feelings for her daughter no matter how hard she tries.

Tianna doesnt have maternal instinct whatsoever those were probably the words you were looking for

 

[portgasdluigi]

Tianna doesnt have maternal instinct whatsoever those were probably the words you were looking for

I'm guessing MC will be able to help them connect with each other as the story progresses.