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It's horrible. Too depressive. I don’t even want to continue playing after the prologue to find out what other shit happened to Isabella.
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Ikr ... the poor girl fell into the deepest shit ever and the "good" part is about to come. Hell even her super slut mom kicked her out of the house because she "seduced" hubby and her dear "boyfriend" will most likely force her to prostitute herself. I wonder how the game will end.
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Because you don't like personality trait of the girl? Tad bit judgemental. I have no problem with it. Its kinda rude to say something is garbage just because you don't like it by the way. I like Key's work. Go seek your fix elsewhere then.
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It lightens up, but every story needs a fall to attempt to rise back up from.
The ending is something that nobody will see coming, but it will be hinted at as the game goes on. Not to mention their will be three different endings depening on decisions made throughout the game.
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Anybody could be put into the situation under pressure. First time taken out by a guy, not knowing what you're meant to do, or how to act as she's never been taught, or had experience. All she wanted to do was to change from being a 'Nerdy Girl' so she did these things to feel 'cool'.
IF you also read it, she wanted to be able to impress Zoey and Olivia too, so it was a mounting pressure to impress her friends that made her go ahead with a drink and trying drugs with a guy. The sex was just a result of both of those things.
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It's not a bad game, but it's just so depressing. And the player has no control over MC whatsoever. I don't see a reason why there are 'choices' when they don't matter. MC is overly naive, like she was raised in convent, not just sheltered by her mother. She didn't even know the name of a guy she lost her virginity with. And I can't believe her mother would chose stepfather over her own daughter. That never happens in real life. Never.
I guess it will just get worse for MC. She's extremely weak willed & its typical blackmail spiral story, one bad deed leads to another & another. Her 'boyfriend' seems to be piece of shit, so he will most likely turn her into drug addict & a whore. I also have gut feeling that there will be some forced lesbian romance as the only 'good route'. I kinda liked daughter-father incest, but it escalated too quickly & ended even quicker.
My advice? Give player some real choice. Not some bs dilemma between 'yes. I will definitely do it' and 'I don't want to, but I will do it'. That's not choice at all. The 'beauty' of corruption games is players control over MC - how far will I allow for MC to fall from grace, will I allow it to happen at all? This game desperately needs positive characters, both male & female, because it's way too dark & depressive at the moment. Also, dialog system with random NPC needs to be fixed, it works way too slow. I also want to have control over MC look. I don't want her to become this blonde bimbo (and possible tattoos or piercing is not my aesthetics as well).
I guess it will just get worse for MC. She's extremely weak willed & its typical blackmail spiral story, one bad deed leads to another & another. Her 'boyfriend' seems to be piece of shit, so he will most likely turn her into drug addict & a whore. I also have gut feeling that there will be some forced lesbian romance as the only 'good route'. I kinda liked daughter-father incest, but it escalated too quickly & ended even quicker.
My advice? Give player some real choice. Not some bs dilemma between 'yes. I will definitely do it' and 'I don't want to, but I will do it'. That's not choice at all. The 'beauty' of corruption games is players control over MC - how far will I allow for MC to fall from grace, will I allow it to happen at all? This game desperately needs positive characters, both male & female, because it's way too dark & depressive at the moment. Also, dialog system with random NPC needs to be fixed, it works way too slow. I also want to have control over MC look. I don't want her to become this blonde bimbo (and possible tattoos or piercing is not my aesthetics as well).
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The choices do matter for the end of the game. You say there's no choices and you're right, but in the next chapter especially there's loads of choices. Loyal Girlfriend, not Loyal. Earn money honestly, or not. The Prologue and Chapter One were essentially setting the actual GAME side of things up.
I don't want to ruin the story, but you talk about her Mother kicking her out because she believes the Step-Father, maybe she'll decide is was a rash decision and want her back? Maybe it bites her Mother in the ass because Isabella now feels independent and betrayed. Don't assume the story will be as Narrow as that. It won't be.
All choices on appearance will be optional apart from Blonde hair I'm afriad.
- May 4, 2017
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Plot - 7/10
As its * loosely * based on Emergence, I totally get why many ppl may be off put by it as it is a very depressing doujin, especially the ending. Most adult games do not start off that bad - drug rape, money rape, family rape
. As the first 3 rapes are pretty much unavoidable , maybe choices should have been removed for chapter 1 & prologue since everyone seems to be bittering over it.
I really like the direction where you are going to be honest. Literally a * What if * chapter over the actual ending of Emergence. However, this itself is also the biggest challenge itself. We know the actual ending , if fact, several types of the usual bad endings for Adult games fits perfectly into this manga. So having the option to choose to manipulate her behaviour to have a good ending seems very unlikely. The game itself is called * Broken Youth * + she is so messed up she has to see a shrink. So I get where you going with choices in being a good/bad GF, different jobs , body modifications , cheating etc but it is very unlikely she will get a * Happy Ever After * situation.
My point is, several bad ending plots will be super easy. Having a salvation good ending plot however will require really good writing and vision. It is simple enough to do a * one day she finally woke up and decide to change * but it will be a true test of your developer skills to bring this simple plot to the next level.
Artwork - 8/10
I played Office Chloe for a little bit but really didn't like how * greezy * her skin was lol. Seems like this was rectified in BY. Isabella is really beautiful and a good reflection of the manga. It was also a very good artistic choice in having both innocence/bimbo isabella face frame. Actually I doubt anyone will complain about the artwork. You got this covered well.
Dialogue - 6/10
The dialogue doesn't bother me too much actually coz porn is porn (Though I noticed you may have used a few from the manga lol). Gave a 6 becoz I think it can be improved between the shrink and Isabella. It may be better if you can do a rough research on how shrinks communicate with their patients. It felt a bit * forced * for me.
User friendly - 7/10
One of the things I hate about RPGM is not able to forward dialogues. So its a big plus on the backspace option. Plenty of save slots too. I get why you used RPGM in terms of choices , how it relaxed you instead of just dialogues which I am fine. If possible, please implement a save gallery from the very beginning as that would be the next biggest complain most ppl would whine when compared to other modes.
Wishing you all the best in your second game
As its * loosely * based on Emergence, I totally get why many ppl may be off put by it as it is a very depressing doujin, especially the ending. Most adult games do not start off that bad - drug rape, money rape, family rape
. As the first 3 rapes are pretty much unavoidable , maybe choices should have been removed for chapter 1 & prologue since everyone seems to be bittering over it.I really like the direction where you are going to be honest. Literally a * What if * chapter over the actual ending of Emergence. However, this itself is also the biggest challenge itself. We know the actual ending , if fact, several types of the usual bad endings for Adult games fits perfectly into this manga. So having the option to choose to manipulate her behaviour to have a good ending seems very unlikely. The game itself is called * Broken Youth * + she is so messed up she has to see a shrink. So I get where you going with choices in being a good/bad GF, different jobs , body modifications , cheating etc but it is very unlikely she will get a * Happy Ever After * situation.
My point is, several bad ending plots will be super easy. Having a salvation good ending plot however will require really good writing and vision. It is simple enough to do a * one day she finally woke up and decide to change * but it will be a true test of your developer skills to bring this simple plot to the next level
.Artwork - 8/10
I played Office Chloe for a little bit but really didn't like how * greezy * her skin was lol. Seems like this was rectified in BY. Isabella is really beautiful and a good reflection of the manga. It was also a very good artistic choice in having both innocence/bimbo isabella face frame. Actually I doubt anyone will complain about the artwork. You got this covered well.
Dialogue - 6/10
The dialogue doesn't bother me too much actually coz porn is porn (Though I noticed you may have used a few from the manga lol). Gave a 6 becoz I think it can be improved between the shrink and Isabella. It may be better if you can do a rough research on how shrinks communicate with their patients. It felt a bit * forced * for me.
User friendly - 7/10
One of the things I hate about RPGM is not able to forward dialogues. So its a big plus on the backspace option. Plenty of save slots too. I get why you used RPGM in terms of choices , how it relaxed you instead of just dialogues which I am fine. If possible, please implement a save gallery from the very beginning as that would be the next biggest complain most ppl would whine when compared to other modes.
Wishing you all the best in your second game
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Thanks for this, I appreciate a critique set out like this.Plot - 7/10
As its * loosely * based on Emergence, I totally get why many ppl may be off put by it as it is a very depressing doujin, especially the ending. Most adult games do not start off that bad - drug rape, money rape, family rape
I really like the direction where you are going to be honest. Literally a * What if * chapter over the actual ending of Emergence. However, this itself is also the biggest challenge itself. We know the actual ending , if fact, several types of the usual bad endings for Adult games fits perfectly into this manga. So having the option to choose to manipulate her behaviour to have a good ending seems very unlikely. The game itself is called * Broken Youth * + she is so messed up she has to see a shrink. So I get where you going with choices in being a good/bad GF, different jobs , body modifications , cheating etc but it is very unlikely she will get a * Happy Ever After * situation.
My point is, several bad ending plots will be super easy. Having a salvation good ending plot however will require really good writing and vision. It is simple enough to do a * one day she finally woke up and decide to change * but it will be a true test of your developer skills to bring this simple plot to the next level
Artwork - 8/10
I played Office Chloe for a little bit but really didn't like how * greezy * her skin was lol. Seems like this was rectified in BY. Isabella is really beautiful and a good reflection of the manga. It was also a very good artistic choice in having both innocence/bimbo isabella face frame. Actually I doubt anyone will complain about the artwork. You got this covered well.
Dialogue - 6/10
The dialogue doesn't bother me too much actually coz porn is porn (Though I noticed you may have used a few from the manga lol). Gave a 6 becoz I think it can be improved between the shrink and Isabella. It may be better if you can do a rough research on how shrinks communicate with their patients. It felt a bit * forced * for me.
User friendly - 7/10
One of the things I hate about RPGM is not able to forward dialogues. So its a big plus on the backspace option. Plenty of save slots too. I get why you used RPGM in terms of choices , how it relaxed you instead of just dialogues which I am fine. If possible, please implement a save gallery from the very beginning as that would be the next biggest complain most ppl would whine when compared to other modes.
Wishing you all the best in your second game
Response to beginning:
Yeah, it is loosely set on emergence, but after Chapter One it varies from there splitting into various paths. Paths I'd rather not talk about, but everybody is calling it linear as fuck as they can't wait for me to get some rhythm behind it...
You're not expecting a somewhat happy ending? It will become more clear as the game goes on, but like I said before the story does get a lot less narrow. Firstly, let's have some fun with jobs in Chapter Two eh?
Response to Artwork:
Thank you. My issue is I like to just experiment all of the time. I end up changing styles all the time from scene to scene. I always try to be consistent with quality, so thanks for spotting that.
Response to Dialogue:
I'll get there... haha
Response to User Friendly:
I tried to create as many save spots as I could without over doing it. No the game is free-roam, it won't really be an issue.
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Just to point out -unnecessarily i hope- how much tastes and preferences differ i'd like to mention that i especially liked Chloe's oily, glossy her skin appeared So i'd say "rectifying" is not the right word, sorry BUsybat More like you just steered away from one group with a preference toward another a bit. I don't consider this a a dealbreaker though, one aspect rarely is, not suppose to be anyway. Plenty of other things to love
So i'd say "rectifying" is not the right word, sorry BUsybat More like you just steered away from one group with a preference toward another a bit. I don't consider this a a dealbreaker though, one aspect rarely is, not suppose to be anyway. Plenty of other things to love
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Yeah; but in all fairness, I've still retained the glossy look as it my preference too! Glad you love it!Just to point out -unnecessarily i hope- how much tastes and preferences differ i'd like to mention that i especially liked Chloe's oily, glossy her skin appeared