VN Ren'Py Abandoned Connected [v0.2.5] [ChainZero]

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throd33

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Lol this is kinda funny cause of how much I relate to the confusion. Ayana’s mom is black and her dad is Jamaican. I dropped 2 of those hints that she was of Jamaican descent in the chapter. One in the middle and one in the MC’s last line of dialogue in this update.

I mentioned this before, but I say it’s funny cause people tend to confuse me and my dad for Spanish speaking as well. We are light skin. My mom is dark skinned. Dad was born in Jamaica yet he’s lighter than me, but anytime someone sees us together, particularly a Spanish speaking person, they tend to assume we’re also Spanish speaking.

So it’s kinda funny and poetic that Ayana is confusing people in that same way.
It may also come from "exposition": in Europe (at least in my case) we don't have a lot of carribean people, so it didn't click. I grew up in a diverse neighbourhood, but blacks were blacks (sorry if it sounds racist, not the intention), the only light skinned kids were of mixed races like MC. I'd never believe Ayana's mom was black if you didn't say it, she looks mediterranean (she would fit like a glove in AC Odyssey)
 
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SecretDesire

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The last sex scene with Ayana is perfect and emotional i hope there is a love confession coming up for next 1 2 updates..
She is in love with MC but MC is soo dense to understand it.
 

ShadowThrone

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The last sex scene with Ayana is perfect and emotional i hope there is a love confession coming up for next 1 2 updates..
She is in love with MC but MC is soo dense to understand it.
Can't really blame him. She puts part of their relationship on hold for a few months so she can date someone else. I thought her mother's comments on their relationship were interesting (and matched my thoughts).
 

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Lol, i joked about the possibility last update but i understand why that would be so wrong when you look at the plot.
i think it will be amazing, not only because i love her, but plot-wise if she is going to die and us the mc end up loving her it will make for a very painful experience.
 

roadie1960

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Halfway through(i think) and i really really love it. I love the slow burn, most games here are: "oooh what a beautiful enormous dick you have, please fuck me in all holes fast". And i must admit that sometimes that`s good enough for a laugh but not really my piece of cake. This gem certainly is a very good exception though and i am keeping an eye on this one. Hell of a good job man..it really is.
 

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The last sex scene with Ayana is perfect and emotional i hope there is a love confession coming up for next 1 2 updates..
She is in love with MC but MC is soo dense to understand it.
yes i agree but it's not that simple, there is indeed something that blocked their relationship in the past and it's not just MC fault. If the game was near the end i would say, " they are meant to be together, other girls are just filler, the end" but since the drama don't even actually start i will not judge and the existence of Charlotte, Charlotte's friends in MC life could change things and plans and not just for him but for Ayana too
 
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EZ8lt

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Can't really blame him. She puts part of their relationship on hold for a few months so she can date someone else. I thought her mother's comments on their relationship were interesting (and matched my thoughts).
Yep, she pretty much did that to herself. It is needed for the setup though, because if that wasn't the case, and the MC would just go after the other girls while they are both pretty much love each other without any sort of block, it would make it only a dick move, not something plausible.
 

RoadWulf

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It seems like there's a pattern so far, though it's probably just because the game is still in the early chapters, but each episode only seems to concentrate on one central character. The first one felt like Ayana, the second felt like Charlotte, this one felt more like it concentrated mostly on the MC himself even if Ayana was present.

One note: His dialogue felt like 60% more street in this update than has been in the past. It's like you kicked the "he's black" up a notch to a degree that it almost felt forced.
 

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It seems like there's a pattern so far, though it's probably just because the game is still in the early chapters, but each episode only seems to concentrate on one central character. The first one felt like Ayana, the second felt like Charlotte, this one felt more like it concentrated mostly on the MC himself even if Ayana was present.

One note: His dialogue felt like 60% more street in this update than has been in the past. It's like you kicked the "he's black" up a notch to a degree that it almost felt forced.
That was the idea, yeah but not to make him sound “more black” no. It was to humanize him more. The slang only really kicked up a notch when the Mc sees Ayana, which was also the most excited and high energy we’ve seen him thus far. So he slips involuntarily into slang cause he’s not really overthinking or stressing like he usually does. He’s just hype to see Ayana and her reaction.
 

K18

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First, nice little update, showing the relationship dynamic between MC and Ayana.

They're black. Most characters in the game are except for a few. Confusing I know, that's mostly my fault for some conflicting design choices, but Ayana is black or Caribbean American and the MC is also black (along with his sister). MC and Charlotte are just very light-skinned (the blue eyes was probably a mistake but blue eyes made Charlotte pop out more to me, that's why I went with them.) The problem is it's causing more confusion than anything else. But it's too late to change honestly.

I'd say just think of Michael Ealy or the Hodgetwins lol. There are some exceptions to the norm for sure.
On the characters ethnic background topic. Personally, i like that Connected can be used as an example for other games here that models & renders of Black (or Black-Mixed) characters don't always have to be dark-brown skin (example: Michael Jordan, Denzel Washington). For characters MC, Charlotte & Ayana being ambiguously brown, i think of lighter-brown skinned & brown skinned Black people, like Stephen Curry and Zendaya to Rihanna, Dwayne "The Rock" Johnson and Will Smith to add examples of various shades.
As you said in your other comment, there's always that confusion and genuine curiosity about mixed people and their ethnic background so it works in that favor. There's also those that favor one parent's genetic appearance over the other (example: (Half-Korean/Half-Black)).

Also like that your characters aren't the stereotypical portrayed Blacks, like hairstyle-wise nothing but afros, dreads, or speaking in complete hardcore slang, a rapper or hoodlum (nothing wrong with those, but those are likely the first to come to mind). Or in porn logic just their for cuckolding people.

Or one idea is you can just sum it up and say it's set in your own world with it's own version & twist on humans.

I mentioned this before, but I say it’s funny cause people tend to confuse me and my dad for Spanish speaking as well.
Comedian Trevor Noah (South African/Swiss) told a story of coming to America and getting mistaken as hispanic.
 
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YoloCrayolo21

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So after a nap that lasted a bit longer than intended, I was planning on uploading the fixed version, but now more people (you guys) are reporting previous saves not working. The fix I have is for the [player_name] issue but I don't want to upload it if the saves are a problem too. This never popped up in testing. I'd like a screenshot of the issue if possible so I can try to see where the issue is coming from.

The only thing I could think of that probably plays a role in saves not working is where you're saving maybe? Assuming you're saving when you see "save here", try saving before you see that. Cause I erase that line when starting a new chapter. Maybe Renpy is trying to find that line of code but it's replaced with the continuation of the game instead. That's literally the only explanation I have, lol.
This is what shows when I try to load my save, thanks btw

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mrmcfappen

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It's an immersive VN, where emotion and developping story push your buttons rather than a [for example] visible LOVE/CORRUPTION score allowing or blocking a simpler "get into her pants" option. If that isn't for you, fine... but I think its like comparing an FPS to a story-rich RPG. I get what you mean by the "indecisive MC" but it is also very applicable to Ayana.
I look at their indeciveness as the baseline story and I believe that their attitudes towards one another will inevitably change as the story progresses, allowing the author [ChainZero] to create some very different and complex paths; more like real life, huh?
I don't really get how you arrived at the conclusion that, because I find the story a bit boring, I must therefore presumably prefer, worse (or even the same) story with an arbitrary point system that I would follow strictly to "get into her pants".

I don't think you get what I meant by "indecisive MC" because I wasn't talking about his decisions or attitude concerning Ayana specifically. MC was indecisive about many things (go to uni or not, keep working at the same place or not, visit his mom or not...) which is, of course, perfectly realistic and -at least to me- it is equally uninteresting.

The crux of the matter is, I didn't see much (or any) interesting conflict or overarching goal in the story in 2.5 chapters.
You might say, the conflict will be within MC and also will surface regarding his relations with other characters, especially females of the game and the whole point is to read/witness that. Which is fine, some really do enjoy those kinds of stories very much but alas some do not (or at least, not as much.)
 

Connoisseur

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really love this "little interaction between MC and Ayana, felt really natural and give the image that they're close clearly to the player, although i'm don't really like the fact that they're sex friend, because the fact that they're already sex friend makes me think that the conflicted feeling Ayana have kinda weird, because if you're already doing that with someone why would you be so conflicted about your own feeling, but hey maybe that's just me, really hope the dev could develop that story beautifully so that it doesn't ended up being like a forced conflict for the story and serve no actual meaning for the characters

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Just finished playing the latest update, i loved it, however i must ask why did the BJ scene looked really fucked up, Ayana mouth looks really fucked for some reason, i mean it looks fine if it's straight from MC perspective, but from the side it just look fucked, hope the dev can make it better with the next update
 
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Eddy85

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so far i like .. the graphics are high class .. the ladies are amazing .. the filled details are as rare .. the story is intriguing .. i give 9/10 points .. (y):sneaky:
 
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supermanz95

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Can't even begin to tell you how refreshing it is to see such a down to earth chill protagonist and not a man-whore sociopath, you could tell that him and his step-dad had a genuine bond. Not gonna lie this game has some epic feet content, also Ayana is a total bro.
 

Virulenz

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To bad it is a male protagonist...it would be so much more exciting if they were identical female twins ^^
 
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Nightless

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HOLY SHIT how did I miss this game? Ayana is just too damn cute and all the other chars have character too. Really well writen in my opinion and also looks great :)
 
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hotte

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Stumbled across this one today. Was really surprised by the quality and proper english with very few typos. I am impressed. But dude, no matter what, the "N-Word". No no. Doesn't matter if the girl herself is partial jamaican. The N is also absolute random and for no reason. Be like a panda dude, he's black, white and asian.

First thought that the N word was dropped because of:

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