- Feb 17, 2018
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Thanks for the kind words. I'm truly glad people seem to like it so much so far. In terms of Ayana's language, I won't make it annoyingly off-putting. If you read one of my previous comments, I mentioned that I'm from NYC. Born & raised in the hood. I don't love it, but the way she talks just comes naturally to me because this is how I've been bred to talk to my peers since I was like 13. I'm 22 now. It's vulgar but it's also just how things are. I understand it might be uncomfortable or cringy for others, and I did take that into account when I was writing this. But I'll make sure the slang doesn't get too off the rails.ChainZero LOVED the game, beautiful work man
loved the look of the MC's apartment, it looks very cozy
a nice big fluffy carpet in front of the TV would be a nice edition too
MC has a dog, and it's a golden lab, now that is a BIG + in my book and she is absolutely adorable
Ayana is beautiful, she reminds me so much of my ex, some scenes when she is face to face with the MC is just a little bit scary for me to process
loved her conection and scenes when playing with Lola, great job
the renders and animations are very well done, no suprises there
the only negative thing in my book are those few words by Ayana when she is talking like she's a black dude from the hood, that needs to go
putting this on my watch list, great job on your first VN
Like many, I find it a bit unattractive when a girl cusses too much or tries too hard. I faced a LOT of that in high school so I tried to find a balance with Ayana (who is black btw.) She's a beautiful girl but I did want to portray her with some flaws. I believe the slang adds another layer to her character and it makes her a bit unique, even if that uniqueness may appear unattractive. That's the point.
