- May 18, 2021
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Ok here's my opinion.
I won't discuss the purely technical side because as a first work I understand the difficulties.
I have some doubts regarding the writing though.
The choice to have the MC tell the story in the first person would be good. The fact is that he explains everything around him and talks about himself as if he were an external narrator and not like a demon.
Let me explain better: he reiterates several times that he is capable of bad and unspeakable things and goes on to describe what he did as if he was not even there. Wouldn't it be better to have us read a typical villain's reasoning? Maybe talk about why a demon enjoys to do what he does?
I don't know, personally I would watch the whole dialogues again.
Positive note for the style that I really appreciate.
I won't discuss the purely technical side because as a first work I understand the difficulties.
I have some doubts regarding the writing though.
The choice to have the MC tell the story in the first person would be good. The fact is that he explains everything around him and talks about himself as if he were an external narrator and not like a demon.
Let me explain better: he reiterates several times that he is capable of bad and unspeakable things and goes on to describe what he did as if he was not even there. Wouldn't it be better to have us read a typical villain's reasoning? Maybe talk about why a demon enjoys to do what he does?
I don't know, personally I would watch the whole dialogues again.
Positive note for the style that I really appreciate.
- Sep 11, 2023
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This is one of those creative thing that did not get fixed in the entirety. Originally it was supposed to be a narrator, but our alpha test reader(s) didnt like it so it was attempted to be changed. This obvious failed in a several spots. This will be fixed and polished before our next update. Most likely moving back to the narrator style as I thought it worked better.
Thank you.
- Sep 14, 2023
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I would assume if you are complaining about our sex scenes , you're involved in our story (just joking don't kill me) Joke aside tho , we are working on polishing the novel chapter before continuing on and yes we will finish the sex scenes and hopefully bring some of our readers to their own orgasm and thank you for the feedback and taking the time to read our story.
- Jun 30, 2018
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At this time no, the sex scenes are image squenced. We are working on finishing and polishing the chapter now, the plan is to include animated sex scenes.
I really think instagram filters made people think women actually look like that.
Any other porn games with similar aesthetic and style to this? Reminds me of VTMB too, modern but with dark fantasy elements. Also I like a protagonist who is not necessarily a complete good guy either.
- Sep 11, 2023
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People take picture of themselves and post them on instagram? I thought they only posted pictures of food.
- Sep 14, 2023
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I am not aware of any other games like ours , but our protagonist is most definitely not a good guy. I do hope you enjoyed our novel.
- Sep 11, 2023
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This has been implemented, will be seen in the next update
- Aug 21, 2018
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Ok ... its ... a start?
It is very short with very view choices. I like the setting, but even with the amount of words used, I dont really have grasp on the characters. It doesnt help that the game ignores the customs names at the end.
And I have the feeling that there is some repetition in the writing already - I havent checked that, but it feels as if there are some phrases that are uses more than once.
In general it is quite word heavy for the little that is told. Then there is the issue that it is not as easy as it should be to see the transition from dialog to narration. Maybe use another font and not just cursive.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Ok ... end then we have the visuals.
Puh ... yeah it is a learning piece - but man. That is way to blurry 90% of the time. When you use so low poly models and stuff, you have to deliver sharp images. The models look horrible at times - the dicks are just tacked on and change colors.
The background image is sharp, the sofa is sharp, but all characters are blurry as fuck. Then we have several clipping issues (boots from MC), the feet/leg from the black haired woman.
Here the pillar is sharp and crisp, but the interesting part is blurry again.
Here the couple in the bg is sharper than the focus of the scene - and again clipping issues.
With the missing descriptive texts for the sex scenes and all that, this just feels like are rushed release. I think probably 30-40% of the images lack proper focus.
I dont know what render engine that is, but this looks like some low demanding real time stuff - especially when there are no render times, the posing and focus must be way better.
In the end it is trying to be a VISUAL novel ... so...
I think the setting could be fun - even when I have no idea what the premise is. There are these 2 demons and their 2 pets ... doing sexy stuff. We get a bit of backstory, but the game does not take the time to explain why we are where we are, and what we do there ... So its as gonzo as it gets in that regard ... but then there is all that text that tries to build a mystic atmosphere and sets a otherworldly tone ...
My recommendation would be to redo the images to get rid of all images with blurry characters (the sharpness of the title image in this thread is good), cut down the text in some parts to streamline it and use the word count to be a bit more focused to introduce the characters.
It is very short with very view choices. I like the setting, but even with the amount of words used, I dont really have grasp on the characters. It doesnt help that the game ignores the customs names at the end.
And I have the feeling that there is some repetition in the writing already - I havent checked that, but it feels as if there are some phrases that are uses more than once.
In general it is quite word heavy for the little that is told. Then there is the issue that it is not as easy as it should be to see the transition from dialog to narration. Maybe use another font and not just cursive.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Come closer so I can see you better, he said in a husky voice.
Ok ... end then we have the visuals.
Puh ... yeah it is a learning piece - but man. That is way to blurry 90% of the time. When you use so low poly models and stuff, you have to deliver sharp images. The models look horrible at times - the dicks are just tacked on and change colors.
The background image is sharp, the sofa is sharp, but all characters are blurry as fuck. Then we have several clipping issues (boots from MC), the feet/leg from the black haired woman.
Here the pillar is sharp and crisp, but the interesting part is blurry again.
Here the couple in the bg is sharper than the focus of the scene - and again clipping issues.
With the missing descriptive texts for the sex scenes and all that, this just feels like are rushed release. I think probably 30-40% of the images lack proper focus.
I dont know what render engine that is, but this looks like some low demanding real time stuff - especially when there are no render times, the posing and focus must be way better.
In the end it is trying to be a VISUAL novel ... so...
I think the setting could be fun - even when I have no idea what the premise is. There are these 2 demons and their 2 pets ... doing sexy stuff. We get a bit of backstory, but the game does not take the time to explain why we are where we are, and what we do there ... So its as gonzo as it gets in that regard ... but then there is all that text that tries to build a mystic atmosphere and sets a otherworldly tone ...
My recommendation would be to redo the images to get rid of all images with blurry characters (the sharpness of the title image in this thread is good), cut down the text in some parts to streamline it and use the word count to be a bit more focused to introduce the characters.
- Sep 14, 2023
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Thank you for reading and for the in depth comment. As is we're already working on improving the script, the story line and the quality of the images. There are images that are intentionally blurry that is no mistake. Some of the images switch focus from the one who's talking to the person they are talking about, that is also intentional just like in a movie. With that said, however I do admit that there are images where the focus does get blurry and that will be fixed in the next update. Also, there will be text during the sex scenes.
- Sep 11, 2023
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This has been addressed and will be seen in the next upload.
I can tell you've never been in SecondLife.
- Aug 21, 2018
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Oh .. around 2004/5 I think I tested it.
But a 20 year old game should not be a reference for visual fidelity ^^
- Sep 11, 2023
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Why not? There are no rules against it, that I found. SL actually has a rule that encourages so long as nothing imaged/videoed does not violate ToS. It also fit within our budget to make our story and make unique character models. Also unlike much older games that are still popular SL updated their graphics, bodies, skins and so on. So while it is a 20+ year old visual social network, it's also been updated properly again unlike other popular games that are older.
- Feb 16, 2019
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Happens... Would be more worried about what happens next door in real world than in any VN or erotic game...