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aquilesjodoyo

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Exactly, expand ID with hot sex scenes with the secondary characters instead of being there doing absolutely nothing.
I think exactly the same as you, what Daval should do to make everyone happy is create new stories with the characters already introduced as he plans to do with Sarah's friend in Togheter or failing that at least create situations in which Sofia and Martha have some action with others that are not exactly Daniel, I agree with those points and I also agree that Daval changed the course of the story because of the subscribers who only want to see Daniel and Lana together. This is just my opinion and I think that at first Daval's intention was for Daniel to have some scenes with Lana's friends but because of the subscribers he regretted it and decided to change it to lengthen as much as possible the plot of Daniel and Lana with Sofia trying to discover them, forgive my English but I don't speak the language so I'll just translate it quickly with google
 
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Personally, I have little regard for Martha. The prospect of spending weeks or even months on her character feels like a narrative distraction, a real dampener on my enthusiasm. Her appearance doesn’t captivate me whatsoever, and I had hoped her role concluded back in Chapter 1 when she planted the seed of incest among her peers, potentially allowing her to fade into the background. Unfortunately, that doesn't seem to be the case.

Sophia is portrayed as a mindless nympho, willing to have sex with just about anyone, which could make her the perfect third fiddle and somewhat of a catalyst for the dynamic between Lana and Daniel. She could serve as a distraction for Daniel's dad while Lana and Daniel continue to engage in increasingly spicier situations around him.

However, the attention seems to be getting diluted across too many characters in the Daval world and as such the development time is being spread too thin.

If I could choose someone to return from Chapter 1, it would be Rosa, not Martha. Rosa’s character had the strongest moral compass, adding an interesting layer of corruption to the narrative. She was also the most ethnically diverse of the group, which would, in my perspective, enhance the allure of her scenes.

Martha's design comes off as plain and boring. There are more compelling characters who deserve the spotlight, like Hazel and Charlotte in Madness Together (Chapter 3, Pages 102-104). I was particularly interested in seeing whether Daniel or David could engage with that dynamic duo and land that seemingly lesbian plane, especially now that David and his sister are back at the same motel from Chapter 3—perhaps an artistic choice due to limited assets, but it does seem to be the same one.

I had envisioned a scenario where David might become part of a fiery threesome with the lesbians, which could be witnessed by his sister, further stoking her incestuous desires which would lead to the eventual moment where she will undoubtedly fuck her brother.

That's my take, quite the mouthful, but it almost wrote itself. It's my personal opinion so feel free to disagree.
 
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aquilesjodoyo

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Nov 12, 2023
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Personally, I have little regard for Martha. The prospect of spending weeks or even months on her character feels like a narrative distraction, a real dampener on my enthusiasm. Her appearance doesn’t captivate me whatsoever, and I had hoped her role concluded back in Chapter 1 when she planted the seed of incest among her peers, potentially allowing her to fade into the background. Unfortunately, that doesn't seem to be the case.

Sophia is portrayed as a mindless nympho, willing to have sex with just about anyone, which could make her the perfect third fiddle and somewhat of a catalyst for the dynamic between Lana and Daniel. She could serve as a distraction for Daniel's dad while Lana and Daniel continue to engage in increasingly spicier situations around him.

However, the attention seems to be getting diluted across too many characters in the Daval world and as such the development time is being spread too thin.

If I could choose someone to return from Chapter 1, it would be Rosa, not Martha. Rosa’s character had the strongest moral compass, adding an interesting layer of corruption to the narrative. She was also the most ethnically diverse of the group, which would, in my perspective, enhance the allure of her scenes.

Martha's design comes off as plain and boring. There are more compelling characters who deserve the spotlight, like Hazel and Charlotte in 'Madness Together' (Chapter 3, Pages 102-104). I was particularly interested in seeing whether Daniel or David could engage with that dynamic duo and land that seemingly lesbian plane, especially now that David and his sister are back at the same motel from Chapter 3—perhaps an artistic choice due to limited assets, but it does seem to be the same one.

I had envisioned a scenario where David might become part of a fiery threesome with the lesbians, which could be witnessed by his sister, further stoking her incestuous desires which would lead to the eventual moment where she will undoubtedly fuck her brother.

That's my take, quite the mouthful, but it almost wrote itself.
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Terror77

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Aug 15, 2017
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Congratulations, congratulations, you sought to diversify your content for money, and you sold your comic TO for more money to the Polish peter81, now you can't keep your subscribers happy and you're afraid of knowing how they will criticize your next update and I'll tell you something, wait until the focus is on your delays.
 
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Terror77

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Aug 15, 2017
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Subs clearly changed Daval intentions about the plot of the comic thats the difference and by proxy he lost genuity, is not hubris at all to point that out and if you dont agree with that well deal with it.

I insulted the characters so stop being soft dude :BootyTime:
And what do you say about you who always had the false flag of not liking uncle peter "but" it gives plot to the story, you know that there were not the majority of the subs who wanted peter's story, it was one who paid daval 500 dollars and daval shit on those who paid him month after month, do you have to say it was good or bad? daval took away authenticity from the story because peter is not in his idea and besides he only paid attention to 1 sub of the more than 1500 that he had at that time, you are just a hypocrite who seeks to justify your fetishes and impose them on others.
 
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And what do you say about you who always had the false flag of not liking uncle peter "but" it gives plot to the story, you know that there were not the majority of the subs who wanted peter's story, it was one who paid daval 500 dollars and daval shit on those who paid him month after month, do you have to say it was good or bad? daval took away authenticity from the story because peter is not in his idea and besides he only paid attention to 1 sub of the more than 1500 that he had at that time, you are just a hypocrite who seeks to justify your fetishes and impose them on others.
"false flag of not liking uncle peter" what :KEK:

You clearly don't know what are you talking about , I'm not a hypocrite and if what you said is true about one dude paid for Uncle Peter inclusion well that just proves my point that money controls Davals creativity and vision.

Subs or whoever pays him controls his creation and that's not ok.
 
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Terror77

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"false flag of not liking uncle peter" what :KEK:

You clearly don't know what are you talking about , I'm not a hypocrite and if what you said is true about one dude paid for Uncle Peter inclusion well that just proves my point that money controls Davals creativity and vision.

Subs or whoever pays him controls his creation and that's not ok.
Don't play dumb because you knew very well about the payment for including Peter and you didn't complain because it was something you liked, I recognize you in this forum and in allporncomix and since you changed your nickname a little that's why I call you a hypocrite
 

_OBLIVION_

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Don't play dumb because you knew very well about the payment for including Peter and you didn't complain because it was something you liked, I recognize you in this forum and in allporncomix and since you changed your nickname a little that's why I call you a hypocrite
I didn't know about that payment of Pete inclusion so stop lying, no wonder why it felt so out of place at the moment, if I like it or not doesn't change the fact that Daval priorities whoever gives him money and again that's not ok, I changed my name because I fucking wanted to I'm not hiding from anyone that doesn't make me a hypocrite so don't be a ignorant fool and stop the slander.
 
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