HTML Abandoned Demitransference [v0.2.0] [UnrulyDogBoy]

[Deleted member 2666402]

Hello.

Hello! Thank you for a GREAT post. I will try to respond.

I like the game but it was very hard to make a review because for me it's more a story than a game.

Fair assessment. I'd say it is a CYOA, which a story with aspects for a game.

So, in order to share my thoughts, I wanted to try every possibilities but after 17 attempts with only Jake and Trent, I think I've seen enough to have a global idea of the game.
I've also paid more attention to the narration, especially the introduction and I still don't understand the reactions of Tiffany, Jake and Trent, and how they could go to such length to drag you down and how other's people believing it so easily. Maybe we'll learn more about it later on.

This will be answered in the next update.
I have tried to allude to the irrational behavior of Tiffany, Jake, and Trent. People can be hateful BUT their actions seem disproportional AND (as you point out) everyone seems to go along with them. Mateo indicated that he regrets his action. Hmmm....
More info coming in June...

At this point, we transform Jake 3 times, Trent 2 times and Tiffany 1 time.
Jake seems to be more affected, like an empty shell. Tiffany doesn't seem mature at all at the festival. And Trent, I don't know what to think about him : he's supposed to be in love with Adam but I don't feel it. I only feel obsession and possessiveness. The "Princess" naming during the training came out of nowhere for me.

I am going to try to improve the Jake story in the next update, so some of his interactions will change.
Tiffany at the festival was very immature. Very different from what we've been told about her. What is up with that?
Trent. In love? I don't feel that either. Obsession, possessiveness CHECK. The MC has been warned about Trent, nothing I can do if he won't listen. (I probably was heavy-handed with the princess).

The variety of characters is well thought, though I don't know why I have difficulties to differentiate Vadim and Victor.

Victor = big heart. Vadim = big cock

The trainings :
I feel the length of each path is way too different, especially between Coach Joel training (he's not invited to Ryder's picnic like the others) and Trent training with Grey (since there is a night session).

STOP LOOKING AT MY NOTES!!!! Joel's training is getting rewrite and he gets to go to the picnic. It still won't be as long as the Grey training but it will feel comparable.

If you choose training with Paul and Liam and decide to have sex with the tweens transformed, the images of the threesome is confusing since Lia is blonde in the image of sex while you describe her with brown/dark hair at first.

Sorry.

The preview for Grey's training with you dominant is tempting.

Coming in June....

I'm confused with the beer pong : does it change anything to the tranformation to loose, cheat or play fair? I feel like it's the same result.

It is unfinished (my interests moved elsewhere and I need to go back) Basically, there are four versions planned: Trent gets to shape the transformations, you get to shape the transformations, Ryder gets to shape the transformations, or Grey shapes them. Probably will do for JUNE

The visits :
It's easy to have coach Joel or Deshawn, and you understand what you have to do for Derrick's visit. But for Vadim, it took me some time to unlock him since I usually prefer training with coach Joel and avoid Grey's training because it's too much for me.

Many of the visits will have more than one way to unlock. So you can still open up Vadim through a "yet to be determined" path.

The side stories :
Fratboy in trouble, Mismatched couple and Victor's picnic are all pleasant. Though, if you didn't choose the good transformations, nothing happens or you can't do anything. In that case, I think they shouldn't appear.
The transformations for mismatched couple are kept for the second part?
The second part for Victor, An Event with Victor A pool Party, is only an exchange of dicks pics?

I recommend you turn on the "Pass all stat checks" CHEAT and re-explore the side stories. There are three different events for all of them. I probably need to rethink using stats to restrict access to the side stories because I suspect many players have not seen a lot of the content.

The mini events :
Rhett and Tank are 2 jerks at first but they are kind of cute if you choose the right path.
Rhett could continue to appear after the school event because the chemistry works well between them. What happens to Michael, Rhett's stalker, after the transformation?

There is more story planned for Rhett and Michael will moonlight as a dancer at the club.

It's hard to win against Tank. I think I can only win when I steal Trent strength 2 times.

I SHOULD do what Randiel did and make a spreadsheet letting people know how to get different outcomes.

The artist is cool. I like reversible content (that's what I choose for Deshawn).

Agree

The divine underwear shouldh't appear after the second time since it's the same thing (or we should alternate between the 2 parts).

Oh...I thought it stopped showing up...YIKES that is a bug that needs to get squished. Thanks... There is more underwear story coming.

There should be something with Tyrone after Campus Hypnosis. And I found it too easy for Adam to be hypnotized since he is a demigod.

There are three more Tyrone events planned. Adam agrees to the hypnosis...so I see him as a willing subject so easier to put under. BUT Tyrone gives Adam commands so that it would be hard for anyone other than Tyrone to hypnotize him.

In Dream Transference, Dr Duran's dialog is in pink, the same color as Adam's thoughts, it's confusing.

That was planned. Dr. Duran has a connection to Adam through the machine. Okay maybe it isn't a great plan.

The same, if we choose the friendship option, when we have to choose between top/bottom later on, Ryan continues to call Adam bro. It's really strange since we're not in the friendship zone anymore.

This isn't a friendship "bro" Ryan thinks Adam is his brother. And ... yea incest stuff

Cayden is my favorite event. Though if you choose to workout only the first time, you won't be able to encounter Torro. I think a sexy workout without sex with Torro should be possible.

Torro should appear AFTER you either fuck or are fucked by Cayden. Even if you just workout the first time. I'll check on that to be sure its working.

There should be some content for Blake alone, outside of Issac's event.

Planned (so, good idea)

And I think we should go further with Isaiah in the study lounge since it's clear he's interested.

Planned (so, good idea)

Take a Nap/Go to Bed Early/Go Back to Bed :
There should be a possibility to be joined when you sleep.

Liam as a body pillow?

I like the reference you made for young Marcus - Expanded and Campus Magnum.

I love those guys (also The Retreat and The Chosen One)

You're realy good at choosing pics : Denis Vega when you run is my favorite, the Big Bad Wolf isn't bad either, Daimhin avatar is great (too bad, Daimhin is no more).

Thanks. I watch a lot of porn.
And how many times do I have to say in F95 that NO ONE DIES IN CHAPTER ONE before people understand the big spoiler I am dropping

There should be more content for the Slam/Dom couple. They were pretty cute.

This is the first time anyone requested this. I didn't think anyone cared about that little sub story. We will return to them when Adam starts hunting down the red eyes in Act Two.

Some precisions that would be useful :
What is the difference for HC between trust and believe. It's vague.
What is Tink background to understand Grey reaction?
We need more Alex's story, not the sad ones only.
I understand Nym's anger but I can't grasp why it happened at that time.

HC is a bit of a mystery at this point and it is going to stay that way.
The Grey story will continue to trickle out. Tink made some bad choices and a lot of people important to Grey got hurt.
Alex. Love that guy. I need to be better to him. Would it help to know that brought fire to the First People?
Nym was treated very poorly in the past by men who misused their power. She worries that Adam will be like those men.

I think I found a dead end. When you choose Workout in the Gym, it can lead you to Training the Trainer Later Visits without any link.

I'll investigate.

So, to conclude, I like the game because you can choose what you want do with every character you encounter, though I don't know where it's leading. And you can continue to play outside the main story.

I promise there is a main plot and there are endings (and a cannon ending)

Cool. I felt bad when the entity took control over Mateo.

Don't give up on Mateo.

While I'm at it, I remember in an older version, the event with Drew was more violent (Adam nearly lost consciouness) and 2 people were needed to stop him. Did you rewrite it or I didn't choose the right actions to lead there?

When Drew attacks (in every version), he and the MC are alone. So not sure what you are thinking. I reworked some of the dialog in the Drew attack but...

Waiting for the end of act 1.

Me too...

 

[alexxxx000]

(I probably was heavy-handed with the princess).

B-b-but I like being called Princess

 

[Oliz82]

Hello.

Thank you for taking your time to answer everything. I'm really happy to understand and enjoy the game better.

Victor = big heart. Vadim = big cock

STOP LOOKING AT MY NOTES!!!! Joel's training is getting rewrite and he gets to go to the picnic. It still won't be as long as the Grey training but it will feel comparable.

That was planned. Dr. Duran has a connection to Adam through the machine. Okay maybe it isn't a great plan.

And how many times do I have to say in F95 that NO ONE DIES IN CHAPTER ONE before people understand the big spoiler I am dropping

This is the first time anyone requested this. I didn't think anyone cared about that little sub story. We will return to them when Adam starts hunting down the red eyes in Act Two.

When Drew attacks (in every version), he and the MC are alone. So not sure what you are thinking. I reworked some of the dialog in the Drew attack but...

_So they have 2 things in common : the first letter of their first name and something big.

_I would love to. You seem to overflow with ideas. And I'm glad coach Joel will go to the picnic.

_That explains the color. You should use a darker pink then.

_Well, I know he isn't dead. He just returned to his essence and Adam stole his power and eternity. I didn't think he could come back though, not in the same form anyway.

_I don't know why they make their way through my heart. It's a good thing they come back later.

_Well I remember it was more violent. The red eyes took control of Drew completely. There was also 3 choices when having breakfast with Drew while there is only 2 now. I can't say much more, it was long ago.

PS : I took a screen capture of the dead end if it helps you better.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Hello.

Thank you for taking your time to answer everything. I'm really happy to understand and enjoy the game better.


_So they have 2 things in common : the first letter of their first name and something big.

_I would love to. You seem to overflow with ideas. And I'm glad coach Joel will go to the picnic.

_That explains the color. You should use a darker pink then.

_Well, I know he isn't dead. He just returned to his essence and Adam stole his power and eternity. I didn't think he could come back though, not in the same form anyway.

_I don't know why they make their way through my heart. It's a good thing they come back later.

_Well I remember it was more violent. The red eyes took control of Drew completely. There was also 3 choices when having breakfast with Drew while there is only 2 now. I can't say much more, it was long ago.

PS : I took a screen capture of the dead end if it helps you better.

Thank you for your deep dive into Demi. It is tough to know if things come across as intended. There ARE three choice during breakfast but some are only visible if you have certain stats. I should probably go back and show all choices but make certain ones grey.

Hmmm I thought I fixed that dead-end two updates ago (but clearly not).

Also, please play the Sunday's with Victor story with the Cheat Mode on...There are 8 different levels 3 Victor events. Also, Frat Boy in trouble stage 3 introduces the Skater Boys.

Unruly


(wow re-reading my response to you...so many typos...it was late...I was horny...)

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

B-b-but I like being called Princess

** PETS ALEXXXX000 ** You'll always be "Princess" to me.

 

[Oliz82]

Thank you for your deep dive into Demi. It is tough to know if things come across as intended. There ARE three choice during breakfast but some are only visible if you have certain stats. I should probably go back and show all choices but make certain ones grey.

Hmmm I thought I fixed that dead-end two updates ago (but clearly not).

Also, please play the Sunday's with Victor story with the Cheat Mode on...There are 8 different levels 3 Victor events. Also, Frat Boy in trouble stage 3 introduces the Skater Boys.

Unruly


(wow re-reading my response to you...so many typos...it was late...I was horny...)

Well, when you like something, you tend to go deeper and deeper in the universe . And it was my pleasure. Even the kinks I don't like aren't extreme, so I can also watch through those paths.

Since you've suggested the cheat mode, I've tried it.

I've been able to see the 3 choices with Drew but it doesn't seem similar to what I remember. It's nothing serious, the actual paths are good enough.

Mismatched couple : we're able to add them to hookup plus Kyle or Melissa depending on what you choose (why not the 2 of them, it could be hot to choose the couple, Kyle or Melissa depending on your mood).

Sunday Afternoon (Victor Events) : I've been able to see Sean the pool boy, Felix the limo driver, Brandon the spy (he is stunning and I feel like I've seen the model somewhere else), John/Johnny, Tyler, the bouncer, Brett the busboy, Buck (I don't know if he's been really hurt but he likes to hurt others even outside of Grey training), Derrick and Ryder. And after the third part, we add Victor to hookup but he is either top or bottom . I wish I could have a versatile Victor. Felix the limo driver could reappear outside this side story, he was fun to have around.

Frat boy in trouble : well, it seems I had already seen the 3 parts. I like the three Characters JT, Erik and Sten, the skater boys.
I feel like how you rescue JT doesn't matter for the other parts. The same, the spanking part doesn't change anything. The choices in the third part are all tempting so I never know what to choose (even the incest one, though I don't like it).

Was your tiredness really a problem? Since you're always horny, I think it's more this one.

It is unfinished (my interests moved elsewhere and I need to go back) Basically, there are four versions planned: Trent gets to shape the transformations, you get to shape the transformations, Ryder gets to shape the transformations, or Grey shapes them. Probably will do for JUNE

HC is a bit of a mystery at this point and it is going to stay that way.
The Grey story will continue to trickle out. Tink made some bad choices and a lot of people important to Grey got hurt.
Alex. Love that guy. I need to be better to him. Would it help to know that brought fire to the First People?
Nym was treated very poorly in the past by men who misused their power. She worries that Adam will be like those men.

I forgot to reply to those.

_Ok. With 4 endings, it's more interesting. And you can choose with what you like or what you think is more appropriate for the story. Now I'm really looking forward to it.
While I'm at it, I forgot to ask about the wrestle match. It's already clear that wining or loosing have consequences. Though I don't have any idea how you could insert something depending on the movement you described which could work fine and be easy to understand and play. I have no idea how a fight work so it's more unsetting.

_I know HC is mysterious but it was too mysterious for me. That's why I asked.
Cool. More worldbuilding is always welcome.
I think you talk about it in the training part.
Dale explains it during training. I was more surprised by the timing (Adam knows nothing about her and Dale and, while explaining, she explodes). I could understand her reaction if Adam did something wrong (not knowing somebody isn't enough to react like this for me so there must be something else).

Anyway, Demitransference and Young Marcus - Expanded are pleasant to read so it's always great to speak to Randiel and you Unruly. Plus the games are wonderful.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Well, when you like something, you tend to go deeper and deeper in the universe . And it was my pleasure. Even the kinks I don't like aren't extreme, so I can also watch through those paths.

Since you've suggested the cheat mode, I've tried it.

I've been able to see the 3 choices with Drew but it doesn't seem similar to what I remember. It's nothing serious, the actual paths are good enough.

Mismatched couple : we're able to add them to hookup plus Kyle or Melissa depending on what you choose (why not the 2 of them, it could be hot to choose the couple, Kyle or Melissa depending on your mood).

Sunday Afternoon (Victor Events) : I've been able to see Sean the pool boy, Felix the limo driver, Brandon the spy (he is stunning and I feel like I've seen the model somewhere else), John/Johnny, Tyler, the bouncer, Brett the busboy, Buck (I don't know if he's been really hurt but he likes to hurt others even outside of Grey training), Derrick and Ryder. And after the third part, we add Victor to hookup but he is either top or bottom . I wish I could have a versatile Victor. Felix the limo driver could reappear outside this side story, he was fun to have around.

Frat boy in trouble : well, it seems I had already seen the 3 parts. I like the three Characters JT, Erik and Sten, the skater boys.
I feel like how you rescue JT doesn't matter for the other parts. The same, the spanking part doesn't change anything. The choices in the third part are all tempting so I never know what to choose (even the incest one, though I don't like it).

Was your tiredness really a problem? Since you're always horny, I think it's more this one.


I forgot to reply to those.

_Ok. With 4 endings, it's more interesting. And you can choose with what you like or what you think is more appropriate for the story. Now I'm really looking forward to it.
While I'm at it, I forgot to ask about the wrestle match. It's already clear that wining or loosing have consequences. Though I don't have any idea how you could insert something depending on the movement you described which could work fine and be easy to understand and play. I have no idea how a fight work so it's more unsetting.

_I know HC is mysterious but it was too mysterious for me. That's why I asked.
Cool. More worldbuilding is always welcome.
I think you talk about it in the training part.
Dale explains it during training. I was more surprised by the timing (Adam knows nothing about her and Dale and, while explaining, she explodes). I could understand her reaction if Adam did something wrong (not knowing somebody isn't enough to react like this for me so there must be something else).

Anyway, Demitransference and Young Marcus - Expanded are pleasant to read so it's always great to speak to Randiel and you Unruly. Plus the games are wonderful.

I’ll re-read Nym during training. Sometimes during editing I remove entire sections of story. Maybe Nym’s blow up is a bad patch job. I’ll look into it.

Unruly

 

[Oliz82]

I’ll re-read Nym during training. Sometimes during editing I remove entire sections of story. Maybe Nym’s blow up is a bad patch job. I’ll look into it.

Unruly

Well, you don't have to if you think that's how it's supposed to happen. After all, it's your game and I seem to be the only one to find it strange. The same for the rest : I just shared my thoughts, questions and ideas to help you make a better game but the final decision is yours. And you do an amazing job.

Waiting for June impatiently.

 

[DWolfAmarok]

Liam as a body pillow?

Why wasn't this a thing from the beginning!? Bad Dog, bet you just looking to be punished.

Liam (and by extension Paul) needs more time. If not gonna work on the part of the story that use them yet it'll be nice to just add Liam to the visits and eventually Paul too.
With what HC and Ryder has said. And Paul "Several times, I had to restrain him from showing up at your place in the middle of the night" after that I'd just give them a copy of my keys, he's welcome to cuddle when needed. Man, I love Liam, but I wanna do so much more with Paul, been "straight" and all. XD


Also, by the Gods! You have such a blessing to choose pics. I've reverse image search some of them to adquire more material of said character.
Are we gonna get visit from Victor? Or Fratguy? And I can't wait for more Alex, The Crow need some love, someone show him some gratitude. And his intro pic is super sexy.

I can only think of two or three games that I like so many characters. I pretty much wanna bang everyone. And the writing is great.

Oh, I love YM-E and The Retreat. But never heard of The Chosen One, now I wanna try that. Can you point me in the right direction. Tried googling but it's been uncooperative. And nothing here or TF

Anyway, dear pup. Thank you so very very much for sharing this amazing game with us.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Why wasn't this a thing from the beginning!? Bad Dog, bet you just looking to be punished.

Liam (and by extension Paul) needs more time. If not gonna work on the part of the story that use them yet it'll be nice to just add Liam to the visits and eventually Paul too.
With what HC and Ryder has said. And Paul "Several times, I had to restrain him from showing up at your place in the middle of the night" after that I'd just give them a copy of my keys, he's welcome to cuddle when needed. Man, I love Liam, but I wanna do so much more with Paul, been "straight" and all. XD


Also, by the Gods! You have such a blessing to choose pics. I've reverse image search some of them to adquire more material of said character.
Are we gonna get visit from Victor? Or Fratguy? And I can't wait for more Alex, The Crow need some love, someone show him some gratitude. And his intro pic is super sexy.

I can only think of two or three games that I like so many characters. I pretty much wanna bang everyone. And the writing is great.

Oh, I love YM-E and The Retreat. But never heard of The Chosen One, now I wanna try that. Can you point me in the right direction. Tried googling but it's been uncooperative. And nothing here or TF

Anyway, dear pup. Thank you so very very much for sharing this amazing game with us.

You are far too kind.

I was actually writing Liam and Paul content this evening. So they are getting more time in ACT 1. Eventually, many of the characters will get visits (It is hard to write Victor content, I need both hands to type). I love Alex as well. I have plans for him, the MC, some stoners, and some narcotics in Act 2.

The Chosen One is over on the CHYOA.COM :

You must be registered to see the links

Unruly

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Progress Report:


FINISHED
Act 1 demigod training. I changed plans a bit
1) MC sub training with Paul and Grey
2) MC dom training with Jake and Grey
3) MC dom training with Liam

Also nearly finished rewrite on the Training with Joel and Ryder.

The no sex options during training reveal some information for plot, so after training you can visit the campsite in the daily loop and obtain some information you might miss based on your training choices.

FIRST DRAFT DONE
1) Hypnosis side story next level
2) Wrestling side story next wrestling match
3) Missing Rhett scene
4) Additional scenewith Cayden and Torro at gym

OUTLINED
1) Dream transference final sex scene and epilogue
2) Follow up and confrontation with Tiffany.
3) changes to Jake storyline. Implementation. Including a path were he does not become a sub.

 

[DWolfAmarok]

You are far too kind.

I'm not the one sharing this amazing game. But I'll take it. XD

I was actually writing Liam and Paul content this evening.

Awesome, can't wait!

It is hard to write Victor content, I need both hands to type

Completely understandable, must be hard. I wouldn't mind offering a helping hand. For the greater good of course.
As for the writing, well, I took typewriting classes so I can easily write what's dictated, but that's about it. Writer of my own stories but nothing that can help Demi.

I love Alex as well. I have plans for him, the MC, some stoners, and some narcotics in Act 2.

Sweet!

The Chosen One is over on the CHYOA.COM :

You must be registered to see the links

Thanks for sharing. I probably wouldn't have been able to find it.

Progress Report:


FINISHED
Act 1 demigod training. I changed plans a bit
1) MC sub training with Paul and Grey
2) MC dom training with Jake and Grey
3) MC dom training with Liam

Heavy breath

3) Missing Rhett scene

Mmmmm Rhett, I like Rhett....

Anyway, thanks for everything. And keeping us updated.
Good boy pat pat

 

[jakub.cerny003]

Hi! I absolutely love your game I made this account literally to keep track of the development I played it countless times now, and I love Victor like everybody else, but my heart belongs to Ryder <3 Ideally in a poly relationship with Liam and Paul Will we ever see more of Drew or is his story considered finished? Keep up the amazing work

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Hi! I absolutely love your game I made this account literally to keep track of the development I played it countless times now, and I love Victor like everybody else, but my heart belongs to Ryder <3 Ideally in a poly relationship with Liam and Paul Will we ever see more of Drew or is his story considered finished? Keep up the amazing work

thank you for your kind words. I cannot express enough how much hearing from players means. I consider many of the people I have met here friends.

Drew is in the Act 1 Finale and following that he will be around more. He will also get random interactions with the MC in Act 1.

Ryder is fun to write so there is lots more of Ryder to come. And he is one of the romance options I plan to write early.

thank you for your post!

(poly with the twins....hmmmm....)

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

I'm not the one sharing this amazing game. But I'll take it. XD


Awesome, can't wait!


Completely understandable, must be hard. I wouldn't mind offering a helping hand. For the greater good of course.
As for the writing, well, I took typewriting classes so I can easily write what's dictated, but that's about it. Writer of my own stories but nothing that can help Demi.


Sweet!



Thanks for sharing. I probably wouldn't have been able to find it.



Heavy breath


Mmmmm Rhett, I like Rhett....

Anyway, thanks for everything. And keeping us updated.
Good boy pat pat

“GOOD BOY”?!?!?

 

[greenray]

UnrulyDogBoy, you don't like it? Don't want to be nice and tender?
Or maybe it's just a typo, and instead of tap tap - fap fap.
"GOOD BOY" ahaha I'd like to see it!

Will there be spoilers before the update? Show me-show me. Be a Good Boy

 

[DLgamer]

“GOOD BOY”?!?!?

Your game is so fun and your updates are so timely that you've been a VERY BAD DOG!

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Interesting. The theme seems to be, "Good Boy" so here are two appropriate teasers (don't think I teased these). They have not been proofread and they are dark but you asked so sweetly.

Unruly

 

[greenray]

Oh! Thanks, I guess! It was... disgusting. It's completely unsanitary. What will people think?Bad Unruly. No tap tap

 

[greenray]

It would be great if you could implement "the hidden scale" of the hero's fall, which will lead to a tragic end.
After such trips to the toilet, you can not only get a deep throat level, but also get gonorrhea or syphilis as a reward. That's the reason for a bad ending, why not Kissed by Venus.