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VN Ren'Py Desire for Freedom [v0.1.2] [GNK]

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Bobber Tail

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The english is very bad, but it seems to repeat frames. I have seen several times where a few frames go by, then repeat slightly different.
 
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cooperdk

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You're missing the Netori tag (cucking someone with his wife).

Anyway...

As I say with many of these games, and even though you're obviously not a native English developer...
GET YOUR GAME SPELL CHECKED!!!

You seriously do not deliver a game and expect people to back it without proofreading the dialogue.
There are major errors in practically EVERY SINGLE SENTENCE. Some of the sentences are even IMPOSSIBLE to understand.

That's just lazy. And it makes me want to throw the game away with my trash.
And I don't care if you're Spanish, French, Chinese or whatever. You do not release a visual novel game where writing is almost everything ... and then release it with such bad writing.

Also, one moment the main female enters a cafe to look for work, the next she sits in the cafe owner's reception. What the fuck? Do you think a cafe has a company with a reception and a big ass director, or what???

PS: What is a "coffee without the plum"??????
 
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quiboune

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Quick review: Interesting thing you got going on here, but very flawed. Here a few hints and suggestions.

Get a native english speaker to rewrite the dialogue, all of it! Most sentences are wrong, not grammatically, but in logic.

Allow players to choose what they want to happen. I'm okay with the weirdo getting pegged, I'd rather not see it but it happening doesn't bother me. The bathroom girl getting it on with the black dude, the bunny stripper getting it on with Mike and the main woman getting fucked by her weird husband are all things I'd rather avoid happening. In other words, allow us to play a path in which the MC's harem goes untouched by other men.

I love how pregnancy-focused the game is. The pre-established pregnancy is great, even if it's not explicitly the MC's child, and the fact that there are like 3 potential pregnancies on their way in this 10 minutes demo is excellent. Hope to see more of that in the future.

You can always look for opinions here before deciding anything, don't be afraid of asking questions.
 
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bamachine

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Even with the bad reviews, I wanted to give this a chance, if only to see how bad the Engrish might be. It has not failed to cause my head to spin, trying to make sense of the dialogue. The game has potential but really needs a re-write. BTW, on a humorous note, no wonder Alan is getting cheated on, he listens to inanimate objects...

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Vrijgeest

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Sorry but this society is totally alien. The story is so wrong but the Engrish does not help as I just cant follow it.
 
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Gamesstar

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I am impressed by the characters in the game. It can be improved, but it's good. My favorites were Olivia and Samantha :love:
I really love the femdom scenes :love:.
As a fan of femdom one question for the dev.
Will there be any more foot fetish and foot domination scenes in future? With Olivia and Samantha?
I hope there will be :LOL:
 
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Gamesstar

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If you were my patron on patreon you would see a glimpse into the future of the game. (Board meeting scene). You have a correct view of the game's intent and the essence of the future plot. The MC will hold everyone in one hand and they will be happy!
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I think you misunderstood my question :)
My question was Will Samantha and Olivia dominate any male characters in next update or future updates. Similar to Olivia and Paul scene. That's what I meant from " Will there be any more foot fetish and foot domination scenes in future? With Olivia and Samantha?"
 
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canal mom

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Mr. DEV. the files for dawnload not work!!! I open exe file and the white screen open and closed!!!! PLEASE fix it !!!!
 
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