There are a few grammatical issues but that can easily be improved with some help, but the whole part with the MC whining about Seth knowing his father and going into conspiracy theories about Euphemia and Seth seems pretty ridiculous to me.
I mean there are lots of reasons why Seth might prefer not to talk about it and he saved Mike from the street, so he could at least give him the benefit of the doubt, and at worst he could just asking Seth instead of antagonizing them, and with Euphemia it's even worse, since Euphemia is the same age as the MC and he barely remembers his father himself, so even if she had met the father, how could she remember him and make the connection with the MC? because i doubt that Seth talk to Euphemia abouth a friend in his youth and the Mc should realize that pretty easily... that makes the mc look really childish and hard to like.
Other than that, relationships are too rushed (especially Agnes and Laila), and it's a bit sad because the game has the potential to be interesting but as it is, it's hard to get hooked on the story and the characters because of that.
I'm sorry if I sound a bit harsh, that's not my goal here, and surely with the help from someone with better English it would help the game a lot.
