z3rods
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- Nov 11, 2019
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This is good news, because for me personally, pacing was a huge issue. Inside of a week of being on the planet, the MC had already had some sort of relationship/sex with like half the cast, and it was a bit whiplashy. Like, "whoa, slow down a bit eh?" (I realize the irony of this statement on a porn board). I liked what was there story-wise, but the parts with the girls felt a little too fast. All the crying also felt... I dunno... over-the-top? A lot of it felt out of place, like the storybeats leading up to the crying didn't always have the emotional weight to justify it imo. Otherwise I really enjoyed what was on offer, so giving more of that and fleshing the relationships out and making them feel like they're forming more naturally feels super good to me.It'l likely take a long while to get back to where the story should have continued with Chapter IV, but I think this time around there will be far more story, especially with the girls and other characters.
Keep up the good work!