VN Ren'Py Abandoned Ghost Revenge [Ep. 1-4] [Adults city]

metalspace · Apr 4, 2019

@achref you got me curious when you said you'd added a lesbian only playthrough and after playing this update I'm genuinely intrigued. Interesting story premise and beautiful renders mate, so well done on that and thanks for considering a lesbian only playthrough. I like it! My dream of an incestuous lesbian game (after being mercilessly crushed by bright sun) where I can tell every dude to just fuck off, is finally taking shape.

Couple of nitpicks:

1. As others have pointed out, the English, though nowhere near as bad as some of the other games, could still use some improvement. From the comments, it seems you are considering a native English speaker for proofreading; I'm pretty sure you can find people here who can help you with that. That would really help with the quality of the game.

2. There seems to be a long delay in transition from a sexy time image to the next scene (there is no dialogue, just a single image). I'm not sure if you plan to fill that gap with animations (which would be fantastic), but it really breaks the flow of the game since you can't go past it. If it is sort of a time-based placeholder for animations, can you consider making it skippable by mouse click/spacebar/enter?

Anyways, good work on the game so far and again thanks for adding the lesbian only route. I'm looking forward to future updates.

achref · Apr 4, 2019

Kendra said:
Hey @achref, thank you for the update!

You're obviouly a talanted developer, but you shouldn't be so much in a hurry of making a new versions, but taking your time for polishing things out....
I really like your game and that you're so community friendly

You've chosed gorgeous models, made beautifull renders and even puted some pretty nice animation , but...
storytelling isn't getting any better, those jumps from one event to quite another without any transicions between them are rather mood breaking.
At the point, where Jennifer was

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and then out of nowhere in the middle of a night this Eric guy shows up already inside their new house and Jen goes with him, cause she "can't refuse" , story kinda turned into complete circus for me, and it's obvious that it's not the effect you wanted to achieve with your lovely game.
I'd say more renders and texts needed, to make those transitions if not realistic, but at least not that game/mood-breaking.

The quality of those sounds for adult scenes is not high, i'd say it would be nice to if not remove them, but to make an option for a player(maybe at the start of the game) to chose if those sounds should be played or not. Also those places where the sounds are played can't be skiped and it's rather irritating.

There are still some issues with naming, like Jennifer is already talking with Ashley alone it the room, but the name of speaker shows as Nicole, cause she was there in the previous scene.
Also i think it would be nice(if possible and not too hard) to make each other's characters speech colored in defferent color, like many other dev's do, kinda easier to read and understand what's going on

This game has a potential of being a 5 stars one, but so far it's around 3.5 to 4.5 for models/renders/animations, 3.5 to 4 for whole story/choises and sadly 1.5 to 2 for storytelling/sounds/immersion and overall style/design. Just my opinion, no intention to hurt someone's feelings.

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Hello:
For Erik, Jennifer know him since she was a child,
For the storyline, yes you right, I have many ideas and though in my mind I can't translate them to English For fear of mistakes.
From now, I will take my time and find an English translator to change and add new dialogue.

achref · Apr 4, 2019

metalspace said:
@achref you got me curious when you said you'd added a lesbian only playthrough and after playing this update I'm genuinely intrigued. Interesting story premise and beautiful renders mate, so well done on that and thanks for considering a lesbian only playthrough. I like it! My dream of an incestuous lesbian game (after being mercilessly crushed by bright sun) where I can tell every dude to just fuck off, is finally taking shape.

Couple of nitpicks:

1. As others have pointed out, the English, though nowhere near as bad as some of the other games, could still use some improvement. From the comments, it seems you are considering a native English speaker for proofreading; I'm pretty sure you can find people here who can help you with that. That would really help with the quality of the game.

2. There seems to be a long delay in transition from a sexy time image to the next scene; there is no dialogue, just a single image). I'm not sure if you plan to fill that gap with animations (which would be fantastic), but it really breaks the flow of the game since you can't go past it. If it is sort of a time-based placeholder for animations, can you consider making it skippable by mouse click/spacebar/enter?

Anyways, good work on the game so far and again thanks for adding the lesbian only route. I'm looking forward to future updates.

I will make it skippable by mouse click, thank you

yacky91 · Apr 8, 2019

Kendra said:
Hey @achref, thank you for the update!

You're obviouly a talanted developer, but you shouldn't be so much in a hurry of making a new versions, but taking your time for polishing things out....
I really like your game and that you're so community friendly

You've chosed gorgeous models, made beautifull renders and even puted some pretty nice animation , but...
storytelling isn't getting any better, those jumps from one event to quite another without any transicions between them are rather mood breaking.
At the point, where Jennifer was

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and then out of nowhere in the middle of a night this Eric guy shows up already inside their new house and Jen goes with him, cause she "can't refuse" , story kinda turned into complete circus for me, and it's obvious that it's not the effect you wanted to achieve with your lovely game.
I'd say more renders and texts needed, to make those transitions if not realistic, but at least not that game/mood-breaking.

The quality of those sounds for adult scenes is not high, i'd say it would be nice to if not remove them, but to make an option for a player(maybe at the start of the game) to chose if those sounds should be played or not. Also those places where the sounds are played can't be skiped and it's rather irritating.

There are still some issues with naming, like Jennifer is already talking with Ashley alone it the room, but the name of speaker shows as Nicole, cause she was there in the previous scene.
Also i think it would be nice(if possible and not too hard) to make each other's characters speech colored in defferent color, like many other dev's do, kinda easier to read and understand what's going on

This game has a potential of being a 5 stars one, but so far it's around 3.5 to 4.5 for models/renders/animations, 3.5 to 4 for whole story/choises and sadly 1.5 to 2 for storytelling/sounds/immersion and overall style/design. Just my opinion, no intention to hurt someone's feelings.

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I agree with the OPTIONAL futa while on lesbian route, it wouldn't hurt anyone if it's optional.

Kendra · Apr 9, 2019

Hey there @achref

I see, judging by your patreon page, that you're already working on Episode 3 of this game and even the other brand new game(don't know how would you have enough time and resources for both

).

I wonder

if you are concentrating fully on Episode 3 or would there be any more improvements, scenes, transitions, english proofreading, animation instead static images(mostly lesbian route) and so on for two already existing episodes?(i'd highly prefer the further improvements).

achref · Apr 9, 2019

yacky91 said:
I agree with the OPTIONAL futa while on lesbian route, it wouldn't hurt anyone if it's optional.

I will put a futa option in the game

Kendra said:
Hey there @achref
I see, judging by your patreon page, that you're already working on Episode 3 of this game and even the other brand new game(don't know how would you have enough time and resources for both ).

I wonder if you are concentrating fully on Episode 3 or would there be any more improvements, scenes, transitions, english proofreading, animation instead static images(mostly lesbian route) and so on for two already existing episodes?(i'd highly prefer the further improvements).

Hello:
First, I will change lesbians scenes with animations and add more scenes and dialogue to the previous episode (1-2).
Also, I will add a futa option and threesome.
I have no job for now, so I have enough time for both of them

Kendra · Apr 9, 2019

achref said:
I will put a futa option in the game

Hello:
First, I will change lesbians scenes with animations and add more scenes and dialogue to the previous episode (1-2).
Also, I will add a futa option and threesome.
I have no job for now, so I have enough time for both of them

So glad to hear it!

Hope you'll get some nice support on Patreon soon

Will try to spread a word about your awesome game a little and can't wait for more!

achref · Apr 9, 2019

Kendra said:
So glad to hear it!
Hope you'll get some nice support on Patreon soon
Will try to spread a word about your awesome game a little and can't wait for more!

Thank you!

RandyAlex69 · Apr 12, 2019

Hey guys!
Looks interstate.. but I wanna know if this game online or Offline!

myuhinny · Apr 12, 2019

@RandyAlex69

If it says HTML at the top of the page or when you are looking at the latest update page for the games then it's online

CLDꝜ · May 4, 2019

Updated OP with Episode 3, and here's my compressed version.
Original size are 662MB for PC and 645MB for Mac, and is already compressed by the developer.
No bitching if the image quality is too low!

This build is unofficial. Do NOT report issues with the compressed version to the developer.
If you experience any issues, try the solutions in the spoiler below:

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