To clarify, I don't think anything has gone wrong with the writing as of this update, it's nice to see how you've built up this world and I generally like the way interactions between characters involve non-verbal communication and understanding. I'm not a writer but I wonder if this isn't one of those points where your plot is significantly developed that it can start to fray depending on how certain elements are managed. Ada seems to care about Guroh on some level but her true feelings are absolutely unreadable. I don't know how long even somebody close to that kind of character can continue to find them endearing when their actions are emotionally devastating.
On balance, I don't agree with this take:
Ada fucking Huldan as a step on her plot to get more power to protect/provide for the people she loves isn't inherently so reprehensible that Guroh can condemn it with a straight face. It's written into lore and explained pretty clearly why she has to do this and how it is seen in a cultural sense. Guroh isn't taken that seriously anyway and it's true that this method (in conjunction with what Guroh is pulling or alone) might preserve their family. Second issue is that Guroh's direct interference risks alienating Ada - he can't interfere without pissing her off so bad he might ruin whatever chances he had with her. He can't argue them out of fucking and he can't physically attack Huldan without reprisal from Ada/the tribe. We still have this element of Guroh lacking confidence and any significant social or physical presence to back it up. All of that makes sense.
There's a little bit of this post I do agree with though - Guroh hasn't yet started to harbor doubts about Ada and develop significant contempt for the village and its people. Guroh doesn't fit in, but he also doesn't belong anywhere else. He has to stay there to survive right now, but why would any of that stop him from starting to think about how much he'd really like to carve something out for himself and leave? Bloodshed or not, he has few reasons to like most of the people in the village and many reasons to fuck them over for his own benefit (they'd do the same to him). I think on some level, he should want to protect himself from Ada, which would usually mean detachment and deflection. Why doesn't he start to avoid her, or if forced, trigger a conversation where he rebukes Ada whether she cares to listen or not? Again, this opposes the development of an NTR story but it's hard to understand a guy who will stick fight with the biggest dudes in the village and consult sages but won't walk away from this situation.
Just some ideas about plot and character development, not a condemnation of the game.
To some extent I agree with you. I still don't like what Ada is doing, and what the so called "friend" Huldan is doing.
If fucking huldan to get more power to protect those she "loves" results in the ones she "loves" no longer being around her which is 100% what he MC should do, she should 100% leave. Is counterintuitive, I don't even get what kind of power she is supposed to get from that, she could have just as well fucked the MC. Huldan doesn't have any power he's even lower on the totempole than the MC if you think about it, he's a thrall that doesn't even do the work he's supposed to.
There is no reason for what is happening to actually happen. Again I get that the dev wants NTR that you can't prevent, but I don't agree with the way it's been done.
Everyone treats the MC as a child, Ada doesn't have to do anything she is doing. She doesn't have to do it with Huldan.
She doesn't have to do anything she is doing. Neither her nor the "mom" character have to do anything they are doing.
It just pisses me off playing this game which is why I'm not going to keep playing this game. I don't mind NTR and I don't mind consequence based NTR the kind you can stop/prevent, I personally hate doormat NTR like this.
Which could have probably been stopped day one if the MC and Ada just talked with each other. She definitely doesn't like him.
She said she was jealous of him. She thinks all the abuse he's endured is nothing..She's selfish as fuck. Leads him on only to run to get dicked down by someone else.
Ada doing what she is doing and treating the MC like he's a hinderance to her big "plan" is just disgusting to be honest.
This game just isn't what I prefer even within the NTR umbrella. For the people that Like doormat characters all the more power to you.
At least I would recommend having a choice of it being cuck mc or not. If it was a choice I wouldn't give a shit about anything I've complained about.
Maybe that doesn't fit with the story you are telling, but then you should make a linear visual novel without all the fluff. But maybe that's what this is already.
I'm just annoyed because this actually could be a really good game. It still is if you like what I don't like about it. So there is that.
