The story in the update is still great, love the
Alexandra scene.

But the code is rather dirty. No pun, really
The one major mishap is that
Alexandra's character has the same variable name as Alana's. Can't have two variables with the same name in a program, doesn't work that way. I remember having this conversation with Pto while he was still making Dreaming of Dana.
Also, in a couple of scenes text rushes ahead of the visuals (or was it the opposite?) and doesn't match the scene on the screen.
In a few places wrong character says the wrong line.
And then the missing "Haley trying to cook" scene that actually exists and
Anus Mundi found
https://f95zone.to/threads/haleys-story-v0-93-viitgames.18063/post-3869935
Lots of typos as usual, not complaining about them.
Just, you know, could have tested the code at least once, maybe?
Also, a general recommendation to use
scene
statement for full screen images instead of constantly hiding the previous and showing the next one.
show
and
hide
are for partial images (sprites) on top of full sceen images. Full screen images are scenes. If you have an underlying scene on screen and you show and hide full screen images on top of it, the scene under it will flick on the screen at times, making it look... not so good as a result.
You will also have at least one line of code less per image to write.
Fixed all the problems mentioned above, including the typos I noticed.
Made diffs, so all the fixes could be found and fixed in the original script by Viit or Pto or whoever is coding it.
Zip contains original files (*.rpy.orig), fixed rpy and rpyc files plus diff files.
Oh, and it's the 'dirty' incest version of the script, obviously.
How to apply the fix:
Extract into the root folder (the main folder where game launchers Haley.exe and Haley.sh are) to patch the game.
In case you can find more problems, grammatical errors or something else, please post it here in this thread and tag it for me, so I could maybe add it to the fix at some point.
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update to v0.2
Replaced 'checkers' with 'backgammon':
https://f95zone.to/threads/haleys-story-v0-93-viitgames.18063/post-3870893
Thanks to
Maestro91