Joshy92
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Thanks for the criticism, it's my first time writing a story so I expect the game to have it's shortcomings, but I'm happy with the experience, I'll never claim to be a great writer or that the story doesn't have it's cliches, but I'm happy working on it.
-CookieMonster666-
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I mean, 7/10 isn't actually bad. Also, there are many of us who disagree with Lunar's assessment. Is there room for improvement? Of course. Is the game bad? Not even close. Being your first time to create a story especially, this is actually quite good.
True Tale: My first poem ever was about a flying, fire-breathing dragon. I rhymed everything with the /ee/ vowel sound and even used me twice for rhymes in the same stanza.
We all have to start somewhere, and I'd say you're off to a pretty good start.
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Ehh.... the only important con I can say about the game is no incest... but other than that nothing special to point it about. There was mentioned render issues... but I think renders are pretty good and story is also a new type of writing. It shouldn't be compared to 'deluca family' or any other game in that regard. It also has harem and pregnancy as planned. So great game. Solid 9.5/10 for me.
to be fair, MC's mom is dead, dad is an abusive pos, brother hates him, and that seems to be the extent of his family. it would be cool to see MC meet his dad while doing work only for the boss to threaten to kill him for being a trash father. this is one of those rare games where no incest is great imo because I enjoy the plot and characters. also Big Smoke got what he deserved and CJ got rid of him a 2nd time. that's a GTA San Andreas reference for you kids
CSLysander
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So is the game abandoned then? I like it too. It's a decent mobster type game and there's not many that i have found here.
ohmz
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Just wanted to say that I liked the game very much. The story is decent and LIs are gorgeous. Hope you will do fine and won't drop it. Good luck.
Dessolos
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thanks for that link I wasnt sure if I wanted to play it or not but seeing how it really isnt abandoned ill give it a shot.
Walter Victor
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Yeah, but you have to read the Genre to know that. Reading is a turn-off for some people around here.
GentleMaster
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I actually really enjoyed this game so far, and I also think the story is interesting and pretty well written. So I hope you'll continue to work on it.
This game's story is more of a slow-burn with fairly grounded characters, whereas The DeLuca Family is more action-driven with a lot of comedy elements and over-the-top characters. I'm also a big fan of The DeLuca Family, but I don't think it's fair to compare the two, since they're very different animals.
This game's story is more of a slow-burn with fairly grounded characters, whereas The DeLuca Family is more action-driven with a lot of comedy elements and over-the-top characters. I'm also a big fan of The DeLuca Family, but I don't think it's fair to compare the two, since they're very different animals.
developer mentioned that they plan to work on it when life slows down for them but atm it's not easy and to please be patient
-CookieMonster666-
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Yeah, but you have to read the Genre to know that. Reading is a turn-off for some people around here.
True. ATM only the sisters know about each other, unless I'm misremembering. And 2 LIs with the MC doesn't qualify for harem yet, according to F95's site definition.
BTLD
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there isn't a tag yet added to this VN
but it is planned.
Walter Victor
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Read the Genre on Page 1 of this thread.
allow me to clarify. when I said there is no harem tag, I meant there is no harem tag currently. I assumed people were asking if current game had harem in it
-CookieMonster666-
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I took it that way as well. As of current content, the harem tag should not be applied. That in no way means there will not be a harem at some point. Whenever just one more girl is involved with the MC and all three of them know about and accept one another, the harem tag can be applied to the game thread. So it's close, but rn it's only a throuple.
With the updated definitions, though, the tag would be applied (I believe). It only requires 2 in the updated list... I think. With the wording of "being loved by at least two more people", it's a tad difficult to determine for certain whether that's "two more" in addition to a first LI (so 3 total) or just 2 people in entirety. I think it's the latter, but I'm not positive.
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