I think at this point, I'll consider this trolling and move on after my response.I used that quote to point out my point, which now I will explain line by line.
My initial point was "This event wouldn't have been so irritating if it wasn't so one-sided"
Then I suggest how to add something to balance it out: By showing MC isn't completely ignorant because she does care about her elf and actually learns from her.
Then you said "But he get educated!"
Then is say "You can put a line in between this time period to make it work"
To this you quoted your script to show lines outside said time period.
To this I showed the script to show the line could've, indeed, been included.
You took this fair criticism in the worst way possible for reasons I will explain below:
I said "emotionally" because she was packing far more emotions than "I don't want slavery" and you know it.
And since you put so much of yourself in her character, you can't take criticism about how you portrayed her. Don't worry, it happens to plenty of writers.
"You left the main point entirely" Did you seriously not get it? Your point is "She now knows you aren't bad people" and then she downright calls you "bad people" at the end of the event. Its literally her last line: "We don't accept landowners."
When I used that, you say "well of course, she doesn't trust enslavers" BUT THEN SHE INVITES KALI
Its circular reasoning, hence I am telling you "you can't follow your own logic"
Also, all this began when I asked you, in an absolutely polite way (check out this part of my comment again) what do you mean "She now knows you aren't bad people"
She thinks MC is... Even after getting "eDuCaTeD" LMAO
You are totally not salty, bro. Especially since its clear you can totally take back your own words when used to show you were wrong.
I don't know why you assume I put so much of myself in Vanessa, but it speaks volumes about your character. I'm literally into real estate and would like to be landlord, so, nice one.
The no landlords thing is a half joke. Vanesssa: "No landlords, better keep those prices down" Nala: "Oh, don't mind her you can tag along if you'd like.". What does it continue to go on to say? What did you leave out? Vanessa telling Kali "It'll be fun, I promise!"
Yes, she's still unsure of MC, but like I said, she now knows you aren't the evil slaver she thought you were.
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