VN Ren'Py Abandoned Heart Gears [v0.58 Public] [Exalor]

[Faptime]

exalorll Is this going to be a harem style game, or should I pick a LI to focus on for each playthrough?

Loving the tone of the game, by the way. I'm a sucker for romance porn.

 

[exalorll]

I wasn't really talking about the plot but about the male 3D model haha I've seen that dude all over the place recently and thought it was funny. Nothing on you or anybody using him as the default male character, I only find it hilarious he's everywhere. In short, he's pretty much the Johnny Sins of Ren'py VNs, that's all haha

The customization of female characters from honey select is not so good, that's why there are so many mods.
The male is even worse, and has fewer mods as well.
I really tried to make the 3D model less ugly. Even so it was very similar to the standard.
And sorry for the misunderstanding.

 

[exalorll]

exalorll Is this going to be a harem style game, or should I pick a LI to focus on for each playthrough?

Loving the tone of the game, by the way. I'm a sucker for romance porn.

I don't know, first the game will have independent routes with each character.
For now you can play all routes at the same time.
I know how I want some routes to end, and I haven't planned a harem route yet.
But let's see, if players want a harem route or if I decide to do it, then there will be one.
And thanks for playing and giving your opinion. ^^

 

[nielsen145]

I didn't think about doing a walkthrough version, but I will do that from the next version.
And about grammatical corrections, I can only thank you.


First of all, thanks for playing.
About the story being boring ... Can you explain it better? Say what you found boring and what you think might be different?
I get a little neurotic if you just say the game is boring. The best way for me to improve is the players giving their opinion.

for me its boring, dont get me wrong here, i do love an romantic novels, but this one is almost so sugar sweet, without MC has done anything perticular to achive it.
the laywer, even though first meeting her, she has already ready to anything.
then we have the girls, should have expected me resistance from them, because of first time meeting and the MC has not been part of the household by choice and i would say that the girls had a closer relationship to MC father, than himself.
and that makes it boring in my eyes, all too sugar sweet.
i wish you goodluck with your project

 

[Faptime]

To counterpoint nielsen145, I like that there's no major drama driving the story forward, but instead it's the mystery of the clock parts and how that will bind the girls and the MC together.

And that mystery, when solved, will probably explain why the girls and the MC feel drawn to each other.

Instead of playing to get closer to the LIs, you instead start close to them and play to figure out *why*.

 

[TheCrimsonRevenger]

That feeling when the Dev meticulously answers every single question asked in the entire thread but yours....le sigh.

 

[ayumu zumbi]

hello, I'm passing by to say this... I loved it, it's very interesting. In my opinion, there is one point that stands out the most, which is the fact that I have the Portuguese language XD I will continue to follow your work.

 

[Wildbill5150]

I liked it very much it's a refreshing change simple some mystery beautiful girls, unique personalities, love, I'm very much looking forward to more?? Keep up the good work!!!

 

[giggitygigity]

I like the story, keep up the good work! Might want to hire some English proof reader and fix the white text on white background.

 

[exalorll]

for me its boring, dont get me wrong here, i do love an romantic novels, but this one is almost so sugar sweet, without MC has done anything perticular to achive it.
the laywer, even though first meeting her, she has already ready to anything.
then we have the girls, should have expected me resistance from them, because of first time meeting and the MC has not been part of the household by choice and i would say that the girls had a closer relationship to MC father, than himself.
and that makes it boring in my eyes, all too sugar sweet.
i wish you goodluck with your project

I can understand your opinion and even partially agree. I'm not proud of that but I admit that the scene with the lawyer was forced to have at least one sex scene on the initial release.
Thanks for the feedback and for giving the game a chance ^^

That feeling when the Dev meticulously answers every single question asked in the entire thread but yours....le sigh.

Sorry. I didn't know if the comment was serious or not. But answering it, is a fictional disease present in the game.

hello, I'm passing by to say this... I loved it, it's very interesting. In my opinion, there is one point that stands out the most, which is the fact that I have the Portuguese language XD I will continue to follow your work.

Obrigado, bom saber que não coloquei o português lá atoa.

I like the story, keep up the good work! Might want to hire some English proof reader and fix the white text on white background.

I liked it very much it's a refreshing change simple some mystery beautiful girls, unique personalities, love, I'm very much looking forward to more?? Keep up the good work!!!

Thanks.
And giggitygigity, the text has already been corrected for the next version. The English proof reader is a distant dream.

 

[PsybehrWolf]

I enjoyed the game thus far, I find it interesting. Some things remind me slightly of Clockwork Planet, mainly around Gears Disease and needing Clock-workers to help Heal people, but that is where it starts and ends. The girls knowledge of him is explained, as is the Lawyer's, as it seems she also had a part to play as someone who kept an eye on the MC for the Father, which explains her one-sided attraction, and not that difficult to agree to such attractive terms. Some of the things with the other girls....especially Luna, should take a bit longer, at least, if I was making such a game, it is how I would do it, but I am not, and I see nothing wrong with it anyways. I like a nice wholesome story, and I do enjoy Harems, and could easily, and wishfully, see this turn into one. That's just my opinion though. I'm looking forward to the first update for this! Good luck, and I will be watching! By the way, are you planning a Patreon or any other form of support page, and/or a Discord group? Just curious!

 

[exalorll]

I enjoyed the game thus far, I find it interesting. Some things remind me slightly of Clockwork Planet, mainly around Gears Disease and needing Clock-workers to help Heal people, but that is where it starts and ends. The girls knowledge of him is explained, as is the Lawyer's, as it seems she also had a part to play as someone who kept an eye on the MC for the Father, which explains her one-sided attraction, and not that difficult to agree to such attractive terms. Some of the things with the other girls....especially Luna, should take a bit longer, at least, if I was making such a game, it is how I would do it, but I am not, and I see nothing wrong with it anyways. I like a nice wholesome story, and I do enjoy Harems, and could easily, and wishfully, see this turn into one. That's just my opinion though. I'm looking forward to the first update for this! Good luck, and I will be watching! By the way, are you planning a Patreon or any other form of support page, and/or a Discord group? Just curious!

I didn't knew Clockwork Planet. But after a quick search on google, I may be interested in playing it.
You're not the first person who said that relationships have developed too fast. I already started writing the "script" for the update and slowed down a little. Especially with the main girls.

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And Discord... My English writing is not very good, my pronunciation is terrible. But if the game grows, I will probably create one.
And finally, thanks for giving your opinion. ^^

 

[PsybehrWolf]

Clockwork Planet has a Light Novel, Manga, and Anime, not sure about VN, but wouldn't surprise me. I've read most of the LN, and the Anime was well done. If you've looked it up, I won't bother with synopsis, but I think you will enjoy it! As for your English, it's not like it is your first language, and it is not that bad in all honestly, just needs a bit of work. All-in-all, an enjoyable game, and I do look forward to more! Keep up the awesome work!

 

[Satir Girls]

Friends, if you liked the game, please support ExalorII. He has a Patreon now :

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Thanks for all of your support and help to ExalorII! Much appreciated!

 

[AdiXv2k]

Pretty good start, hoping for a harem route ^^ Blushing is a bit exaggerated, like Eliza and Anna look like they're blushing all the time and when they're actually blushing it looks like someone just smeared red paint on their cheeks, maybe you could tone it down a bit? Overall the story is pretty interesting and the girls are cute, will keep my eye on this project, good luck with the development.

 

[Havik79]

Odd, and not really understanding some of it, but damn the ginger and blonde are sexy.

 

[ayumu zumbi]

And Discord... My English writing is not very good, my pronunciation is terrible. But if the game grows, I will probably create one.

Bem uma coisa é certa, você não está só :3 (apesar que infelizmente meu inglês é péssimo dai eu recorro ao horrível google tradutor XP).
Alias lembrei que quando comentei antes não citei que havia percebi no idioma português dois detalhes que me chamaram atenção, nessas duas imagens o dialogo não corresponde a quem está falando... não sei se alguém já havia mencionado o se você já havia reparado :/

Há verdade fui procurar essas duas imagens novamente, sabiam onde elas estava mas ainda não entendi o porque li cada palavra novamente (mentira foi porque gostei da história mesmo :v). Ah só mais uma coisa estou vendo se consigo economizar algum dinheiro, de fato como alguns disseram a história é bem diferente e interessante com personagens carismáticas (cof cof e sexys cof cof) vale a pena virar patreon de um jogo desses :3

 

[exalorll]

Pretty good start, hoping for a harem route ^^ Blushing is a bit exaggerated, like Eliza and Anna look like they're blushing all the time and when they're actually blushing it looks like someone just smeared red paint on their cheeks, maybe you could tone it down a bit? Overall the story is pretty interesting and the girls are cute, will keep my eye on this project, good luck with the development.

Anna and Eliza still have pink cheeks, I think they look better this way. But I decreased the amount of images in which the characters are actually blushing and the intensity of the effect as well. Thanks for the opinion.

Odd, and not really understanding some of it, but damn the ginger and blonde are sexy.

According to the mad hatter, strange is good, so thank you, I think.

Bem uma coisa é certa, você não está só :3 (apesar que infelizmente meu inglês é péssimo dai eu recorro ao horrível google tradutor XP).
Alias lembrei que quando comentei antes não citei que havia percebi no idioma português dois detalhes que me chamaram atenção, nessas duas imagens o dialogo não corresponde a quem está falando... não sei se alguém já havia mencionado o se você já havia reparado :/

Há verdade fui procurar essas duas imagens novamente, sabiam onde elas estava mas ainda não entendi o porque li cada palavra novamente (mentira foi porque gostei da história mesmo :v). Ah só mais uma coisa estou vendo se consigo economizar algum dinheiro, de fato como alguns disseram a história é bem diferente e interessante com personagens carismáticas (cof cof e sexys cof cof) vale a pena virar patreon de um jogo desses :3

Outra pessoa comentou sobre, mas não falou onde o erro ocorria, e durante as dezenas de vezes que eu rejoguei, não consegui identificar, já tava fazendo no automático. Obrigado pelo trabalho de tirar os prints, já corrigi pra próxima versão. E mais importante, obrigado pela opinião ^^

 

[ayumu zumbi]

Outra pessoa comentou sobre, mas não falou onde o erro ocorria, e durante as dezenas de vezes que eu rejoguei, não consegui identificar, já tava fazendo no automático. Obrigado pelo trabalho de tirar os prints, já corrigi pra próxima versão. E mais importante, obrigado pela opinião ^^

Olha achei outra, quem diz é a Anna mas ali aparece como Eliza (imagem 2), qualquer outro que eu achar eu aviso.
Ah, tambem achei esse daqui, que é falado pela Eliza (imagem 1).




Há alguma forma que eu possa te contactar, caso eu encontre qualquer coisinha, para ser mais fácil de lhe informar?

 

[Satir Girls]

This game is going to be one of the biggest games out there, with Patreon minimum of 1000$\month after a year.
Why? Because it is fantastically original and interesting. These times there are very few games like this one.