This is from THIS GAME? AND IF SO HOW DO I GET THERE?The Return of the Sleep Molester
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This is from THIS GAME? AND IF SO HOW DO I GET THERE?The Return of the Sleep Molester
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Well, if he's rewriting and removing, he needs to start it from the beginning. Anyway, I think I'll pass on this and wish the dev well.What you play in this version happens befor the first release in the timeline, you see why the MC was in studying at a college in another city. The bigger question is what will happen now will it have the same story as the first release or will that change.
It was, the dev has redone it and now that scene is not in the current build.This is from THIS GAME? AND IF SO HOW DO I GET THERE?
This isn't exactly Sherlock Holmes story so you get into it pretty quickly. In 30 sec you know what's goin on, you and your sis are sneaking off to a party. Does it really need an intro?Start a new game, name MC and wtf? It starts in the middle of a convo that we have no clue about? I REALLY think you need to add the intro back. Because right now it's all "What the fucking Hell?"
I do proofreading for this game, and I'm not sure where this version comes from -- in my edited version none of these problems exist. I did leave the question mark ahead of an ellipsis, which is a questionable choice, but removed all instances of ?. and !.This was a complete rewrite. It makes no sense with what came before, so I hope the Dev has some clue about a totally new direction. If I somehow have to go through 4 years of college with visits and video calls I'm going to stop playing.
Yet if we jump to his return from college and no feelings have changed and no one looks a single day older, that's also going to be horrible.
I don't see a single good way to move this game forward in any way.
DEV No matter what direction you take:
GET A PROOFREADER FOR YOUR SCRIPT.
American English never uses ?. to end a question, just ?
"It's very difficult for her to let us out"
NOT
"It's very difficult for she to let us out."
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Compliment
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Cumpliment
There's always the most common/cliche way in porn games for the MC to return home. The uncle dies in a horrible accident and the MC has to go back to help his family out because he's now the man of the house or because they just have to sell the apartment.This was a complete rewrite. It makes no sense with what came before, so I hope the Dev has some clue about a totally new direction. If I somehow have to go through 4 years of college with visits and video calls I'm going to stop playing.
Yet if we jump to his return from college and no feelings have changed and no one looks a single day older, that's also going to be horrible.
I don't see a single good way to move this game forward in any way.
Actually, it needs an entire story. Start, middle and end.(Eventually) Not just start in the middle of a convo. The dev is either lazy or as some have said doesn't know what he's doing. This is supposed to be a rewrite. Well, rewrite from the start.This isn't exactly Sherlock Holmes story so you get into it pretty quickly. In 30 sec you know what's goin on, you and your sis are sneaking off to a party. Does it really need an intro?
So you're saying you corrected all this, and the Dev chose not to use any of your corrections?I do proofreading for this game, and I'm not sure where this version comes from -- in my edited version none of these problems exist. I did leave the question mark ahead of an ellipsis, which is a questionable choice, but removed all instances of ?. and !.
Yeah, I'm fine with a cliche in this story. I am actually hoping the Dad/Uncle dies(The sooner the better), and we can go back because without having Kylee, Amelie and Stephanie with me in the game, it isn't worth playing to me.There's always the most common/cliche way in porn games for the MC to return home. The uncle dies in a horrible accident and the MC has to go back to help his family out because he's now the man of the house or because they just have to sell the apartment.
It started well, I prefer the VN version, even if it had less content that the sandbox one, but after that ending I have to agree, I don't see a good way to move the story forward.