My issues are mostly dialog related. Aside from just poor grammar, I come across things like this:
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Seriously? She can't make a sandwich? She and MC are both old enough to drive. They it make sound like they've both graduated high school. How can she not do something as basic as make something to eat? Then again, they are treated like they are still in junior high/middle school (age range of 12-14 if you don't have that kind of school system where you live). Can't figure out why she needs to be warned about it anyway. Did Amelie put a laxative in it? Has Steph been stuck in the bathroom all morning?