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Glad you enjoyed! Well in that case onto Aywin. She's a bit trickyier i admit.Thanks for taking the time to go so in-depth with your ideas—honestly, these are exactly the kinds of narrative tweaks that would’ve made HC2 feel more cohesive and emotionally satisfying. I really appreciate how you broke down your options, and I think they each approach the Celis issue from a different but very necessary angle.
Let me respond to each:
1️⃣ Pre-Confession and Emotional Build-up
This one really hit the mark for me. The confession scene could’ve been a powerful emotional anchor if the story had committed to it. Having Celis reject Eydir after that moment—or at least try to—would’ve gone a long way in proving her loyalty, or at the very least, showing that she wants to change. I especially like the idea of her attempting intimacy with Noah but being unsatisfied due to guilt and past experience, which opens the door for her inner conflict and eventual relapse. That’s far more believable than her sudden, unearned flip.
Also, the idea that Noah needed to sleep with her during the main route is something I completely agree with. Holding all the emotionally important scenes for the endings hurt the pacing of her arc badly.
2️⃣ Drug/Potion/Mindbreak Coercion Path
That’s something I touched on too—we need clear proof that the girls weren’t fully in control for the story to be read as netorare and not just flat-out cheating. If we had a scene where Celis tried to preserve her virginity but was manipulated (magically, emotionally, or physically), it would give her breakdowns far more impact. Right now, the way she initiates the acts or eagerly plays along makes it almost impossible to sympathize, because it reads like she wanted to cheat. But if she was dosed or magically coerced—especially subtly so she thinks she made the choice—it would turn the entire story into a psychological NTR tragedy.
3️⃣ The “Used and Discarded” Arc
I think this is brilliant from a thematic and pacing standpoint. You’re absolutely right—Zeno and Eydir’s continued obsession with Celis makes little sense, especially given her quick compliance and their personalities. If she was eventually discarded, realizing she was nothing more than a toy, her entire identity would collapse. That’s when she would finally break, fully aware she’s lost everything—Noah’s love, her dignity, and even the respect of the men who used her.
That setup would make her desperate plea for forgiveness feel like the culmination of genuine remorse, not just a script-triggered plot point. Her clinging to Noah afterward, stalking his door, hoping he’ll say anything—even a cruel rejection—would be tragic in a way that actually works narratively.
Right now, that emotional destruction never fully lands because she never seems to hit rock bottom. She's just… conveniently ready to be redeemed.
To answer your question—yes, I’d love to hear your takes on Aywin too. I’ve been thinking about her situation as well, and I feel like her betrayal is even worse in some ways, because unlike Celis, she’s an adult, a mother, and knows exactly what she’s doing. But I’m still on the fence about how she could be redeemed, if at all.
Also, if you ever feel like refining some of these concepts into structured “rewrite proposals” (like alternate events or routes), I’d be happy to contribute too. I think a lot of people would resonate with them.
Looking forward to your thoughts!
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I have a 3rd idea but its a bit too flimsy i feel. But what do you think of these so far? I think the key to Aywin is she has to tryto resist and fight back. But something happens to break her and make her feel she cannot be a mothert o Noah anymore and that she'sutterly defiled her family so badly she cannot redeem herself or be free of her guilt.