Heather: So your trying to tell me..
Why you gotta show your ass? Joy let's you off the Island so we can visit Kendra and she was nice enough to invite us to the VIP Hot Tub area. Then the water ain't warm enough for you. We fixed that. Then..you have me go to the Bar and get you...A Swimming Pool!!
Heather: Ah huh..Heather is pleased. Wanna sip? You did good..Honey. Now make Heather even more happier and..
NO!!! I am not getting you a Floating Snack Sampler!!! Now get some clothes on before Kendra gets here.
Heather: So..your saying?
Heather!!!
Corrected Grammar:
You are is contracted to: "you're" and not "your" which is possessive.
Ellipses are formed with three periods.
When two complete clauses are connected by a conjunction (and, or, but, so), a comma is needed before the conjunction.
"Why you gotta show your ass?" is dialect and can be left as is and not changed to: "Why do you have to show your ass?"
"More happier" should be either "more happy" or "happier," though happier is preferred.
Should be:
Heather: So you're trying to tell me...
Why you gotta show your ass? Joy let's you off the Island to visit Kendra, and she was nice enough to invite us to the VIP Hot Tub area, then the water ain't warm enough for you. We fixed that, then you have me go to the bar and get you...A Swimming Pool!!
Heather: Uh huh, Heather is pleased. Wanna sip? You did good, Honey. Now make Heather even happier and...
NO!!! I am not getting you a Floating Snack Sampler!!! Now get some clothes on before Kendra gets here.
Heather: So, you're saying...?
Heather!!!