VN Ren'Py Onhold Hot Sand of Antarctica [v0.09] [Grinvald]

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LGM

LGM

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Great game so far; I like it a lot.

It could use a proofread, though. There's missing and superfluous articles and prepositions. Sometimes characters just say stuff in really weird ways (e.g. "It was necessary to stop the blood as soon as possible."; nobody talks like that. Something like "I needed to stop the bleeding" would feel much more natural.) Also, the "closet" that hides Ghosts's bunker, isn't a closet, it's a shelf.

There are two small errors in continuity that I found. First, when MC first gets home and talks to Miranda, they talk about how MC had sex with Diana, which may not have happened. And later, during the meeting with Mongul, Rat King is brought up like the reader is supposed to know him, but his introduction was optional, so this can be a point of confusion.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to more of this. Good luck, dev.

(v0.6)
 
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Zeph3r

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Just found this gem. Great game with an interesting plot. Like LGM I too noticed some of the wording was a bit weird and that there were some inconsistencies with the dialogue at time. Noticed some parts of the incest patch are at times not working as well, such as the daughter's addressing MC by name or Miranda referring to them as step-daughter's. Overall a good game, excited to see where this project continues from here.
 
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estrada777 said:
Updated Android port. Nothing too fancy but let me know if you have any issues.

Version: 0.06 + IC
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Updated my Android port!
 
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Havik79

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Seriously, this much be the most unlike bitch ever, with a constrictor snake around her body and hyenas waiting nearby, WTF.
 
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MC will get to find that out on account of his wonderful babes ... or not, on account of his
distaste for her. Making people hate her is her only defining trait.
 
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majdaddin

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Wrong character in v005_007.rpy:

Code: 
mcnick "You promised to help me..."#
(Why does every line end with an empty comment?)
 
BESEV

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majdaddin said:
Wrong character in v005_007.rpy:

Code: 
mcnick "You promised to help me..."#
(Why does every line end with an empty comment?)
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Yes, thanks, there is a bug. The "#" is a service symbol for the translation program, it doesn't affect anything.
 
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LewdLewy

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EDIT: Now includes a revised chapter 1 and 2!

This was a fun visual novel that ticks a lot of boxes for me. I can see BESEV put a lot of work into this project, but the English is really the main weak point. Yet, I enjoyed my first playthrough enough to do something I've never done before. I went through the files of chapter 1 and fixed up the English to hopefully give players a better idea of what this game could be with a better translation.

Correcting the grammar was the bulk of the work. Other than that, some alternate word choices for a smoother flow. Like cartridge to round (and ammo where appropriate), canister to fuel can, etc. Some dialogue was difficult to understand and didn't lend itself well to the sentence structure it was originally in, so I tried my best to rewrite them. I didn't add or remove any lines, so the number of lines should be 1:1 with the original files.

Drop the game folder in the attached file into the main game's folder. No changes to variables, or anything else besides dialogue, so it should be 100% save compatible.

Maybe by the next update I'll get around to polishing the text for the rest of the chapters. Oh and BESEV, feel free to incorporate this into your next patch if you want, I don't mind.
 
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4.20 star(s) 111 Votes