- Mar 31, 2022
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Thanks for the file, friend. I'll give it a go! Thanks also for saving me the effort of editing all that text myself.This was a fun visual novel that ticks a lot of boxes for me. I can see BESEV put a lot of work into this project, but the English is really the main weak point. Yet, I enjoyed my first playthrough enough to do something I've never done before. I went through the files of chapter 1 and fixed up the English to hopefully give players a better idea of what this game could be with a better translation.
Correcting the grammar was the bulk of the work. Other than that, some alternate word choices for a smoother flow. Like cartridge to round (and ammo where appropriate), canister to fuel can, etc. Some dialogue was difficult to understand and didn't lend itself well to the sentence structure it was originally in, so I tried my best to rewrite them. I didn't add or remove any lines, so the number of lines should be 1:1 with the original files.
Drop the game folder in the attached file into the main game's folder. No changes to variables, or anything else besides dialogue, so it should be 100% save compatible.
Maybe by the next update I'll get around to polishing the text for the rest of the chapters. Oh and BESEV, feel free to incorporate this into your next patch if you want, I don't mind.
Adventure ever on, Phat