Game needs a lot of improvement. Numerous spelling mistakes and bad grammar, plus no differentiation between spoken words and internal thoughts, except the attributions. It seemed as well that sometimes the developer forgot who was talking or thinking; at one point MC says out loud "Gives a small laugh", whilst Athena sometimes reacts to lines titled MC's Thoughts as if they were spoken aloud. It doesn't help that some of what these characters think is complete nonsense and doesn't serve any purpose.
I appreciate the attempt at an animation at the end, but the quality is so bad and the sudden lack of background is jarring and looks more like a proof of concept rather than proper game content.