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Severe overuse of the word 'welp' going on here.
It's not even really a word, more of a noise used to convey disappointment.
I do quite like this VN but change pretty much every welp to well and I'll like it a lot more.
Having a proofreader who speaks English as a 1st language would definitely help but liking the story so far.
edit. Yeap isn't a word either. Pick yep, yeah or yes and roll with it. Yup is also acceptable. More acceptable than yeap anyway.
It's not even really a word, more of a noise used to convey disappointment.
I do quite like this VN but change pretty much every welp to well and I'll like it a lot more.
Having a proofreader who speaks English as a 1st language would definitely help but liking the story so far.
edit. Yeap isn't a word either. Pick yep, yeah or yes and roll with it. Yup is also acceptable. More acceptable than yeap anyway.
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That's funny thing, cause pretty much every "welp" and "yeap" exists in the first episode when I had proofreader (non-native though).
And totally non-existent in the second episode where I hadn't one.
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Missed this one first time so was starting from the beginning but I'm happy to hear I won't have to go through any more welps and yeaps
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You will have to go through more terrible things, haha.Missed this one first time so was starting from the beginning but I'm happy to hear I won't have to go through any more welps and yeaps
However, there were no comments about quality of writing in second episode so far.
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I went that route, although I didn't go for Aria, but Ruby, haha
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What Aria said about Ruby in the cafeteria afterward,
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That was a great update, knew it would be, hehe, great job
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That could be a little tough to make. But I already know how....
That was a great update, knew it would be, hehe, great job
Anyway, was Engrish that bad?
- May 28, 2018
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Nope, not at all, was very easy to read and follow, there may have been just a few typos here and there, but nothing major
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I will not reupload whole 1.2 gb archive, but you can test this feature right now if you replace this file in "game" folder.
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I like the Game, girls are gorgeous, the multiple angles during sex scene is really nice. I especially like the scene when vicky walked into MC's room and laid down on the bed. little touches like that make the story better. looking forward to next update.
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