So I finally got to sit down with this for about an hour
AfroM ... The writing is weak, the pacing is bad, the transitions are terrible, it uses outdated HS models--which would be forgivable if not for the horrendous clipping; the UI is somehow both mostly pointless and extremely intrusive for being just plain text on the bottom of the screen...
You have a bunch of flipped increments (=+ instead of +=) which fuck up the progression for the mother, the conditional checks and label jumps are about as badly implemented as I've ever seen, the if/else statements and their nested jumps are spastic to the point where we're seeing events we should not be seeing based on expected conditional checks...
I suggest you respect all of our time and yours, and go back and review some of the basics of Ren'py scripting. I started to fix some of the errors but I realized everything is so badly done it's not remotely worth my time. The premise, while a bit trite, is the sort of thing I like, which is the only reason I put as much time into it as I have and bothered to come here and tell you to please go back to the drawing board before you decide to put something out again. I truly wish you all the best of luck with this and hope the next release you do is worthy of the backstory you've constructed.
