VN Ren'Py Abandoned Lovers Lane [v0.1] [Mr.X]

[Hermit76]

Since I am one of the staff who supported Spacer X, the original author of the story "Six times a day", in creating his story by proofreading and especially proof"checking" the pictures, I had to inform him about this blatant rip-off. Not that I mind a game based on the story. But if this is not at least authorized, someone adorns himself with borrowed plumes. And I hate that.

 

[Mikey Mike]

Since I am one of the staff who supported Spacer X, the original author of the story "Six times a day", in creating his story by proofreading and especially proof"checking" the pictures, I had to inform him about this blatant rip-off. Not that I mind a game based on the story. But if this is not at least authorized, someone adorns himself with borrowed plumes. And I hate that.

Just out of curiosity is the story copyrighted, and does the author truly have any recourse? I have stories posted at Literotica, and would love having some of them made into games! I just watched a shitty remake of Magnum PI, and sadly the world is what it is.

 

[wakawaka]

Just out of curiosity is the story copyrighted, and does the author truly have any recourse? I have stories posted at Literotica, and would love having some of them made into games! I just watched a shitty remake of Magnum PI, and sadly the world is what it is.

Works are automatically copyrighted upon creation. You don't have to file for copyright unless you need to file a lawsuit against someone for violating your copyright. So both Spacer's story and your stories on Literotica are protected.

 

[Mikey Mike]

Works are automatically copyrighted upon creation. You don't have to file for copyright unless you need to file a lawsuit against someone for violating your copyright. So both Spacer's story and your stories on Literotica are protected.

I haven't seen a dime from Literotica, and assume they've made money off of Spacer X, me, and others posting for fapping fun.

I vaguely remember from Ecclesiastes 1:9: What has been will be again, what has been done will be done again; there is nothing new under the sun.

 

[Quaszog55]

I haven't seen a dime from Literotica, and assume they've made money off of Spacer X, me, and others posting for fapping fun.

I vaguely remember from Ecclesiastes 1:9: What has been will be again, what has been done will be done again; there is nothing new under the sun.

And you won't. Literotica is a community, who liked celebrating their hobby. Some Author's just started selling their stories from there, too. But as Literotica uses paypal and has banned all legal-ecchi stuff i abandoned that dump. Not missing the horse-porn but if shit gets banned on moral reasons only, that's when you leave. Morals are to flexible these days to mean anything.

 

[Quaszog55]

Since I am one of the staff who supported Spacer X, the original author of the story "Six times a day", in creating his story by proofreading and especially proof"checking" the pictures, I had to inform him about this blatant rip-off. Not that I mind a game based on the story. But if this is not at least authorized, someone adorns himself with borrowed plumes. And I hate that.

Please make sure he complains to patreon, not us. We are just helpful leeches, trying to cleanse authors of their indecent fanatasies.

 

[Hermit76]

I would love to see this story as a game, too. Don't get me wrong here. But it should not be stolen from but be allowed by the author. The game developer claims he got Spacer X's permission, but according to him, "but he most certainly did not".

 

[Hermit76]

Please make sure he complains to patreon, not us. We are just helpful leeches, trying to cleanse authors of their indecent fanatasies.

I told him that. That's all I can do.

 

[lazychicken]

I would love to see this story as a game, too. Don't get me wrong here. But it should not be stolen from but be allowed by the author. The game developer claims he got Spacer X's permission, but according to him, "but he most certainly did not".

Agree with that. But still, I will cut him some slack as it is the start. Put the game on the watch and will come back after version 0.10 to see how. Unless he makes his game with a rough idea from the book and goes for a different way, well, then it is tough to consider if he needs permission or not. Sometimes a porn just inspired another porn.

 

[Hermit76]

I would not mind if the game was very close to the story since the story is awesome and definitely deserves to be a game (or 3d visual novel). The game pictures are really good, even though Susan's and Suzanne's breast are too small, compared to the story. But I dislike that the idea and the text are so blatantly stolen. I am quite sure, Spacer X would not have minded to be asked...

 

[Quaszog55]

Agree with that. But still, I will cut him some slack as it is the start. Put the game on the watch and will come back after version 0.10 to see how. Unless he makes his game with a rough idea from the book and goes for a different way, well, then it is tough to consider if he needs permission or not. Sometimes a porn just inspired another porn.

He already copy pasted entire paragraphs of narrative, dialogue and internal thought. That's infringement even if this was a japanese doujinshi.

 

[bagodoughnuts]

SpacerX is known for making short stories longer. If you use his work word for word, this will be a huge undertaking. If you pare down the story detail, I think you can keep the content good and keep it manageable.
I really like what you are ding.

 

[DarkenDragon]

just started to give this a try and my god please change the name of the neighbour and the mother.

Suzanne and Susan? they're way too close to being too similar that its quite confusing to keep track of whos talking about who. I'd prefer if the names were not so similar to keep characters different

edit: just to add to this advice, I've noticed some minor errors that does cause some confusion. first off you need to work on your perspective writing, you switch perspective quite often and you constantly use the wrong tense. this can cause the reader to break out of immersion and become confused. so keep in mind of who is speaking and continue to write in that perspective. also you seem to have some errors with names in the wrong dialog, just proof read your work to make sure you have the right person speaking.

also you'll need to decide on a method to keep dialog and thoughts separated, you dont have a clear method at the moment to show and its hard to tell when someone is speaking to themselves in thought, or if they're speaking to other characters. something like putting quotation marks when they are speaking and not having quotation marks when they are not. or using italicize when they are speaking in thought. these little difference will make a huge difference to the reader.

 

[OGDX]

The plot appears to be a rip off of the rather famous story "Six times a day" by Spacer X. Not that I mind, but I wonder if the dev is connected with the author?

Well I'm glad someone said it. I don't know if the dev is connected with SpacerX, (I doubt it) but it's not the first time we've seen someone rip off erotic literature from such sites to be used as the plot for their games, and it won't be the last either. Might be a wrong thing to do, but hey, it's giving a better product to us, the consumers. Can you imagine how insane the games would be if some of the top developers on this site partnered with the popular authors on sites like Literotica?

 

[Raerngaming]

most of it was narrator talking in fact the doctor could have done some of that talking and I agree that you could not tell if they was just thinking or talking to someone, at times you could figure it out but in a game noone should have to figure out if they are thinking or talking they should know.

 

[DD0]

Everything everyone else has said is true. Really the only thing this VN is good for at this point is as an advertisement for the original Spacer X story. In fact, after finishing the game and reading all the comments I went straight to one of the links for Spacer X that was posted on here and I am continuing to read it on there. In my opinion, if the renders and writing of the VN were cleaned up it could really be a more visual version of the original and potentially be superior. It falls short of that currently. It's a shame. With the strong writing from Spacer X already complete, good rendering could make an awesome VN. It would also allow for the possibility of some structural freedom allowing the player to decide how to approach the various characters and make it more engrossing.

TLDR: Tons of potential, crap execution.

Not to mention that this straight up plagiarism means there are unlikely to be any "real" choices.

 

[sakuyas_mmaster]

Can you folks stop talking about this ripoff nonsense? Half the thread is spammed with this while you don't even know if it's ripped off. The dev wrote he has permission. What is the point droning on about it on a damn piracy forum?

 

[DD0]

Can you folks stop talking about this ripoff nonsense? Half the thread is spammed with this while you don't even know if it's ripped off. The dev wrote he has permission. What is the point droning on about it on a damn piracy forum?

Plagiarism does not equal piracy in this context. There is a relationship but in this context I don't see how it's relevant.
However, you are probably right that enough has been said. Maybe further down the thread if this game persists, it will be helpful for future new players and should be reiterated.

 

[ThunderRob]

all worries about plagiarism previous to the Dev commenting he had permission..valid..all comments post his comment..read the thread dudes and dudettes ..invalid now lets wait for the next update and enjoy our time on this earth hoping the aliens decide to finally attack...

 

[Centurion]

The Dev has said that he's doing this with the author's permission. And adapting a book to a VN is no different in principle than adapting a book to a movie.