Yet another otherwise good game held back by poor writing:
1. Engrish. Not the worst, but certainly noticeable.
2. Many sentences lacking periods at the end. Not the biggest deal, but if it happens often enough (it does) it makes the whole thing looking amateurish.
3. The dialogues just go on and on and on and on... especially with Maria.
4. Worst of all, the dialogues constantly regurgitate the same two jokes. Pervert penis pervert penis pervert penis. Penis. I'm already sick of those two words, and this is only 0.2. I dread to think about how many perverts and penises will make it into the game in the future.
I really hope it gets better, because the idea of having to talk to Maria about perverts and penises at the start and at the end of every quest is a real turnoff.
Also, why was the scene where Maria spanks Sara skipped over? Would be way more fun than another pervert penis.
As I have already said in other occasions... translating +20k lines is not an easy task for a non-native speaker.
I currently have one proofreader helping me with the intro which is the worst part of all, since I had 0 experience in writing.
The "." at the end, yes, my fault, done on purpose thinking it would look better, but it doesn't.
"Poor writing" is an expression that is starting to bother me after all the work I put into it day after day, trying my best. But of course, I will always try to improve. I point that out because it is something that is always commented in any game and people think that by saying that or "learn to write better", magically the devs become better than a native speaker. It's on the level of "if you're sad, stop being sad". I'm sure I misspell all my English on purpose and I still haven't come up with the idea of writing correctly... It helps the devs more if people point out mistakes like what you've done with the "." rather than just giving an opinion about engrish.
As for Maria... welp, Maria is Maria and she won't change. 99.9% of people love her and love her jokes. Some of them are repetitive? Maybe, especially in the beginning. That all changes as the learning curve goes up and the characters evolve.
On the other hand... What do you expect? Talk about philosophy? You are in a hentai world where they are all kinky by nature (some more than others) and the MC who is the most "normal" is always called pervert in a teasing way. The game has a lot of teasing, which is the fun of the Lust Age world.
The penis/pervert jokes will end? No, they will be transformed (now there is a new girl who will call you "little peepee" to teasing you).
It is the "essence" of this game although it is not constant (at the beginning yes, but as I said, the learning curve goes up and the characters evolve).
A pity that some of you get the wrong idea about Maria but maybe not... because she is one of the most perverted and she likes to mess with you in an absurd way but she follows the lines of "hentai logic".
So:
- The writing will get better with time. There are things I thought were fixed and I keep finding engrish and I don't like it because there is a lot of work behind. I check everything I can between versions.
- Maria is going to change? No, it will evolve but Maria will still be Maria. she can't be liked by everyone obviously.
- I've seen more absurd things in hanime videos than all the bad jokes put together in Lust Age.
- Teasing is a natural thing here and it's going to be on the rise along with how pervy the girls are with you, especially that now a main girl "Hiyakasudere" comes into play.
On the subject of spanking... it was omitted to avoid it being considered humiliation even though it's approached in a humorous way. Although I have already made a clarification about all that and I will start adding "soft" things without leaving the wholesome line of Lust Age.
As for the rest, yes, every time someone comments something about the Lust Age style with teasing and bad jokes of "pervert, penis", I start to put more and more because they are funny and people like them. Although they are becoming less absurd than before and less repeated. Now the jokes have better approach and I try to avoid bad translations. But I don't plan to stop, just improve the jokes and hentai logic.
Oh and yes, I'm an "amateur" in all this writing and development stuff, it's my first project and I already warned at the beginning of the game. Besides, everything will get better and better with time.
That's why I'm very grateful for people's support and I always ask for patience to the skeptics.
Have a good day sir and thanks for trying Lust Age.
