- Thread starter merlinfate
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Looks good so far. There's not much game yet, so this is more like a preview. For the "moving" scenes, you want a static camera; having the entire scene jump back and forth between 2 states creates vertigo, not a sense of motion, like the camera operator was having a seizure but wouldn't stop filming.
- Oct 23, 2016
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Okay, auto-correct is not an "Ersatz" for a proofreader. The English definitely needs work, as it is now it makes the game seem unoriginal and naive, but I get the feeling that's not really the case (here's hoping).
Either look for an translator or someone who can edit your own translation.
The renders are okay, as are the models, the animations are horrible (sorry) and sometimes the women look absolutely flat, like a photo or something.
And really, the stepdad looks like he's about the age of his daughter, that's a bit too much.
I know most of what wrote has already been written, so I kept it to the most important issues, stuff like why the stepdad waited 17years to ask mom about dad is weird, the way the mc reacts to women and the women to him is too simplistic, it needs a bit more refinement.
So, after all this (hopefully constructive) criticism, let me say that I like the game, some of the models are really fine and I think it has a lot of potential, if you work seriously on its deficits.
Maybe because part of the story is that his real dad is missing and that he had a lot of secrets, including being a rich fuck?
I thought you actually read the story.
Either look for an translator or someone who can edit your own translation.
The renders are okay, as are the models, the animations are horrible (sorry) and sometimes the women look absolutely flat, like a photo or something.
And really, the stepdad looks like he's about the age of his daughter, that's a bit too much.
I know most of what wrote has already been written, so I kept it to the most important issues, stuff like why the stepdad waited 17years to ask mom about dad is weird, the way the mc reacts to women and the women to him is too simplistic, it needs a bit more refinement.
So, after all this (hopefully constructive) criticism, let me say that I like the game, some of the models are really fine and I think it has a lot of potential, if you work seriously on its deficits.
Maybe because part of the story is that his real dad is missing and that he had a lot of secrets, including being a rich fuck?
I thought you actually read the story.
- Oct 9, 2017
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hmm yeah I know but if you clearly read and cipher it the way he deliberates the story which is confusing cause he used the Dad instead of the Mom cause there wasn't any implicate that he had a mom and if he used Dad and implicate that his Mom died/gone from numerous reason and now he has a Step-mom (A.K.A the landlady) and there's now a connection whereas his dad is missing and her Step-mom married the step-dad..Maybe because part of the story is that his real dad is missing and that he had a lot of secrets, including being a rich fuck?
I thought you actually read the story.
you know I play games, not to fap because it's a porn game but I play it if the story is good or bad and how the progress flow which is why I was confused about why he uses that.
e.a:
"Hi Mc(name) I lived in this town(forgot the name of that town) with my Dad and the landlady whereas my step-mom right now cause my mom died in cancer and dad was so miserable and our house got in the lease with the bank and haven't fully paid and that's how we end up in landlady's house and become a tenant and my father got accustomed with the landlady and my dad fell over hells and marry the landlady which why she became my step-mom, My step-mom has 3 daughter's before he married my dad her husband died in a car accident and become a widow and after that we became a family in her house and after a couple of years my dad went missing and after my dad disappeared my mom meet "the step-dad" and marry my step-mom, he never liked me from the start." you know the rest xD ...
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renamed stuff for incest.
- Oct 13, 2017
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Sooo the older sister looks like Tracy, acts like Tracy and is called Alice. Hmmmm.
About the rest: I think everything has been mentioned so far. I don't mind having a step dad and one step sister, models are okay, images at the beginning could be better. I don't like the high fov ("fisheye"). English is horrible!
After all I enjoyed that. Looking forward to playing the next version.
About the rest: I think everything has been mentioned so far. I don't mind having a step dad and one step sister, models are okay, images at the beginning could be better. I don't like the high fov ("fisheye"). English is horrible!
After all I enjoyed that. Looking forward to playing the next version.
I loved the mother´s look,but she could use sister´s dress and maybe her tongue,gotta keep a look on this one
- Oct 30, 2017
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I inserted the script in the game folder and removed the script file that was there, but its still Landlady and tenants.
What did I do wrong ?
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His stepdad married his landlady just after his father disappeared... LOL... How did he become his stepdad then...? Poor concealment of incest (but I think that is a good thing, I'm so tired of devs working hard to make the moms act like landlady to properly conceal incest).
Poor concealment of incest (but I think that is a good thing, I'm so tired of devs working hard to make the moms act like landlady to properly conceal incest).
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its a nice story to start. just lack of introduction to start with and its just a observation but mother is dark color, elder sister is dark color, younger sister is white color and step sister is i dont know what color she is zombie maybe
- Oct 30, 2017
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i was waiting for update the story was good well i guest to bad i stuff my one chose is to make my own porn game because most people dont do more then a little of the game and not add a ending it is sad making a game mostly not about money but fun and the story like pac men it got a story it may be how the game came to be but still to bad i not good on art and i really need to work on my grammar but i know the basic of ren'py and i can think of a story like angel fallen to earth and find a baby in the rain cold and she risen him. he turn 19 a few week ago but today he want on a walk to the park and a demon smell a angel so the demon give that boy a gift to corrupt people women or guy
please note corrupt guy only to help you give more women or a women harem be if i make it a chose base game and you pick the right way sadly like say only know basic and no there no gay because i really dont want to add if i find someone to help make maybe i ask he if he want to ask it but gay not my cup of tea unless they in love then i ok with it there may be female dom in it but i belive may add a way around it and i will not add free roam right away or it really basic free roam i know about point set up but not how to add it so player can see point so i will do some reading about it
please note corrupt guy only to help you give more women or a women harem be if i make it a chose base game and you pick the right way sadly like say only know basic and no there no gay because i really dont want to add if i find someone to help make maybe i ask he if he want to ask it but gay not my cup of tea unless they in love then i ok with it there may be female dom in it but i belive may add a way around it and i will not add free roam right away or it really basic free roam i know about point set up but not how to add it so player can see point so i will do some reading about it