Don't be hard on yourself. Let these wise asses write in their second language and see how far they get. I've enjoyed the story so far. The characters are lively and interesting. It could benefit from some editing but frankly, that is the case with most games on this site.
Your writing is fine. I like the story so far.
Sad but true.
Who is flaming you? You are entitled to your opinion. Breaking down what you are saying into pertinent points, you in general have issues with the story because it focuses too much on elements that are not conducive to erotic enjoyment. This is a valid critique. You also feel that there is a paucity of erotic content. My only concern is that this level of consternation caused by the game is driving you to feelings that are perhaps too drastic and causing ideations of self-harm. Do not ice your dick or needle your eyes, please. You could have stated all of this more artfully but it doesn't necessarily invalidate the point. Even for those of us who, like myself, enjoy the game seem to have a consensus that there is certainly room for improvement and that the story isn't going to work for everyone. I am not a fan of the entire work subplot, myself. It seems like it may result in blackmailing the boss for sex or something and I really don't care about her one way or another. Verde is active on this board and has stated in the past that their work isn't perfect, so most of us on the board are trying to give constructive criticism so that the game can improve. But if you are done with the game and wish to exit the thread with this Jerry Maguire moment more power to you. Go in peace.
Not sure wtf is going on that prompted that post, as I haven't kept up with the post here, because I'm just not a fan of multi-protag games and I also don't play female protags. But, if that post you made is due to whiners and naysayers, fuck them. You should write the story your way. Listening to the naysayers will always complicate things. Do it your way. Take your time with the storyline and progress as slow or fast as you want. Don't let others push you. Just my opinion which means fuck-all except to myself.
Welp.. The only thing that makes sense is to focus on corrupting of the daughter. How unfortunate.
I tend to agree that Devs should tune out the "noise" that comes in the course of feedback about their games. Like when someone is making a harem or an NTR game and some rando drops on the board and says that they don't like that kind of game. Well, that is the game genre and you, my friend, are on the wrong thread. So that isn't the helpful kind of criticism. You have to make the game that you are making. This is in essence an incest and corruption game. There are folks who aren't going to like this game for that reason, and as you said changing the game for people who will never play it and never like it isn't a recipe for success.
Well, at least you admitted doing what we already know too many other devs do, adding side stories to slow down progress of the main story. Hope you'll advance the story most of us are actually interested in, the MC's relationship with the daughter character.
I think side stories are not bad per se. It just depends on the extent to which it derails the overarching story. The logline of this story is this: A father and daughter are reunited after being kept apart with a lie and struggle with their attraction to one another. There are a lot of twists and turns that this story can take on its own. Even if they do give in to the temptation that isn't the end of the story, it is just the beginning of the complications.
not sure what u did...lost interest with multiple protag...
