In these spoilers are a complete list of typos and content issues up through the end of v0.4c. It appears that ICSTOR is not a native English speaker and that he is using native to U.K. English language translation, although the story appears to be set in California. Additionally there are way too many commas and dashes in all the wrong places. The spoiler gives corrections and recommendations.
This spoiler gives a table of U.K. English to North American English slang translations
Primary character ages in terms of the main character.
Backstory issues and possible correction to the backstory:
Other Notes and WIPs