bobdillan
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- Nov 18, 2016
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Was fun... but the writing to try and not unintentionally offend someone that well isn't there... is a kinda cringe. MC is living in a post apocalypte world... the last thing someone in the situation would care about would be political correctness, for people that aren't there. (is more for the viewer but even then it is over the top, like MC doesn't need to give a long ass explanation about them not wanting something in their butt lol).
Biggest issue with it tho... it really does wounders at breaking immersion... which isn't exactly fun. To clarify it isn't the sister story shit, it is MCs overeaction to not wanting to offended the viewer but going overboard with it.
i.e. a 4th wall break without actually breaking the 4th wall, and instead just breaking your immersion. Like simply having MC say "fk no I am not into butt stuff." or "I am not into butt stuff." is enough, we don't need an entire monologue of him not trying to offend a male character that isn't there.
Biggest issue with it tho... it really does wounders at breaking immersion... which isn't exactly fun. To clarify it isn't the sister story shit, it is MCs overeaction to not wanting to offended the viewer but going overboard with it.
i.e. a 4th wall break without actually breaking the 4th wall, and instead just breaking your immersion. Like simply having MC say "fk no I am not into butt stuff." or "I am not into butt stuff." is enough, we don't need an entire monologue of him not trying to offend a male character that isn't there.