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Quick bucks, thats why, they get a premise and a product that can barely be called a game and launch them at DLsite or set up a patreon, desperate fellas buy it and the game barely gets an update per year.
Might not be the case with this one, but i am willing to bet on it, since it is the case with the majority of them.
definitely agree with others...she becomes too much of a slut. nobody wants to ruin their girlfriend's reputation or yours for that matter. needs to be more subtle and targeted to selected individuals. plus, i think some buildup would help. first, exhibition, then teasing and maybe group play.
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Anyhow. I do enjoyed the prologue. And i am absolutely going to be keeping an eye on this.
this doesn't have a dlsite page and it seems like this dev is a novice and its their first foray so i doubt they'll do a patreon
Currently shitting myself reading all of these comments.
But sick! I needed to get different perspectives on this, so this is cool.
And I do plan on having the MC get involved more. Not only with the threesomes/gangbangs, but also just general dates and getting to know their dynamic more in the middle of the game.
But sick! I needed to get different perspectives on this, so this is cool.
I'm a save goblin, so not making a save anywhere in the last 20 or so minutes was pretty fucking stupid of me lmfao. I tried to be conscious of it at the start, but I got too much tunnel-vision trying to finish up the last half. I'll fix it up in a later update!
Nice. I was too focused on actually making the thing work without thinking about the pacing. For now, at least, I wanted to get a demo out to see what people think of it so far. You all have very valid critiques and suggestions, so this is very good feedback. A method I can think of is to just make the last half of the prologue the mid-point of the game, and make it more buildup/teasing in the first half. And you're all right, the no condom sex is the end game, but if I change it as y'all are suggesting here, I can definitely think of other options. Thanks for the comments.
And I do plan on having the MC get involved more. Not only with the threesomes/gangbangs, but also just general dates and getting to know their dynamic more in the middle of the game.
I do not plan on monetizing the game in any way! This is a learning experience for me, so that's my reward for making the game.
I have a scuffed translation (edited MTL) I made that's around 70-80% complete, with the rest being the usual mtl poetry. I'll see if I can share it tonight, since I'm going on vacation in two days so I won't be working on my game at all LOL.
Loved the demo. Obviously the pacing is a bit fast, but that's what to expect for an incomplete story. I think you'll want to add the sort of slow burn where she slowly does things to tease the protagonist before going full slut.
Personally, the sluttiness at the end is exactly the sort of thing I want to see in this sort of game though, particularly with her pushing on the boundaries of the protagonist and seeing how far it will go. Especially ending up basically free use. There aren't enough games where the love interest sluts it up while still being a loving partner.
Would love to see more fetishes explored like rimming, femdom, watersports, etc, all depending on how far you want to take it.
Good stuff!
Personally, the sluttiness at the end is exactly the sort of thing I want to see in this sort of game though, particularly with her pushing on the boundaries of the protagonist and seeing how far it will go. Especially ending up basically free use. There aren't enough games where the love interest sluts it up while still being a loving partner.
Would love to see more fetishes explored like rimming, femdom, watersports, etc, all depending on how far you want to take it.
Good stuff!
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I hope that one day a sort of AI will translate RPGM code in Renpy.
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well if u want suggestions I would say that u should "not" allow any sex with "others" until we reach the "free-roam" part.
what I mean is, that when we finally can walk around and also decide (as I hope there will be choices) it would be nice that the MC can be involved with the whole thing.
example:
- u and GF go to the cinema and theres this dude that u notice are looking at your girl
now u can decide to tease him, maybe u start kissing her and (depending where this dude sits) u allow some skin, maybe u lift her skirt or u show a bit of boobs. but u can also decide to "not" do that.
if u "activate" this dude, there will be future events with him, maybe next time u approach him and tell him to sit together, and while u watch the movie u both touch her legs.
and so on.
the thing is that it should feel as a progress and that u give a bit of your GF to "whomever" slowly.
surely u can do the same for school. also here, "levels", we start slow, as she already show booty, we can use that to tease the boys. but to take it further, there need to be planning and objectives and targets. it can not just be "everybody" as it seems as mess and hedonistic. surely, as an end-game route, why not! but its nice with progress and see her allow more and more instead of everything in one go.
giving choices will make more people enjoy your game. some will want to make her a slut fast, some will want to be picky and only allow specific dudes, or maybe even allow to a certain point and never take it to fucking (maybe that is enough to fantasies for the couple and not take it further)
but if thats not what u have in mind and more of a "kinetic"-novel with rpgm-system, u can still create progress that makes sense.
what I mean is, that when we finally can walk around and also decide (as I hope there will be choices) it would be nice that the MC can be involved with the whole thing.
example:
- u and GF go to the cinema and theres this dude that u notice are looking at your girl
now u can decide to tease him, maybe u start kissing her and (depending where this dude sits) u allow some skin, maybe u lift her skirt or u show a bit of boobs. but u can also decide to "not" do that.
if u "activate" this dude, there will be future events with him, maybe next time u approach him and tell him to sit together, and while u watch the movie u both touch her legs.
and so on.
the thing is that it should feel as a progress and that u give a bit of your GF to "whomever" slowly.
surely u can do the same for school. also here, "levels", we start slow, as she already show booty, we can use that to tease the boys. but to take it further, there need to be planning and objectives and targets. it can not just be "everybody" as it seems as mess and hedonistic. surely, as an end-game route, why not! but its nice with progress and see her allow more and more instead of everything in one go.
giving choices will make more people enjoy your game. some will want to make her a slut fast, some will want to be picky and only allow specific dudes, or maybe even allow to a certain point and never take it to fucking (maybe that is enough to fantasies for the couple and not take it further)
but if thats not what u have in mind and more of a "kinetic"-novel with rpgm-system, u can still create progress that makes sense.
This is a promising game. I liked the demo so far. The art is really nice despite being AI. I also like the characters overall. Hopefully the pacing will be improved over time and there will be more player agency. But overall it hit the right triggers for me, which is not something all NTR/NTS games can do.
Personally I would disagree a bit with people on the whole other men fucking the gf without condom while MC can't being a bad thing however, as I do like the humiliation/tease/denial type of netorase, and this sort of thing can be a part of it, so I liked it. But as it is right now I agree it doesn't make much sense given her reasons.
I think it could be kept in (maybe with some kind of choice given to player to allow it or not beforehand, like when they are setting the rules, so people can avoid it if they want to) and then play up the tease/humiliation aspect more if player opts to allow it, or even have a full on denial route if that's something you might be willing to do, along with some kind of more pure swinging route.
Personally I would disagree a bit with people on the whole other men fucking the gf without condom while MC can't being a bad thing however, as I do like the humiliation/tease/denial type of netorase, and this sort of thing can be a part of it, so I liked it. But as it is right now I agree it doesn't make much sense given her reasons.
I think it could be kept in (maybe with some kind of choice given to player to allow it or not beforehand, like when they are setting the rules, so people can avoid it if they want to) and then play up the tease/humiliation aspect more if player opts to allow it, or even have a full on denial route if that's something you might be willing to do, along with some kind of more pure swinging route.
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If accepting anymore suggestions than I suggest that the GF gets corrupted into gyaru by some punks and starts being complete and utter bitch to the MC.
You know I do enjoy some femdom/humiliation with the cucking, but it is refreshing to have a netorase story where the girlfriend is madly in love with the MC
The character interactions are nice. The writing isn't inherently bad or anything, it's pacing is just absolutely all over the place, lol. The core content is enjoyable, but the intro feels like a cinematic sequence that has skipped over the real intro, the beginning, the middle, and has now thrust us immediately into the endgame, without much in the way of steady plot buildup. The art is fine. Lots of NTR/S games have AI, and I think of all the different genre types, having AI art is the least problematic in this genre, because the most important part isn't the porn as much as everything else that leads into it.
You have the potential to make a good game, and I enjoyed what I played, so don't take this as me being hostile or anything, but rather as productive critiquing. But the broader plot could probably do with a re-write white keeping the character interactions, throw in a few extra side characters, even non-sexual ones, to add an extra social dynamic and add to the excitement of some scenes. Add some non-sexual character interactions between the two main characters while maintaining a balance with the sex stuff so that it doesn't feel grindy. I think a general rule for porn games should be that the sex scenes should feel like a payoff for the plot's writing, and this is especially true for NTR/S stories. If you jump too much from sex scene to sex scene without buildup between, it comes across as crude and gets boring. I've seen this with other games to their detriment.
The whole unprotected sex and creampie thing is fine. The denial element to it has it's charms. But I wouldn't recommend having their first cucking event sex with another guy+unprotected+creampie all in one go. There's 3 new juicy plot elements here and you blew your load, so to speak, in one go. Should be sex > plot buildup > unprotected > plot buildup > creampie. That way you get 3 plateau moments rather than just the one. Having them all in one go doesn't make that 1 moment 3x better, and gives you a kind of whiplash feeling.
I hope you continue with development, and good luck!
You have the potential to make a good game, and I enjoyed what I played, so don't take this as me being hostile or anything, but rather as productive critiquing. But the broader plot could probably do with a re-write white keeping the character interactions, throw in a few extra side characters, even non-sexual ones, to add an extra social dynamic and add to the excitement of some scenes. Add some non-sexual character interactions between the two main characters while maintaining a balance with the sex stuff so that it doesn't feel grindy. I think a general rule for porn games should be that the sex scenes should feel like a payoff for the plot's writing, and this is especially true for NTR/S stories. If you jump too much from sex scene to sex scene without buildup between, it comes across as crude and gets boring. I've seen this with other games to their detriment.
The whole unprotected sex and creampie thing is fine. The denial element to it has it's charms. But I wouldn't recommend having their first cucking event sex with another guy+unprotected+creampie all in one go. There's 3 new juicy plot elements here and you blew your load, so to speak, in one go. Should be sex > plot buildup > unprotected > plot buildup > creampie. That way you get 3 plateau moments rather than just the one. Having them all in one go doesn't make that 1 moment 3x better, and gives you a kind of whiplash feeling.
I hope you continue with development, and good luck!