Some really horrible personal shit happened to me last week so I was planning to stay off F95 for a while but I literally saw this thread for the first time and I felt I have to comment.
Holy molly, you are going to create a game! How exciting is that!! Even better, its a FP game. Your my champ lol.
Now the face - I was god smack by the face. She is really cute.
Body shape - No complains there.
Hair - I really like the black hair version actually as it gives her more a goth personality distinction from the other games.
Overall - Rock/goth chick totally rock my balls hahahaha
Some general suggestions:
- Clothing - I do like what you have showed thus far on her clothing. But since this is eventually about corruption (unless you have some mad plot like Sage), it may not be a bad idea for her debut to show less skin and to go more goth/rock heavy oriented. You could think about it like 4 stages. First is full on goth/rock attire, second is what you shown, third is sexy time and fourth is the candy shop. I was thinking since she is a shy girl with only 1 boyfriend, the BF was probably the goth/rock influence in her life and she became this way. This progression helps to reduce the corruption pace although it depends on how long you plan to work on the game and also factoring whether you wan to capture potential patreon funds fast at the begging.
- Sister - Sister idea is cool. Many lewd things can happen since she is the aggressive sexual hunter. Sister steals potential boy interest from FP or FP could steal sister BF which sister didnt give a fuck), Sister having sex which FP peek on , sister BF had accidental sleep/shower sex mistaking thinking FP is sister etc. Deeper plot wise could be FP looks up to her sister , wants to change to be more * normal * and engages sister help or it could just be sister * educating * FP in a corrupted sense which FP starts to show more skin.
- Corruption pace. - Everyone is entitled to their own opinion of course but the best advice I can give is to follow Project Sage in terms of pacing. Well maybe not that slow plus I doubt you can control your creative sexual urges on corrupting her lol. But yea, there are /were so many great FP that started off with a big bang but due to sex scenes came up too easily, the updates of these great games is pretty lacking for me as its just sex with ABCD. A full steam sex game from the start loses steam really quick if you don't control the pace.
- CYOA - Ppl get crazy over this shit and it be a huge drawing attraction for ppl to try it out. Not asking you to be like PS standard but you should factor in your programming skills / personal time and above all how many endings you wan this game to have with a rough idea of how many choices you want to spolit the patreons with. Plan early on this.
- Blonde mode - I was thinking instead of corrupted version being blonde. Maybe down the track when she works as a erotic dancer/striper/prostitute etc , she wears a blonde wig as her cover while she attempts to separate her social life and her work . Lots of steamy potential plots could happen going down this route.
- Personality - Well you already said she is shy and this is a corruption game so no brainier there but it may be fun if you can plot her personality to be as realistic as possible you can allow in a sex game. Its like I find it a breath of fresh air when PS FP challenged the blackmail scene in the railway car coz you know blackmail = no resistance. Aim to be different is what I am getting at.
Developing stage is always the most intriguing. The world is your oyster. Dont rush your first game unless its financially motivated. Above all, have fun and enjoy making it.
Hey thank you for your brief feedback!
Thank you for the flowers for her design (already discussed this with someone, since I find her cute too, doing the sick perv stuff I planned for her is, hmm, no can't do that to her ^^) ...
The body shape, yeah, I think it will relly show of first in relation to other adult models (which might lead to some more iterations of her, but since I have no experience in this stuff, that's expectable).
Point 1: Yeah, that's exactly what I am thinking. This is why I need a cool black jeans (can be tight) and a more or less loose black/printed shirt. Black disguises a bit her impressive rack and I show not too much scan. Next stage would be an also black outfit, but for example tank top/skirt/fishnets. Ideas are there, finding the right assets is annyoing I have to admit.
Point 2: Exactly. There will be a lot of teasing/peeping with others but the incest path (as K9, rape, harder BDSM, drugging) are abandoned as long as I develop the game on patreon. The ideas of darkmode were canceled because of some threads I read here and there is no way for plausible deniability of creating a dark mode with such scenes with the original models by the dev himself). Since the dark mode wouldn't only consist of altered text but whole scenes. Since there are some ways to have incest in the game I need to see what goes. But watching her sister with a BBC or something is definitely included. Some oopsie situations with brother etc. You already mention some things, which I am happy about, because I will note those things because I am a noob at writing stories!
Point 3: Pacing, oh yeah, the borders between aaahh what a fuckfest shit game and MILKING! RIP OFF! ... Well I don't do it for money, to be exact, I do it for money spending (looking at my invests I did...). So pacing will be, especially for cuty pie, not to slow and not fast ^^ (at least for me). Although I am aware of missing H-scenes, not only with the MC. So I plan a "revolutionary" thing. I already noticed, I won't be satisified with playing only a girl, I need a dick with two legs to control. So I have the vague idea to make a path with her twin brother. So there will be scenes, where you change into her brother... One fundamental thing I try to achieve is also to trigger paths, not only by the MC himself, you should make also decisions for the person who wants you to do something. So you have a consent of MC and other person, or not...
Point 4: COYA? No time to google at the moment
Point 5: Yep, the wig thing is something I like. So I can give her for some events another look (for example the red hair from the first posts, maybe some contact lenses. Because I plan some repeatable random events (hello PS
) a permanent change of look (which will happen when she gets more corrupted, but this is stagable with the scenes I think). Optional changes will be not implemented, it is too much work (I am already over ambitious for a noob).
Point 6: Indeed. I already got some very helpful tipps of Paperwork himself! Fleshing out a character in a quite detailled manner helps to keep the behaviour more or less consistent (-> realistic within the fictional story scenario) and doing so will also help writing the story, because of the differences, interessts etc. between the characters. BUT! I am aware this is planned as some fap game, I will never achieve a Nobel Prize for literature (but the thought is quite appealing though ^^).
