Great work on the game, Killer. You've really invested in the story and there's a considerably higher word count per scene than usual which makes it a lot more enjoyable for me. I'm currently on the first dinner date with Sun and it's taken me quite a few hours getting here because I haven't been able to bring myself to skip any of the text.
One thing I've noticed though is a few scenes lack the activity they're supposed to be representing which in turn takes some of the immersion away from them. For example, I few pool scenes where none of the characters actually get into the pool, but it is implied -but not shown- that they already have, and then the scene moves on. Another being the dinner dates with Tanja, Maddie and currently the scene I'm on with Sun, where they go to enjoy some dinner but none of the dinner is being served or eaten.
In my opinion, these scenes would greatly benefit from being enriched with a few CG's showing the characters doing the activity implied or even something as simple as them commenting on said activity accompanied by a black screen showing a passage of time. Of course this is just a suggestion and may not be your ultimate vision for your creation.
Again, that said, I'm enjoying everything you've done a lot and hope you keep up the good work. Cheers.