After bugs are solved and it's properly enjoyed the countdown then starts friend
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After bugs are solved and it's properly enjoyed the countdown then starts friend
And when that is suppose to happen?
I couldn't possibly say my friend for I know not myself. But I'd like to believe it'll be soon!
Man, it has been a while since I got interested in a game just from its description. The screenshots + the fact that you are going for a one on one love story instead of the usual 50 girl harem/incest game got me in my weakest spot. Gonna try this out and maybe write a review if it counts for anything. High hopes here!
Hope you do end up liking it my friend! THank you for your time
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Allow me to start off by saying that I just finished playing through from the start of this story to the end of chapter 5, and stressing that I enjoyed the story a great deal. I have to admit, right from the second I noticed the combination of tags including "incest", "romance", "virgin" and "pregnancy", in a story titled "My Sister & I" I was extremely interested, and reading the Developer Notes in the OP - with the mention of a focus on the romance between the player character (PC) and sister - made this story shoot right to the top of my list of VNs to play. The concept of this story is pretty much the ideal one for my tastes, it's mostly well done, and I will absolutely be looking forward to the next chapter of the story.
That being said, I started noticing little things pretty much right from the start of the game that stuck out at me, and very quickly those small things - combined with my relative investment in the concept and execution of the story - made me get out pen and paper and start taking notes. You may very well have heard some or all of this before and I'm just wasting my time, but I still thought I would take the time to offer some constructive criticism, because there are a lot of small things that hold back what is otherwise a very promising story.
So, let me look these notes and see if I can write something more comprehensible from them... This may seem a little disorderly, but for most part they're just organized in the order I wrote them down.
I think that will do for the main points from my notes. Finally, let me thank you for creating this story; even with its flaws it's still pretty good, and I'll certainly be keeping an eye out for its continuation.
That being said, I started noticing little things pretty much right from the start of the game that stuck out at me, and very quickly those small things - combined with my relative investment in the concept and execution of the story - made me get out pen and paper and start taking notes. You may very well have heard some or all of this before and I'm just wasting my time, but I still thought I would take the time to offer some constructive criticism, because there are a lot of small things that hold back what is otherwise a very promising story.
So, let me look these notes and see if I can write something more comprehensible from them... This may seem a little disorderly, but for most part they're just organized in the order I wrote them down.
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I think that will do for the main points from my notes. Finally, let me thank you for creating this story; even with its flaws it's still pretty good, and I'll certainly be keeping an eye out for its continuation.
Greetings my friend, before anything I'd sincerely like to thank you for not only taking the time to play through my game but to actually write such a detailed list. This truly shows (or at least I'd like to believe it does) that you genuinely had a good time with it, perhaps event felt a modicum of passion as you read through it
For this you have my upmost gratitude my friend
Now, I've spent a few minutes thinking about how I could reply to the various points you made, as quoting them would honestly be too bothersome line by line
So I'll group them on blocs and attempt to provide some insight
1º You're absolute right about what you say here but I must say that they're intentional (except the office one, that's a mistake on my part) but the other ones are explicitly confusing, the timeline as well as the true layout of the house I've made quite "cartoonish" so to speak.
The answer as to why is rather simple, I've had some experience with the writing of novels in the past. ANd one of the harder things as you advance is keeping track of the record
For this game, I waned to do something different, were I wishing to make something akin to a linear romance novel I could've written one. But what I wanted was something with enough time to expose the dialogue I wished to see myself in other games while conveying the "happy" feeling of an old TV show
Therefore I decided to simply focus on the growth of the characters and to have the world revolve around them. The time and place not being anything but mediums for their characters to interact with
This is why. To any further questions regarding "The dates do not mix, or the house could not be that big!" the reply must be
"A wormhole did it"
2º This one slightly confuses me; I've masturbated when I had to pee and nothing awful has happened. You usualy do the deed, then have this short window (post nut clarity, some would call it) that you use to clean and then afterwards you feel an ENORMOUS urge to go to the bathroom.
But taking into account the milk and the juice come from different canals, there really should not be much of a problem I believe
Although, It is true that each man has it's own cock. And only they know the limit of their grit
3º In here once again you're correct. You see, when I first took to developing the idea for this game I had a friend of mine who would be the 2d artist for the project. Alas due life issues this never came to be yet I had already written the script, so I did not wish for it to go to waste.
Therefore I explored the net and found a way to make it myself. The images at the very beginning are indeed quite raw but as you've taken appreciation to (which I thank) I have improved the technique somewhat, and I sincerely hope to continue doing so in the near future
Regarding a remake of the beginning it's definitely inside my plans
I have in fact begun to do it, albeit at a very, very slow rate as my priority remains to finish the plot first. Then begin remaking the visuals at the beginning!
I am trying to find someone who'd be willing to aid me, but so far I haven't had much luck with anyone I've hired
4º These points about narration too are valid, I was unsure to where to go at first as I was getting used to the medium
I'd like to think in the final chapter specially I've taken to improve these, yet much remains to be done this is true
5º This is actually a fine idea, I could definitely go back and throw some loading images there to help improve the pacing even if I've not yet remade most images. Thank you for the heads up friend!
It is something that bugged me a lot while I was replaying the game to get a feel of how It'd be. I believe I've come up with a solution in the form of these "loading cards" which look a bit cuter and more in the vibe of the story I'm trying to tell
4º It is an inside joke between them, the novel is filled with them. I believe that as one reads it, they begin catching on to them as you've done. My main preocupation is to have "believable" banter and it's something I'm trying to adapt
I have plenty of weird inside jokes with my friends which simply came to be through repetition so I'm trying to see how well would this adapt to the novel
5º And for the final point. Not much I can say other than you're correct. I do have a weird fixation with "on" I don't know why, I think I just like how it sounds to be honest. To try and correct it, I've enlisted the aid of some proof readers so I hope it'll get even less noticeable in the future
I believe with this I've covered it all as best as I could, once again I sincerely thank you for your interest my friend
This has been quite useful, have a good day!
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Thank you for taking my criticism so well, and for replying in such detail. Really, seeing how much you've improved from the start to the end of the current story combined with your obvious willingness to continue to improve makes me look forward to the future of this VN even more.
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Any man who takes his time to criticise in good faith what I've written deserves to have his time appreciated, this empathy is what separates us from the beasts that roam the land
At least that's what I believe!
Now, to the points
1º This Is a decent idea my friend, thank you for sharing it. I kind of like the joke angle so I'll attempt to give it my own twist, could add some wholesome light heartedness to the plot
2º Eh, to be honest. I kind of shy away from showing scenes where only MC's dick is present. While I understand how it could make sense from a structural point of view. It is my belief that most of my players are looking to see their cute gf, not a veiny cock; so while it might be a little confusing, I think it gives a more pleasurable experience overall
3º A sound cue for the cards, I tried to make one but I was not happy with any result. Yet it's definitely coming!
4º Yes but, if they end up getting it. Is a heads-up really neccessary? Something I kind of dislike of modern media is how they assume the viewer is stupid. Everything must be done in expository dialogue and there's rarely room for guessing in modern shows. This is something I want to avoid, for I believe anyone who devotes their time to this wholesome experience must not only be a gentleman, but a scholar too!
Once again, thank you for your review my friend, I look forward seeing you once our next update releases!
Hope you have fun my friend! Update record is kept on Discord if you're interested
Not in this one my friend, this game is exclusively a relationship between you and your sister
Oh very nice, I'll add it to the main post!
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uuuh, better not. while we are allowed to post our stuff in the threads, they are not allowed yet in the OP. dont want ya to get a warning ^^.
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Nice, this updated. I'll be doing a fresh playthrough since it's been a minute.
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It could be a great game but what are the dev doing with the animations!?
Was running this game on Linux, and came across a missing image error on one of the loading screens. When the MC and Claire return home, the error is "Image 'CdC' not found". Doing a bit of digging in the game files shows that there is an image named "CdC.png" in the "images" folder, and in fact, that particular image was used earlier in the game,
and end up going to the game store.
Poking around the game script, I see that in the scene where the image loads, the line that triggers it is written as:
while the line that fails is written as:
To my untrained eyes, since I don't know Python or Ren'py that well, the only difference I can see is the letter case when it calls the scenes. I thought it was going to be a file name issue, since that seems to be a common issue I come across.
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Poking around the game script, I see that in the scene where the image loads, the line that triggers it is written as:
Code:
scene cdc with fade
Code:
scene CdC with fade
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My Sister & I [v0.6] [Tortilla Dreams]
COMPRESSED
SIZE ~ 424 MB
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COMPRESSED
SIZE ~ 424 MB
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I like the pregnancy tag, but dislike no harem (must bang all the ladies). Still, the characters are quite well done.