VN Ren'Py Abandoned Offcuts [v0.3.1] [stencilbits]

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tizz

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Some rambling:

I really liked the linearity of the story, since this isn't the typical 'oh shit she's so hot I have to fuck her' game. It's more adult than porn game. The actual naughty scenes/playing time ratio is really on the lower end, but I don't mind that at all, it works really well, because the focus is more about the characters than fancy visuals (Although I liked the scenes very much aswell). Having the linearity makes it easier to develop the characters simply because of the work you'd have to put in if you set multiple meaningful choices and rewrite it for different scenarios. I like it this way more because the author can flesh out the characters better, it's really similar to a book. I hope he continues this way.

By far the hardest and therefore best choice was which girl you liked the most or wanted to be with(can't recall the phrasing from the top of my head), since it makes you really think what your stand is towards the characters, so please more of them in the future!
Choices that made it sound like they had an (immediate) impact on the story are honestly rather frustrating when you find out they change nothing at all. I assume they are to track the like-points stencilbits mentioned, but I think letting the Players choose what/how or about whom MC thinks about would be a better way to go about that. (There are already some decisions like that in the game I think).

Small bit about Nina: It would be great if there were some lines ackwnoledging if they decided to get intimate with each other in the shower and in the morning, but yea there is where the linearity comes into play again and I've covered that already I think. That and her saying she would be fine with him cheating as long as it wasn't with Melissa (although maybe that was just a joke that went over my head?) was a bit offthrowing.

It also has some great tidbits of humour, I don't think I chuckled that much at any other game so far, escpecially the Nina closeup on her face was hilarious, 10/10.

Also you said, stencilbits, that you didn't want to be too ambitious and then release a 'demo' that takes hours to complete. In that time I could propably play multiple games that are already out for over a year, have half as much fun and probably forgotten about them already :closedtongue: Great game, thank you very much!

(Jane not being in the cover art hopefully doesn't mean anything ;))
 

El Tanque

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Ecxellent game (demo) hahaha amazing man! I like all the characters looks, specially Alice's aunt! she is beautiful...
Hope she has some content in the future as well Alice. Some of the situalions was hilarious, and the different personalities of the characters, all well done! Keep the good work.
 
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ryupuma

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After giving a look at your Patreon page, i'm happy to see it picked up steam quite a bit !!

Also, having almost finished the "demo" for a 2nd time, I must say I am still as impressed but wonder the fate of Jane for upcoming updates. After Nina (cause face it, who played this game and DIDN'T like her ?) , she is the 2nd char I liked the most ( how she's made, how she talks ).

I'm also wondering how much gametime you estimate each of your next releases to have, like 0.2, 0.3 etc.. I only ask as you seem very serious as to provide top quality and a lot of "content" ( even if, this 0.1 was mostly tons of text with few choices ) and right now you have this 1st version, that lasts easily, easily HOURS for someone who takes time to read.

Are you planning to go as overkill for 0.2 and up ? I don't mind either way, i'm just curious. Some people like VN's in which they can bang within 1st 5 mins and it's all over in 30 mins. Some love those with awesome stories where the sex becomes secondary ( but can still be as graphic, twisted, perverted ) and that can't be finished in one sitting. I'm in the latter 1/2.

To finish, if this game picks up as much popularity as you would like it to, are you planning to add a language ? I don't know how hard it is, or what program is used or hours needed to translate a game like this, but if it ever crosses your mind, I know a guy that doesn't do much of his life and is actually French. :rolleyes:
 
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I very rarely bother to post about it when finding a game I like, but I was genuinely surprised by the quality of this one. Yes, there are some strange grammar issues sometimes, but other than that the writing is great, definitely one of the best here I'd say. The main gripe I would have is that choices seems to mean very little. It seems to mainly be a way to skip scenes rather than creating divergent paths.

Still, for a 0.1 edition it seems really promising. (A caveat, this is a proper visual novel in the classic sense, and not a nukige that is mainly just a string of sex scenes. So might not appeal to those who just wants to get their rocks off)
 

Laziness

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One other reason I've got high hopes for this game is that Melissa's design kind of reminds me of Anna from Play With Us! and it'd be nice to have a story involving her (or someone close enough) actually reach completion.

Sorry, Palmer.
 

Nightwinter

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she wasn't cold though... she pretended to be, she was always warm to the mc but didn't want to show it because she was fearful of what might happen. hence she is not a tsundere. however i would accept calling her a fraud or fake tsundere. cause i am pretty sure a tsundere doesn't fake feelings. like melissa for example she is proper tsundere.
-.- dude, did u read anything in the VN? she was cold to him when he moved in to her house...
 

Deadlyreaper

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I must honestly say that I was really annoyed at the beginning of tons of text boring and I just skipped the whole text and then it went with the story going on the people and I've read everything and sometimes I thought omg the MC can defend himself and not treat each other like the last piece of dirt?

or can not he finally prevail against the girls and not always like a little sissy get ready? but the further I read the story followed the more enthusiastic I was and I also laughed a lot wanted to protect alice ...... and the story was always better and better and interesannt ..... and holyschit that is the first release !!!!!!!! and the game has more content to offer more story than some other games

that get updates for 6 or 7 months or longer, most of dev can take an example and I can only thank you for the fantastic game I could not stop until it was over it is now 7:45 in the morning and now I'm going to sleep now because I could not stop the game .... so keep it up so I can not wait to see how the story goes on, especially after what happened the end was really good work
 
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Z33d

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Liked the game a lot. Great writting, got me by surprise. The visuals are pretty nice too. Great work!
 
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bobdillan

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My life was a lie D: still her approach was tsundere.
I was never implying that she didn't act tsundere, I apologise if i conveyed that message, I was merely saying that she was pretending to be something she was not (not actually a tsundere just pretending). in the story it is because she was scared of what the mc might think of or reject her. but deep down she is a feisty softy. aka my kinda wahman.
 
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Deadlyreaper

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OMG! Deadlyreaper actually praising a game. The world will end tomorrow....

You know I'm just kidding, don't you? Hey, hey, hey! Put down that scythe!

;)
There are many games I like and write it but I also have no problem with writing if I think that is a game total crap or the mc as in almost all games a useless embarrassing cowardly total failure and idiot or sunders what in games total bullshit is unfortunately most too cowardly to write that is also always easier to find

everything really great and if I see games the 7 or 8 months nothing new brings total brainless grind a mc you just just constantly with one baseball bat wants to hit the head because of such a wretched sissy (as in the tyrant) then I write that although I think the game is actually good because it has such a gigantic potential but what is so ridiculous in the example of that mc is such a total failure and so nothing can ever apologize

to everyone to make bitch mom and bigsis on the coruptions way let's show what's going on and she'll cut it down properly but nothing he's just pathetic and says but buts but .... and apologizes ....... and then always the ridiculous reactions the game is still in the early development

(yes, certainly after more than 7 months) or if you do not like it then do not play it but to think about it maybe there is something true about it that most of them would not even hurt their heads and there is something like that also no liks

and you say put down that scythe??? well too late look at your face on the picture all the scars :p:angel:
 
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bobdillan

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There are many games I like and write it but I also have no problem with writing if I think that is a game total crap or the mc as in almost all games a useless embarrassing cowardly total failure and idiot or sunders what in games total bullshit is unfortunately most too cowardly to write that is also always easier to find

everything really great and if I see games the 7 or 8 months nothing new brings total brainless grind a mc you just just constantly with one baseball bat wants to hit the head because of such a wretched sissy (as in the tyrant) then I write that although I think the game is actually good because it has such a gigantic potential but what is so ridiculous in the example of that mc is such a total failure and so nothing can ever apologize

to everyone to make bitch mom and bigsis on the coruptions way let's show what's going on and she'll cut it down properly but nothing he's just pathetic and says but buts but .... and apologizes ....... and then always the ridiculous reactions the game is still in the early development

(yes, certainly after more than 7 months) or if you do not like it then do not play it but to think about it maybe there is something true about it that most of them would not even hurt their heads and there is something like that also no liks

and you say put down that scythe??? well too late look at your face on the picture all the scars :p:angel:
out of curiosity what do you think about milf city? how the mc isn't a total bitch and actually has some balls.
 
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Deadlyreaper

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out of curiosity what do you think about milf city? how the mc isn't a total bitch and actually has some balls.
I like milfy city this is a game with fantastic graphics animations and it is not such a grind game I also like the fact that the mom is behind the mc and she really wants him and does everything for it (even if the mc has to do a lot to enable the date which was then so rashly interrupted by dad ^^)
 

fsap1

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"Demo 0.1" This was supposed to be a quick play to get a feel of the game and I ended up spending the whole night playing it. Great stuff. Good story, great characters, cute girls and nice art.

My only gripe is a MC in a porn game that's not interested in sex, very clueless and not perverted at all... The girls are throwing themselves at him and he just brushes them off.

It works for the story but it can get frustrating at times since the game is very linear so you have no say in the matter.
 
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