VN Ren'Py Origin Story [v0.5.0] [JDOR]

[motseer]

That's exactly why i really don't care if she's pissed that the MC chooses Moonsong as his first, it's pure hypocrisy on her part. MC should stay virgin for her while she is specifically seeking out people she expects to get fucked so she can experience it.

I mean, should one be happy to hear that she wanted to experience geting fucked by x amount of people just so her first time with the MC is good ...and it not being her real body changes little imo.

I really liked her character until that part and how she does that for 2 years, after that i put her on the reject list, also unlikely that she will stop using her powers on others, which is still cheating territory imo ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

This makes her character more realistic to me. She's not perfect and even good intentions can lead you down a crooked road sometimes. I like it... as long as it's not overplayed.

 

[HornyyPussy]

This makes her character more realistic to me. She's not perfect and even good intentions can lead you down a crooked road sometimes. I like it... as long as it's not overplayed.

Yepp, makes her human. And as others have said, it's basically like her watching advanced porn (and considering the MC's wanking habits.....).

No idea how anyone can consider it cheating on her part......

 

[Nightwing94]

good update

 

[Jacquesdor]

Just got around to finishing Chapter 2.

Wow, Jacquesdor this was another great Chapter.
I found it really fun!

Thanks!

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1) Regarding the narration itself, I honestly couldn't tell what was added. But that's mostly due to me not remembering what exactly was in the original narration, and that is fine (even the OG narration was good to begin with)

It was mostly the stuff about the world now having power-specific cities where people with certain powersets are forcibly relocated and the impact that would have on Amber.

2) MC's room TV: that gameshow contestant scene had me chuckling (vomitting on both sides)

Glad you liked that, it had me chuckling as I was writing it.

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Good guess! Though I did see a comment somewhere, maybe even here, where someone guessed exactly what it was. So you weren’t the closest.

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Thanks for taking the time to write all of that, I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to do so.

 

[Bnshy]

Android ported version?

 

[MccCoder]

Hey. There's no sandbox. It's very much a linear visual novel which occasionally dips into a brief free-roaming section... there's one in this first chapter which lasts about 40 minutes if you explore it fully, and most of that is flashbacks and conversations which just follow the traditional visual novel approach anyway.

the flashbacks were a really nice detail, i've never seen it done that way and it worked really well, they helped getting invested in the characters.

tried the game for the first time today, it's already in my top 10 , and i've played a lot of really good games, and superhero stuff isn't even my thing

 

[Mildendo]

the flashbacks were a really nice detail, i've never seen it done that way and it worked really well, they helped getting invested in the characters.

tried the game for the first time today, it's already in my top 10 , and i've played a lot of really good games, and superhero stuff isn't even my thing

Came here to say almost exactly this. This is brilliant and frequently hilarious and I've only just got to the end of chapter 1 and I absolutely freaking love it.

... Also this is not in any way a criticism but I have to point it out because for some reason I'm wired to notice these things: tickled by the occasional little slips of British English -- BrE "sat" for AmE "sitting", BrE "at the weekend" for AmE "on the weekend", and even tinier stuff like "sorted". (Again, not a criticism. Don't change a thing. )

 

[Tenchip3d0]

LIs are sluts? It's fine.

 

[Jacquesdor]

Came here to say almost exactly this. This is brilliant and frequently hilarious and I've only just got to the end of chapter 1 and I absolutely freaking love it.

... Also this is not in any way a criticism but I have to point it out because for some reason I'm wired to notice these things: tickled by the occasional little slips of British English -- BrE "sat" for AmE "sitting", BrE "at the weekend" for AmE "on the weekend", and even tinier stuff like "sorted". (Again, not a criticism. Don't change a thing. )

Lol thanks, you'll soon get why I made Emerald to be British, at least she can get away with it.

 

[JJJ84]

Thanks!

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It was mostly the stuff about the world now having power-specific cities where people with certain powersets are forcibly relocated and the impact that would have on Amber.



Glad you liked that, it had me chuckling as I was writing it.



Good guess! Though I did see a comment somewhere, maybe even here, where someone guessed exactly what it was. So you weren’t the closest.

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Thanks for taking the time to write all of that, I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to do so.

Thanks!

Couple more things;

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The potential for things to expand out, with the world building for this game; possibilities are just immense .

 

[Azriel55]

Great game, good story, good models, good worldbuilding. With that said, Evelyn is a complete hypocrite, she is not a virgin outside of doing it with her own body. She experiences ton of sex through others and gets mad if the MC does it with someone else (which she gets to experience also). That is not even mentioning how she is ignoring peoples boundaries and spying on them. The other issue is Parker, wow, she is a crappy mom figure. Bringing random dudes home to bang and skipping out on the MC's birthday to bang the waiter is pretty low. Wish the MC would stop wanting to bang her. Those are the only two I got issues with, the other characters seem fine. The power ended up the way I expected and fine with it. The character said his sperm tasted a certain way, would be interesting if each female character say it tastes different and happens to be something they like. Wonder if he will have more sex upgrades, like start producing pheromones to draw in more women and his sperm becoming mildly addictive, perhaps those he has sex with will get a temporary power upgrade. The only other thing is that I hope we do not stay at the base too long and we end up back at his home and back at school to interact with his friends and other characters.

 

[Simpgor]

With that said, Evelyn is a complete hypocrite, she is not a virgin outside of doing it with her own body.

my dude i dont care how good animations get in these games you cant count them as losing your virginity nor does someone really really visualizing like they are there having sex count, which is what her powers are since she cant change anything (while "being" the other person). Like seriously would you consider a sex toy that syncs up with a video as "losing your virginity outside of doing it with their own body (or someone elses)

Honestly i was ambivalent to her doing it (as I am to a LI having never ever been touched or seen by anything but air) but I really like how much it is acting as a litmus test, well done on that part dev

 

[Ghost'']

Origin Story [v0.2.0] Unofficial Android Port

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Android Port Updated..

 

[mare44]

gg

 

[divingmedic]

Lol thanks, you'll soon get why I made Emerald to be British, at least she can get away with it.

I spent 1980-1982 in England. To this day I hear a British accent in a woman and it brings back oh so many very fond memories.

 

[Hercule_Poirot]

I draw the line on wolf on wolf NTR, how dare you?

PS: Just joking, that's hilarious.

 

[Bingoogus]

So i played the first release and now coming back to the second i've found myself not being able to remember everyone and their powers, the game could do with a bio's page in future releases and such a thing will only become more important as more characters come into the story so i'd suggest that be a thing that is done sooner rather than later mr dev.

 

[WICKEDp4th]

So i played the first release and now coming back to the second i've found myself not being able to remember everyone and their powers, the game could do with a bio's page in future releases and such a thing will only become more important as more characters come into the story so i'd suggest that be a thing that is done sooner rather than later mr dev.

Agreed! Good Idea.

Jacquesdor !

 

[divingmedic]

So i played the first release and now coming back to the second i've found myself not being able to remember everyone and their powers, the game could do with a bio's page in future releases and such a thing will only become more important as more characters come into the story so i'd suggest that be a thing that is done sooner rather than later mr dev.

I'm older, I usually go back and start the game from the beginning if it has been long enough time from the last update. Besides I'm retired so it gives something to do.

 

[Wazzatheboss]

Just finish the update and it was awesome. The secenes were great. Congrats to dev for delivering a great chapter after an already good demo.

Sombe observations :
- Like said above, a bio for the characters and a summary of the interactions so far would be a great addition
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Excited to see what comes next !