VN Ren'Py Origin Story [v0.5.0] [JDOR]

[Johan_0000]

Quick comment regarding Evelyn, if you don't turn down Moonsong the first time, you don't get that initial Moonsong/Evelyn threesome, so your first time with both of them actually is solo on that path.

I'm confident that jacq is going to give each girl their moment to shine. But I also think that if you're going full harem (which the dev actually suggests), the girls are going to know about each other and potentially talk about it. I suspect the structure will be more like polyamory than your typical harem, especially if you leave Lesbian content on.

Yeah, I just needed to voice out my concerns, yk let go of any potential frustration lol.
I didn't turn down Moonsong th 1st time especially bc of that. I felt like she had too much of a head start compared to the other LIs.
I was thinking like you abt how that harem will work. I just want each girl to have he moment with the MC alone, then they couold go and do an orgie for all I care lol.

Anyway, thx hearing you say that kinda made me feel better about the whole thing. Yk smt you just need to bitch abt things (while keeping it respectful ofc) to feel better lol.




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[Reniere]

eh, no... you can say she is a latino as well... that's how language works.

Also, on another note...

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holy shit that was deliciously brutal and I'm all for it

idk if anybody has replied to this yet but.... Latina is female and Latino is Male thats how my language works we dont see gender neutral. we call them what they are female(latina) male(latino) dont try to ruin my language please. the previous guy was correct

 

[Jericho85]

Finally got to play this and I have to say it's rly frkin good.
I won't lie the whole Evelyn storyline didn't interest me that much bc I don't like when it feels like one of the LIs got more play("advantage") than the others .
I don't rly know how to explain it but I kinda like when everyone gets their time and THEN we can envision some threesome... Don't misundestand I would find rly hot having her with MC on some threesomes or whatsover. However I rly hope she won't stick around him like glue and that we we'll get to play without her being around all the time (idk if I make sense).... How could I explain it? Kinda difficult as I don't rly know how to word it, it's like I don't want her to steal the intimacy I would like MC to develop with other characters. Lol ik I kinda sound ridiculous.
I discovered I hated that while playing an AVN where the "main" LI (f$ck it there shouldn't be a main LI to begin with lol) would be in litteraly most of the sex scenes and the ones she wasn't in, we'd get MC recounting her those events. Don't ask why it was a real turn off for me lol maybe I'm just a piece of shit who is into cheating, which is contradicting since I don't like when MC cheats. I actually like when my MC tells the person he's a polygamous guy lol. Ig I just don't like it when they want to know everything. Weird maybe that's a kink, I don't rly know what to call it lol, a turn off? maybe...



Anyway, lol let's talk a bit more abt the game. There's some big potential for epic fights, however I think those need to happen b4 he gets a full gasp of his abilities bc then he'd kinda break the game lol. With that Courtney girl's power he could litteraly be invincible to some point a bit like Obito's kamui. Naruto spoiler
I rly hope the author doesn't do fight scenes that last only 2 secs. I hope he pours as much of his soul in the fight scenes as he poured in those sex scenes. Can't wait for them, I won't lie I would have liked it if Mc tried to figure more abt his powers without relying too much on others (like maybe there are central powers that if you mastery up it lvl up all the power on that branch of the power treehold, alas it's bit early for that bu you get the idea, just want him to try things). Idk rly it could be anything, I would just have liked it if he expereimented a bit more with them. He littraly has a guy who can teleport him in the desert, bunker... to try them without being seen lol. If I was him I'd also begin searching for smn with regenerative abilities so that he can try his power without risking his life lol.

I think you get what I mean, Ik most of you are here for the sex but this sh1t got more potential than just being all abt sex. I hope the dev/s will make use of it.

Totally unrelated but Fraze seems super strong lol. Idk he kinda gives the vibe of that beggar guys who just want to have fun but is super cheat lol. He's just a tad more crazy lol. I may be spouting bs I admit I didn't get much sleep lol.



Anyway, I wihsh y'all the best and gl dev/s




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As far as quantity of Evelyn scenes vs other girls, keep in mind that we're only 5 chapters in. There are a lot more to go. So while Evelyn got more screentime in this update than other girls, later chapters are likely to focus on other girls just as much. Besides, I'd disagree that she's had more content than other girls in the first place. She barely even appeared in CH4, and she's really only had 2 sex scenes so far. Moonsong has had 4 and several other girls have had at least 1.

As far as "sticking around him like glue", I'm not sure what to tell you. Evelyn is a very important character. Officially she's the MC's "best friend" but she's really the MC's girlfriend if you're on her route. AND she's a cuckquean who is literally going to be helping her boyfriend shag other girls for powers. She's probably going to continue to be very involved with MC going forward.

I really doubt that being on Evelyn's route is going to impede any romantic relationships with other girls. She's already let both MC and Amber know that she's cool with them after all even knowing that Amber has been in love with MC for a long time too. She knows that sex with Amber wouldn't strictly be about power absorption.

 

[Rehwyn]

As far as quantity of Evelyn scenes vs other girls, keep in mind that we're only 5 chapters in. There are a lot more to go. So while Evelyn got more screentime in this update than other girls, later chapters are likely to focus on other girls much. Besides, I'd disagree that she's had more content than other girls in the first place. She barely even appeared in CH4, and she's really only had 2 sex scenes so far. Moonsong has had 4 and several other girls have had at least 1.

As far as "sticking around him like glue", I'm not sure what to tell you. Evelyn is a very important character. Officially she's the MC's "best friend" but she's really the MC's girlfriend if you're on her route. AND she's a cuckquean who is literally going to be helping her boyfriend shag other girls for powers. She's probably going to continue to be very involved with MC going forward.

I really doubt that being on Evelyn's route is going to impede any romantic relationships with other girls. She's already let both MC and Amber know that she's cool with them after all even knowing that Amber has been in love with MC for a long time too. She knows that sex with Amber wouldn't strictly be about power absorption.

Agreed on this.

On the "happy Evelyn" path she even tells you (via Celeste telepathy) to have a good time on your date with Moonsong, so it's not a stretch to assume she'll be fine, if not encouraging, with romantic moments with other LIs in the future.

Truly the best girlfriend you could ask for with this type of power.

 

[Jericho85]

Agreed on this.

On the "happy Evelyn" path she even tells you (via Celeste telepathy) to have a good time on your date with Moonsong, so it's not a stretch to assume she'll be fine, if not encouraging, with romantic moments with other LIs in the future.

Truly the best girlfriend you could ask for with this type of power.

Yeah that's another one. That date with moonsong happened after he'd already gotten her power and Evelyn was cool with that too. So I think the whole "I'm going to help him get powers" thing is just an excuse. I think she's totally fine with MC actually forming romantic relationships with other girls. Not just for sex, and not just for getting powers either. I think she wants him to have other girlfriends.

 

[Johan_0000]

As far as quantity of Evelyn scenes vs other girls, keep in mind that we're only 5 chapters in. There are a lot more to go. So while Evelyn got more screentime in this update than other girls, later chapters are likely to focus on other girls much. Besides, I'd disagree that she's had more content than other girls in the first place. She barely even appeared in CH4, and she's really only had 2 sex scenes so far. Moonsong has had 4 and several other girls have had at least 1.

As far as "sticking around him like glue", I'm not sure what to tell you. Evelyn is a very important character. Officially she's the MC's "best friend" but she's really the MC's girlfriend if you're on her route. AND she's a cuckquean who is literally going to be helping her boyfriend shag other girls for powers. She's probably going to continue to be very involved with MC going forward.

I really doubt that being on Evelyn's route is going to impede any romantic relationships with other girls. She's already let both MC and Amber know that she's cool with them after all even knowing that Amber has been in love with MC for a long time too. She knows that sex with Amber wouldn't strictly be about power absorption.

I get what you're saying I'm just hoping we get our intimate moments with other girls without having looming over our shoulder. I never said anything abt her having a lot more content than other girls. I couldn't care less abt that. On the contrary the more the merrier as they say lol.
I just have a hard time adaptating when there's alrdy a "main" love interest set for MC like I said here.

Yeah, I just needed to voice out my concerns, yk let go of any potential frustration lol.
I didn't turn down Moonsong th 1st time especially bc of that. I felt like she had too much of a head start compared to the other LIs.
I was thinking like you abt how that harem will work. I just want each girl to have he moment with the MC alone, then they couold go and do an orgie for all I care lol.

Anyway, thx hearing you say that kinda made me feel better about the whole thing. Yk smt you just need to bitch abt things (while keeping it respectful ofc) to feel better lol.




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I didn't say she was going to cockblock us.I just hope she lets the MC do his own things if I can say it like that. A bit like when he had gone to the sisterhood.
Like I said most of my concerns comes from another game where the main LI would litteraly be in pretty much every scene with every girl (or MC would tell her everything abt his love life retaining no sense of intimacy with his other lovers, and she is in her right ig since she's the main LI that's kinda why I don't like that concept). I liked her at 1st but seeing so much of her especially during moments where I'd like the Mc to be with his lover alone rly started getting on my nerves and at some point I just abandoned that game. Hell, I don't even remember his name anymore.
Idk man maybe this is just a weird thing only I feel lol
In other terms I just needed to vent lol.


However I'm happy to see many of you trying to make me see the positive side of it. Good comunity there.





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[Johan_0000]

Btw does smn kno at wich rate the dev/s go for the updates.




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[Rehwyn]

Btw does smn kno at wich rate the dev/s go for the updates.




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It's been roughly every 2-3 months, but it seems that in order to keep releases consistently spaced it's most likely going to be around every 3 months more frequently going forward.

Yeah that's another one. That date with moonsong happened after he'd already gotten her power and Evelyn was cool with that too. So I think the whole "I'm going to help him get powers" thing is just an excuse. I think she's totally fine with MC actually forming romantic relationships with other girls. Not just for sex, and not just for getting powers either. I think she wants him to have other girlfriends.

There's a term used pretty frequently in polyamory discussions, "compersion":

In the world of consensually nonmonogamous relationships, it more specifically relates to the happiness someone finds in their partner seeking out and enjoying sexual and romantic intimacy with other people.

As long as MC is with her, Evelyn seems to have that in spades. When she says she just wants MC to be happy, I believe it.

 

[Elhemeer]

Not so sure about that. The principal already warned Jack about trying to get laid to increase his powers.

I mean, yes, but we're talking about either blackmailing the teacher or joining her probably-illegal "prostitute" ring (which you might be the only one actually having sex with their primary body?) so not sure that's as much a deterrent as it should be ...

 

[Ssato243]

can we build an harem with the teacher i will make her to only fuck me

 

[Elduriel]

lets just say if grammar debates are the biggest problem a game has we are not doing too bad

 

[Jacowboy]

lets just say if grammar debates are the biggest problem a game has we are not doing too bad

true dat

 

[Ssato243]

nice

 

[RC-1138 Boss]

Let's discuss if Amber fapped while watching Jack and Evelyn, like a creepy stalker or if she just watched them doing the deed, like a vanilla stalker.

 

[Reniere]

Let's discuss if Amber fapped while watching Jack and Evelyn, like a creepy stalker or if she just watched them doing the deed, like a vanilla stalker.

Let me throw a different view.. Evelyn know Amber likes MC i feel she was invited lol

 

[miyuki25]

Who cares about grammar when our hero—the man, the myth, the legend—the one and only Brock "Cheeseman" Sandwood was done dirty once more! Not only was his power and the resulting loss of status left unchanged in the game's opening section, but this unjustifiably scorned milk-to-cheese superpower was only cemented further into lore by the fetish diary. With that being said, I, for one, fully support our greatest character's cottage-cheese-based fantasies. So, perhaps one day, in the far future, we shall observe his dreams come true, as he (a very rich man, and not just financially) lives his best diary-empire-running life, but until then we can but wait...

 

[Verbalvonitcomet]

Who cares about grammar when our hero—the man, the myth, the legend—the one and only Brock "Cheeseman" Sandwood was done dirty once more! Not only was his power and the resulting loss of status left unchanged in the game's opening section, but this unjustifiably scorned milk-to-cheese superpower was only cemented further into lore by the fetish diary. With that being said, I, for one, fully support our greatest character's cottage-cheese-based fantasies. So, perhaps one day, in the far future, we shall observe his dreams come true, as he (a very rich man, and not just financially) lives his best diary-empire-running life, but until then we can but wait...

You Sir have an Udderly obtuse view on the world... That's what you get from mainlining powdered milk.

 

[kibaris]

whit how Evelyn personality change so drasticaly for no reason,i mean she seem like a totaly different character, i wouldnt be surprised if in an update or two she would propose some threesome with other guys so that mc could also have their power, she want to help after all ... ^^

More seriously though, it seemed like Evelyn didnt have any control over her power,it's how she justified herself to mc,

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but now that mc have copied her power, she explain to mc that he have to focus on someone and then he can have a dream on a specific person he touched,

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meaning that if Evelyn wanted to avoid any indesirable dream, she could have done it easily, and yet she used a lack of control of her power as an excuse to focus on sex "dream" with other guys when she could have easily avoided any of the sex dream she had before .

( And no i'm not whining or anything i mention it because it seem like a big incoherence.)

 

[Rehwyn]

whit how Evelyn personality change so drasticaly for no reason,i mean she seem like a totaly different character, i wouldnt be surprised if in an update or two she would propose some threesome with other guys so that mc could also have their power, she want to help after all ... ^^

More seriously though, it seemed like Evelyn didnt have any control over her power,it's how she justified herself to mc,

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but now that mc have copied her power, she explain to mc that he have to focus on someone and then he can have a dream on a specific person he touched,

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meaning that if Evelyn wanted to avoid any indesirable dream, she could have done it easily, and yet she used a lack of control of her power as an excuse to focus on sex "dream" with other guys when she could have easily avoided any of the sex dream she had before .

( And no i'm not whining or anything i mention it because it seem like a big incoherence.)

At a different point in conversation, she mentions that it took her months to learn how to control her power. She didn't know it was touch-based or any of that, so was essentially viewing people seemingly at random. Eventually she figured out she was viewing people she had touched that day and then how to control that.

By then, she'd long lost the opportunity to be a "mental" virgin so she decided to give MC the only form of virginity she had left, the physical type. And she decided since she'd essentially lost her mental virginity already, why not use her gift to her advantage and learn everything she could to blow MC's mind the first time they shared actual physical sex together.

For MC, because Evelyn already knows how her power works, it will take way less time to learn to control, which is what she's started to try to teach him.

 

[Jericho85]

but now that mc have copied her power, she explain to mc that he have to focus on someone and then he can have a dream on a specific person he touched,

What she explained in CH5 was how to select a host, but it obviously takes a little practice because MC failed. The way her power works is that her host is random (among who she's touched) unless she selects a host. As far as control, that's literally the only thing she has control over with her power. Once she's asleep, she's scrying someone she's touched, whether she wants to or not.

She also has no idea what's going to happen in that precog dream. She could brush against a domestic abuser or victim in the store and have to live through some pretty despicable events basically a captive audience with full sensory engagement. So really the only way to avoid undesirable dreams for certain is to never touch anyone. She can at least mitigate it be trying to avoid touching someone she knows is abusive but as she explained, that's not always possible.