VN Ren'Py Package Perfect [Demo] [Lewtopia]

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Lewtopia

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If that's the type of route this is going to go then that's a good way to alienate majority of players.
Had enough of those "messages" in modern games, thank you. :cautious:
Hey, I've just answered that topic, I hope it'll make things clear for you. Quote is below.

Thank you so much for your feedback! I'd like to clarify a couple of points.
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Paarl

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jfc there's a simple, obvious answer to this - because the dev wanted to. Why the fuck are so many people coming in here and complaining that the thing the dev has made isn't catering perfectly to their interests?

OP, this is a good demo for an interesting looking game set-up. Dickgirl in a conservative location concerned about people finding out is an neat premise, character models all look good so far, and the characters themselves seem relatively interesting. Could the cock be smaller? Probably. Should you make it smaller? Nahhh, you do you, if this is what you want to make, please dear god keep making it. That jerk-off scene was pretty great, and I'm very much looking forward to seeing where you're going with this. Big-cocked cute ginger dickgirl with a feminine body, the promise of incest, and that range of future planned tags? As long as you're planning on making some of the more extreme content clearly labelled and/or easily disabled!
i mean, i understand the dev wants that, but why? i beleive its exaggerated big, the mc´s boobs are great, the face is really cute and beautiful but the dick is so big that its contrats and funny, i see that and i only want to laugh and i cant take the game serious, i know is stupid but i think the game would be better if the dick was smaller
 

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Generally agree with the positive comments. Nice visuals, clean writing; looks like solid characters.
Dick size isn't what I'd have picked but eh. I'll judge it on how the actual scenes look and are written ;)

Of course, not too much to say about the overall direction of the game this early - I suppose a critical question to me would be how quickly things progress from the start. If she's endlessly insecure all the time, well, that can get tedious. If it's just the jump-off point but develops reasonably quickly in an understandable way from there then I feel it's a solid beginning.

Two smaller things of note; unusual to see an actual dad in a porn game. I even kinda like him; he's making a good point and grandma's being a bit of an ass to Ivy ^^#

... and, well; I often see this in porn games but POV consistency is important. Unless it's some sort of omniscient narrative perspective (which this clearly isn't) we shouldn't be able to randomly read other characters' thoughts. Or suddenly have out-of-body experiences to behind-closed-doors. imo, it's important to consistently stick with 3rd-person-limited for a tighter narrative that's not messily interrupted by narratively illogical knowledge and scenes.
 
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ason238

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Just finished the demo, and i liked it. I liked the bit of humor at the end of as well. As i mentioned before, i am team "futa is bigger" but also i fancy the more niche genre Futa on male. I saw Isaac is in the gallery so i look forward to their scene(s). I am not a fan of NTR, but if it does show up in the game, i hope Futa breaks up the bully couple by cucking the douche football player.

I know alot of people are back and forth about the dick size but i like big futas BECAUSE they are unrealistic and don't exist. I read VNs for the same reason i play games, i want to escape reality for a bit. I think there are plenty of games out there that keep things realistic, which are great, but sometimes I want something different.

Although i understand everyone is entitle to their opinion, maybe going forward, assume that the dick size will not change, and provide other feedback that the dev can use to improve their game.
 
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Kodek

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Negatives:

The writing here is... rough. The beginning felt way too heavy. I understand she's upset about her body, but it felt way too over the top, especially for a porn game. Showing her dream of everyone turning on her felt pretty gross. That dream sequence felt like this wasn't a porn game and more like something I would see in school about "accepting everyone".

Hated that "toxic masculinity" line. That crap is so overused anytime a girl gets mad at a dude. Would cut that from the game entirely.

For more examples on the writing, it gets a bit ridiculous. When we meet Hazel, her questions to Luna about her day are somehow exactly about events that happened to Luna at school earlier. It felt ridiculous. This omniscient kind of writing feels so out of place. Then the line Hazel says: "We accept you as you are." felt really bad. Like yes, we get it game, Luna is struggling with her having a dick and she would love to hear that someone else is accepting her. It just feels unearned and rushed. Then of course she has to ask why she wasn't allowed in Luna's room earlier, again making the writing feel rough and rushed. It's only the beginning of the game and it's like every character somehow knows about her massive dick and are trying to find ways to make her come out and say it. The dialogue in these instances just feel forced. Easily my biggest problem with the writing. Nothing feels natural.

Also, the MC's dick is just too big. The people complaining about it here are right. It needs to be smaller. I'd personally reduce it by a third. I don't get why she needs to have a dick the size of a damn horse. It just makes her situation so much more difficult to believe. Like, how has this monster horse dong not been found out yet after all this time? It needs to be believable.

Positives:

The female characters are pretty hot and well designed, and I was really surprised by the quality of the animations. The animations for a visual novel like this are easily some of the best I have ever seen.

I know I dogged on the writing but there were moments that I actually enjoyed, like the dinner scene when the dad accidentally tells Hazel to tell him everything about her day. Seeing everyone's expression was hilarious. That right there is the kind of stuff I am wanting in a game like this. More comedic, fun moments that don't feel preachy. A shame it came at the end of the demo, that's when I started to enjoy the game besides the one solo masturbation scene.

Overall the game is just way too heavy and problematic with her condition. The game is all doom and gloom where she worries about it every second she breathes. This was not fun to sit and read through because of that feeling for the entire demo until the funny bit at the end. The animations and character designs are almost enough for me to ignore the not so good writing. I'll keep an eye on this in hopes the writing gets better. I would suggest just lightening the story a bit with her situation.

My hopes for this game is to see some fun embarrassing moments of her trying to not get found out and not have it be so sad and frightening for her all the time. Would love to see her have sex with all her family members too (except her dad and grandma, that'd be gross). Overall just make this game a bit more fun.
Well said, I, myself, tried to not dewell too much in the writing as this is only a demo, but it can use work. But there's not enough writing in the demo for me to pass my honest judgement on it, which is why I will wait for more progress to do a proper review.

I also loved the soft comedic moment with the family. I love those spontaneous moments in games, it makes the characters more alive and real for me. It's important to dewell deep into a character's inner thoughts and more intense emotions, but only that makes for a dull read. It can be appreaciated, of course, but I feel that it don't show the character's full espectrum of personality.

Liked your review even if I disagree with some points, it's good critics like this that help create a good game and a good atmosphere!
 
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PhineasFlynn

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I used to be surprised at how big dicks the guys in all these games have. Then I came across the first futa game and found out that those guys aren't exaggerating at all... Well, today I came across this and it dawned on me that no one has actually been exaggerating until now. And that they only choose immature little dicks for porn
 
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forestgrump

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This has the potential to be an amazing game. I do however agree that the horse cock is not needed, reduce it a bit. It is to unbalanced. You could almost go down have that size and she would be gorgeous.
I would also agree with the writing a little bit. I understand the theme, but for this type of novel it could be a little lighter and still show what you are wanting to put out there.
I wish you all the luck to continue this great beginning to what you want to share with us. I will be following this game and can't wait for the next round.

P.S. when it comes to sex, you do you eveyone will enjoy it the same even if a scene or two makes them uncomfortable, give options to skip.
 

Kodek

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Can we bring back burning at the stake for reviews like this?
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It's already taken down, but this won't be the first of the sort. People that will point anything as a reason for a 1 star review, just because they hate futa. Many of those will appear and they will say whatever but their real reason is because they 'dislike' the content. Which I will always find funny, those people really invest a lot of time on something they, apparently, hate.
 
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Kodek

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Generally agree with the positive comments. Nice visuals, clean writing; looks like solid characters.
Dick size isn't what I'd have picked but eh. I'll judge it on how the actual scenes look and are written ;)

Of course, not too much to say about the overall direction of the game this early - I suppose a critical question to me would be how quickly things progress from the start. If she's endlessly insecure all the time, well, that can get tedious. If it's just the jump-off point but develops reasonably quickly in an understandable way from there then I feel it's a solid beginning.

Two smaller things of note; unusual to see an actual dad in a porn game. I even kinda like him; he's making a good point and grandma's being a bit of an ass to Ivy ^^#

... and, well; I often see this in porn games but POV consistency is important. Unless it's some sort of omniscient narrative perspective (which this clearly isn't) we shouldn't be able to randomly read other characters' thoughts. Or suddenly have out-of-body experiences to behind-closed-doors. imo, it's important to consistently stick with 3rd-person-limited for a tighter narrative that's not messily interrupted by narratively illogical knowledge and scenes.
YES! I forgot to mention this, the Dev is a real champ for not killing MC's dad right from the begginning. This earned so many points for them already.
 

Lewtopia

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Generally agree with the positive comments. Nice visuals, clean writing; looks like solid characters.
Dick size isn't what I'd have picked but eh. I'll judge it on how the actual scenes look and are written ;)

Of course, not too much to say about the overall direction of the game this early - I suppose a critical question to me would be how quickly things progress from the start. If she's endlessly insecure all the time, well, that can get tedious. If it's just the jump-off point but develops reasonably quickly in an understandable way from there then I feel it's a solid beginning.

Two smaller things of note; unusual to see an actual dad in a porn game. I even kinda like him; he's making a good point and grandma's being a bit of an ass to Ivy ^^#

... and, well; I often see this in porn games but POV consistency is important. Unless it's some sort of omniscient narrative perspective (which this clearly isn't) we shouldn't be able to randomly read other characters' thoughts. Or suddenly have out-of-body experiences to behind-closed-doors. imo, it's important to consistently stick with 3rd-person-limited for a tighter narrative that's not messily interrupted by narratively illogical knowledge and scenes.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment! I'm glad you enjoyed my game.

About POV consistency - I completely agree with your feedback. It's challenging to convey other characters' emotions and thoughts without using inner monologues. I'm committed to exploring alternative narrative techniques that might work better, and I'd genuinely welcome any suggestions you might have about effective ways to accomplish this.

Feedbacks like this helps me grow as a game developer, and I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts with me
 
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Kontralta

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It's already taken down, but this won't be the first of the sort. People that will point anything as a reason for a 1 star review, just because they hate futa. Many of those will appear and they will say whatever but their real reason is because they 'dislike' the content. Which I will always find funny, those people really invest a lot of time on something they, apparently, hate.
It's was taken down because I sent a report. At least the moderators work quickly, that's good.
 

mafiki5384

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YES! I forgot to mention this, the Dev is a real champ for not killing MC's dad right from the begginning. This earned so many points for them already.
No. Dev broke the first rule of incest. Sex with mother = dead father. No cuckoldad. Rules of nature.
 

2MoshPit

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Good game, so far Lewtopia !
I like all the characters (not that douche Brandon) and I think the size of Luna's dick is good as it is. When I want to have a cigar, I smoke one - don't like "normal sized" dicks at all!
A futa's dick have to be big and don't let others tell you something else! We are here in a fantasy-world and not in real life.
The renders are also very good and I've enjoyed the demo a lot - keep going with this.

best regards
 
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