Soo...it had been a couple of years since I've played this one. I was pleasantly surprised by the writing. The devs were able to keep the flow throughout the game so far, which is, considering that it's already quite long, an accomplishment in and on it itself.
Despite the circumstances and themes, Jeff & Mutt were able to keep the tone rather light, sometimes comical even. This can be a good thing, of course, but it also means the stakes are not as high as they could be. The initial excitement in finding the buttons of every carnation wears off pretty fast when they're are willing to go to extremes that quickly.
I personally think it would made the voyeuristic/sadistic side of the club more interesting, if masturbating or being naked in front of an (influential) audience was a bigger step for the girls and it would have added more spice if the audience wasn't as passive. We don't see why they vote and for whom and what game they play. Why are their bets not influencing the events? Have a few who won a prior game to be selected to fill the goblet of cum instead of making it anonymous. The faces they make and the reaction of the lucky sperm donor is what would make it more personal and ease the girls into doing more extremer things step by step without pushing the envelope too soon. I mean the whole event, at least officially, is not about turning a couple of woman into hookers, right? The club is already full of them. There must be more to this than getting into their pants.
Having a mole/Judas goat (like Felicia) among the girls would have also added another layer of suspense which this game is currently lacking a bit IMO. Her photo shooting was a great example how the rich audience could interact with the carnations and live out their power fantasies: ordering a wife to pleasure herself in front her influential husband. Give her push to fuel an unknown exhibitionistic fantasy or make her uncomfortable with embarrassing challenges. My 2 cents.